List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Avoid repeating words and improve sentence structure for clarity. For example, instead of repeating 'before' and 'prevents', say: 'I make a list before I go shopping because it helps me organize what I need to buy and prevents me from purchasing unnecessary items.'

例: I always make a list before shopping because it helps me organize the items I need and stops me from buying things I don't really need.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example: 'Yes, I make a list of important tasks that need to be completed each day. This helps me stay organized and saves time because I don't forget anything and have to go back later.'

例: Yes, I create a list of important tasks to complete each day. This way, I stay organized and save time since I don't forget anything and avoid returning to unfinished work.

提案: Clarify your ideas and avoid contradictory statements. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly. For example: 'Some people may dislike making lists because they think it's a waste of time, even though lists actually help organize work and prevent forgetting important tasks.'

例: Some people might avoid making lists because they believe it's time-consuming, but in reality, lists help organize tasks and ensure nothing important is forgotten.

提案: Improve sentence fluency and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words to explain preferences clearly. For example: 'It depends on the situation. Usually, I write my lists on paper, but if I'm in a hurry, I use my phone to quickly jot them down.'

例: Depending on the situation, I usually prefer writing lists on paper. However, if I'm short on time, I quickly type them on my phone for convenience.

× Yes, I make a list before before I go shopping because it helps me to organize things that I should buy and it also prevents prevents me to stop buying unnecessary things.

✓ Yes, I make a list before I go shopping because it helps me organize the things I should buy and it also prevents me from buying unnecessary things.

The phrase 'prevents me to stop buying' is incorrect. The verb 'prevent' should be followed by 'from' plus the gerund form of the verb, so 'prevents me from buying' is correct. Also, the repeated words 'before before' and 'prevents prevents' are errors and should be removed. Additionally, 'helps me to organize things that I should buy' is better expressed as 'helps me organize the things I should buy' for clarity and conciseness.

× It's also helps me to organize, organize all the things.

✓ It also helps me organize all the things.

The phrase 'It's also helps' is incorrect because 'It' is the subject and the verb should be 'helps' without 'is'. The contraction 'It's' stands for 'It is', which does not fit here. Also, the repeated word 'organize' should be removed. The correct form is 'It also helps me organize all the things.'

× Maybe because they are thinking that it's just a waste of time or in fact it will help you to organize your work and also not forget something regarding to your work.

✓ Maybe because they think that it's just a waste of time, but in fact it helps you organize your work and also not forget anything related to your work.

The phrase 'regarding to your work' is incorrect; 'regarding' does not require 'to'. The correct phrase is 'related to your work' or 'regarding your work'. Also, 'they are thinking' is better as 'they think' for general statements. 'It will help' is changed to 'it helps' to match the present tense context. 'Not forget something' is better expressed as 'not forget anything' for clarity.

× It depends on the situation, but mostly I. Shut down the. The notes in a piece of paper, but if I have to hurry up I would just write it on my phone.

✓ It depends on the situation, but mostly I write the notes on a piece of paper, but if I have to hurry up, I just write them on my phone.

The original sentence contains fragments and unclear phrases like 'I. Shut down the. The notes'. The correct preposition for writing notes is 'on a piece of paper', not 'in'. Also, 'would just write' is better as 'just write' to indicate habitual action. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper preposition use.