List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I make a list when I go to the grocery store" instead of "I still make a list when I went to the grocery stores." Also, avoid repeating the same idea, like mentioning twice that the list helps you remember what to buy. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I go grocery shopping, especially to help my mom prepare dinner. This helps me remember all the ingredients we need and prevents me from forgetting important items.

提案: Focus on using correct phrases and grammar, such as "make a list" instead of "Make Love." Use consistent verb tenses and avoid fragmented sentences. Also, use linking words like "because" and "so that" to connect your ideas clearly.

例: Yes, I love to make lists for my work, especially when I was part of a school community because it helped me organize tasks I needed to complete today or tomorrow. I often combine a checklist with a to-do list so that I can track my progress and work more productively and efficiently.

提案: Avoid sentence fragments and improve subject-verb agreement. For example, say "I am the type of person who loves to make lists" and "others don't like to make lists." Use linking words like "because" and "although" properly to connect ideas logically.

例: Although I love making lists to avoid forgetting things, I understand that some people don't like them because if they don't follow the list strictly, it can feel like a waste of time and make them less productive.

提案: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. For example, say "I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is always with me" instead of unclear phrases like "my phone is 24 seconds in my hands." Avoid confusing expressions and use linking words to explain reasons clearly.

例: Personally, I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is always with me, which helps remind me of my tasks. On the other hand, paper lists can easily get lost, making me less productive.

× Oh yes, I still make a list when I went to the grocery stores especially to help my mom to buy integrating for dinner.

✓ Oh yes, I still make a list when I go to the grocery stores especially to help my mom buy ingredients for dinner.

The sentence mixes present tense 'make' with past tense 'went'. Since the action is habitual, present tense 'go' should be used. Also, 'integrating' is incorrect; the correct word is 'ingredients'. The phrase 'to help my mom to buy' can be simplified to 'help my mom buy'.

× Because it helps me to remember what I should buy and preventing me from forgotten other important items that I supposed to buy for the dinner.

✓ Because it helps me to remember what I should buy and prevents me from forgetting other important items that I am supposed to buy for dinner.

After 'helps me to', the verb should be in base form 'remember'. The phrase 'preventing me from forgotten' is incorrect; it should be 'prevents me from forgetting' because 'prevent' is followed by 'from' plus gerund form. Also, 'I supposed' should be 'I am supposed'.

× Oh yes, I definitely love to Make Love for my work, especially when I was in a school community 'cause it helped me to sorting out what else that I have to done today or tomorrow.

✓ Oh yes, I definitely love to make lists for my work, especially when I was in a school community because it helped me to sort out what else I have to do today or tomorrow.

'Make Love' is incorrect and likely a typo for 'make lists'. 'Sorting out' should be 'sort out' after 'helped me to'. 'Have to done' should be 'have to do'. Also, 'cause' should be 'because' for formal clarity.

× And I often make a checklist together with A to do list to see which one I have completed.

✓ And I often make a checklist together with a to-do list to see which ones I have completed.

'A to do list' should be 'a to-do list' with hyphens. 'Which one' should be 'which ones' because multiple items can be completed.

× Although I'm the type of person who really loved to make list to make sure that I don't forget anything that I I'm not supposed to.

✓ Although I'm the type of person who really loves to make lists to make sure that I don't forget anything that I'm supposed to.

'Loved' should be 'loves' to agree with present tense 'I'm'. 'Make list' should be 'make lists' (plural). The phrase 'anything that I I'm not supposed to' is incorrect; it should be 'anything that I'm supposed to'.

× But I can definitely understand why the others doesn't like to make list 'cause for some of the people who doesn't really follow the list strictly, making list is actually a waste of time which make them more unproductive.

✓ But I can definitely understand why others don't like to make lists because some people don't really follow the list strictly; making lists is actually a waste of time which makes them more unproductive.

'The others doesn't' should be 'others don't' for subject-verb agreement. 'Make list' should be 'make lists'. 'Doesn't' should be 'don't' for plural 'people'. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular 'making lists'.

× Oh, in my personal opinions are prefers to make it on my phone 'cause my phone is 24 seconds in my hands which helps me to remind me whatever I have to do.

✓ Oh, in my personal opinion, I prefer to make it on my phone because my phone is always in my hands which helps remind me of whatever I have to do.

'Opinions are prefers' is incorrect; it should be 'opinion, I prefer'. '24 seconds in my hands' is incorrect; 'always in my hands' is appropriate. 'Helps me to remind me' is redundant; 'helps remind me' is correct.

× But on the piece of paper on the type of person of really love to allow stuffs uncontrollably so the paper might be missing continuously so it make me unproductive actually.

✓ But with a piece of paper, I am the type of person who really loves to allow stuff to be scattered uncontrollably, so the paper might go missing frequently, which actually makes me unproductive.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'on the piece of paper on the type of person of really love' is incorrect; it should be 'with a piece of paper, I am the type of person who really loves'. 'Allow stuffs uncontrollably' is unclear; 'allow stuff to be scattered uncontrollably' is clearer. 'Missing continuously' should be 'go missing frequently'. 'It make me' should be 'it makes me' for subject-verb agreement.