List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，并且注意时态和单词拼写。可以先直接回答问题，然后用具体例子支持。

例: Usually, I don't make a shopping list. I just walk around the supermarket and buy whatever catches my eye. However, when I need to buy important items, I make a detailed list to avoid forgetting anything. For example, last weekend I made a list to buy stationery.

提案: 回答中出现了重复和不完整的句子，建议直接回答问题，避免重复购物清单的内容，且句子要完整。可以用连接词使回答更连贯。

例: Yes, I always make a list for my work tasks. It helps me stay organized and saves time. For example, I write down important deadlines and meetings so I don't forget them.

提案: 回答表达不够清晰，语法和用词错误较多。建议用更准确的表达说明原因，并且避免口语化的填充词。

例: Some people don't like making lists because they believe they can remember everything in their mind. However, I find it difficult to remember all the things I need, so I always write them down.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不流畅的问题，建议简化句子结构，明确表达偏好，并使用连接词使回答更连贯。

例: It depends on the situation. Sometimes I prefer to write lists on paper because I don't want to be distracted by my phone. But usually, I use my phone to make lists because it's convenient and helps me stay organized.

× No, I you early strolled around the supermarket and buy whatever catches my eye.

✓ No, I usually stroll around the supermarket and buy whatever catches my eye.

这里的 'strolled' 是过去式，但句子表达的是习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时 'stroll'。另外，句中多余的 'you' 应删除。

× But there's a time then I need to buy necessary items.

✓ But there are times when I need to buy necessary items.

'there's' 是 'there is' 的缩写，表示单数，但这里指的是复数 'times'，应使用 'there are'。同时，'then' 应改为 'when' 表示时间关系。

× Then I will make a detailed shopping list in case I forget something in for example last weekend I need to buy some stationary.

✓ Then I will make a detailed shopping list in case I forget something. For example, last weekend I needed to buy some stationery.

句子结构混乱，'in case' 后应接完整句子，'for example' 应另起句子。'stationary' 是形容词，正确名词为 'stationery'。

× When I when it comes to some necessary items, I absolutely will make a shopping list.

✓ When it comes to some necessary items, I absolutely will make a shopping list.

句中多余的 'When I' 应删除，保持句子完整通顺。

× I think it was well for me because it saves time and.

✓ I think it works well for me because it saves time.

'was well' 用法错误，应为 'works well'。句子末尾不应以 'and' 结尾，应完整表达意思。

× Simply because maybe they can remember what they need in this in his mind, but for me it's not really realistic.

✓ Simply because maybe they can remember what they need in their mind, but for me it's not really realistic.

代词不一致，'they' 对应的应是复数 'their'，而不是单数 'his'。

× Actually every times I need to draw this.

✓ Actually every time I need to write this down.

'every times' 应为单数 'every time'，'draw this' 用词不当，应为 'write this down' 表示记下来。

× After all, there's sometimes then I don't have phone because I want that the phone distracted by eyes, so I won't get it out and I just shot make shopping lists on the paper.

✓ After all, sometimes I don't have my phone because I don't want to be distracted by it, so I won't take it out and I just make shopping lists on paper.

'there's sometimes then' 结构错误，应为 'sometimes'。'have phone' 缺少冠词，应为 'have my phone'。'want that the phone distracted by eyes' 语法错误，应改为 'don't want to be distracted by it'。'shot make' 应为 'just make'。

× But if I get my phone, I tend to making this on the phone.

✓ But if I have my phone, I tend to make this on the phone.

'tend to' 后应接动词原形 'make'，而不是动名词 'making'。