List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response, then explain why you make a list. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I definitely make a list when I shop because it helps me organize my purchases and find items more easily. Moreover, it helps me stick to my budget and avoid overspending.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains confusing phrases. Provide a clear topic sentence and explain your approach to work tasks. Use simple, correct sentences and avoid unrelated expressions.

例: No, I don't usually make lists for work because I rely on my memory to remember tasks. However, sometimes this method is not effective, and I forget important things.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear vocabulary and grammar. Try to express your ideas simply and clearly. Explain reasons why some people avoid lists, using correct linking words.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they have a good memory and prefer to remember things without writing them down. They may find lists unnecessary or time-consuming.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many unclear phrases. Focus on directly answering the question, explaining your preference clearly with reasons. Use simple sentences and linking words to improve coherence.

例: I prefer to make lists on paper because I can stick them on the wall where I can see them easily. Sometimes, phone notes can be deleted accidentally or the phone may freeze, so paper lists are more reliable for me.

× Just definitely I make a list becauses help me sort things easier and also help me to find things and also as we do there are spending more as it's helpful to add budget friendly pocket.

✓ I definitely make a list because it helps me sort things more easily and also helps me find things. Also, as we do, we spend more, so it's helpful to add budget-friendly items.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'becauses' instead of 'because' and lacks the correct verb forms. The verb 'help' should be in the third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'sort things easier' should be 'sort things more easily' because 'easily' is an adverb modifying the verb 'sort'. The sentence structure is complex and needs to be broken down for clarity.

× No, I did not make list for work this time every sharp memory which I will remember all those things for work and artistic credential jewel in my mind for work.

✓ No, I did not make a list for work this time. I have a sharp memory and will remember all those things for work; it's like an artistic credential jewel in my mind.

The phrase 'make list' is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'list'. Also, the sentence is run-on and unclear; it needs to be split and rephrased for clarity. The phrase 'artistic credential jewel' is unusual but kept as is for meaning.

× Well don't like make list be 'cause they have a sharp MD like or people are very good brains and rub memory which I have to make.

✓ Well, they don't like making lists because they have a sharp mind or are very good at remembering things, so they don't need to make lists.

The phrase 'don't like make list' should be 'don't like making lists' because after 'like' the gerund form is used. 'MD' is unclear and replaced with 'mind' for clarity. The sentence structure is corrected for better understanding.

× I prefer to make fun of people we call itself little member thing and it's helped me do I instruct the paper on the wall for order nearly works harmony or work area.

✓ I prefer to make lists on my phone, which I call a little memory tool. It helps me because I also put paper lists on the wall near my workspace to keep things organized.

The original sentence misuses pronouns like 'itself' and has unclear phrases. 'Make fun of people' is incorrect in this context and replaced with 'make lists'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct pronoun use.

× So we have to remember that thing and phone. Sometimes I can get erased or sometimes phone gonna hang.

✓ So we have to remember those things and the phone. Sometimes data can get erased or the phone can hang.

The pronoun 'that thing and phone' is vague; 'those things and the phone' is clearer. 'I can get erased' is incorrect; data or information can be erased, not a person. 'Phone gonna hang' is informal and corrected to 'phone can hang'.

× So it is definitely make listen babe substitute simmering timely.

✓ So it definitely makes lists a better and more timely substitute.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. It is rephrased to convey the intended meaning that making lists is a better and timely substitute. The verb 'make' is corrected to 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.