List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 문장 연결이 부자연스럽고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'avoid. To buy' 부분은 문장 연결이 매끄럽지 않습니다. 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하고, 불필요한 마침표를 제거하세요.

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping because it helps me manage my budget more effectively. For example, by making a list, I can avoid buying unnecessary items and make sure I don't forget anything important.

提案: 답변이 전반적으로 잘 구성되어 있으나, 'all this To Do List' 표현이 부자연스럽고, 문법적으로 'making lists help'는 'helps'로 수정해야 합니다. 더 자연스러운 표현과 문법에 주의하세요.

例: Yes, I always make a to-do list for my work because I have many tasks to complete every day. For example, I need to participate in my club activities and complete academic assignments. So, making lists helps me stay organized.

提案: 답변에 중복된 단어('they there')와 부자연스러운 표현('do some things more fairly')가 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 다듬고, 이유를 좀 더 구체적으로 설명하세요.

例: I think some people don't like making lists because they prefer to do things more freely. They may feel overwhelmed by strict plans and prefer to complete tasks spontaneously.

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 명확하지만, 'without extra paper' 대신 'without carrying extra paper'와 같은 표현으로 더 명확하게 할 수 있습니다. 또한, 연결어를 조금 더 다양하게 사용해 보세요.

例: I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is very portable and I always have it with me. Therefore, when I want to check my list, I can simply open my phone without carrying extra paper, which is very convenient.

× For example, by making a list I can avoid. To buy something unnecessary and I can make sure that I don't forget anything important.

✓ For example, by making a list, I can avoid buying something unnecessary and make sure that I don't forget anything important.

The original sentence is fragmented and incorrectly split into two parts. The phrase 'I can avoid.' is incomplete and should be connected with the following phrase to form a complete sentence. Also, 'to buy' should be changed to 'buying' to correctly follow the verb 'avoid'.

× So making lists help me to stay organized.

✓ So making lists helps me to stay organized.

The subject 'making lists' is singular (gerund phrase), so the verb should be singular 'helps' to agree with the subject. Using 'help' is incorrect subject-verb agreement.

× I think that's because they there are some people that prefer to do some things more fairly.

✓ I think that's because there are some people who prefer to do some things more freely.

The phrase 'they there are' is redundant and incorrect. It should be 'there are'. Also, 'that' is better replaced with 'who' when referring to people. Additionally, 'more fairly' is awkward in this context; 'more freely' or 'more spontaneously' fits better.

× They can feel overwhelmed with strict plans and they prefer to do their task spontaneously.

✓ They can feel overwhelmed with strict plans and prefer to do their tasks spontaneously.

The pronoun 'their' should agree with the plural noun 'tasks' instead of singular 'task' because 'they' refers to multiple people and likely multiple tasks.