List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and clear. Avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with connectors like 'because' or 'however'.

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I plan to buy many items because it helps me stay organized. However, if I'm just buying a few things and not in a hurry, I prefer to rely on my memory.

提案: Focus on clarity and grammar. Begin with a direct answer, then explain with specific reasons. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas. Avoid unclear phrases and ensure your sentences are complete and logical.

例: Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me stay organized and manage my time effectively. This method works well for me since I like to be productive and complete tasks on schedule.

提案: Try to give a clear and complete answer. Avoid asking questions back to the examiner. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly. Make sure your sentences are grammatically correct and coherent.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they prefer to be spontaneous and enjoy surprises. They might feel that planning too much limits their freedom.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Avoid repeating ideas and unclear phrases. Use linking words like 'because' to explain your preference clearly. Keep your answer concise and focused.

例: I prefer to make my list on my phone because I always carry it with me. Using paper can be inconvenient since it might get lost or damaged, so the phone is more reliable.

× Well, I do make a list, but when it is when I plan to buy many things, it helps me organize my things.

✓ Well, I do make a list, but when I plan to buy many things, it helps me organize my things.

The phrase 'when it is when I plan' is redundant and incorrect in present tense usage. The correct form is 'when I plan' to express a habitual action in present tense.

× But when I'm not in a rush, I don't miss it anymore.

✓ But when I'm not in a rush, I don't use it anymore.

The verb 'miss' is incorrectly used here; the intended meaning is not to use the list, so 'don't use it anymore' is appropriate in present tense.

× I just couldn't.

✓ I just can't.

The sentence is in present context, so 'couldn't' (past tense) is incorrect. 'Can't' is the correct modal verb for present inability.

× I list what I need to do in order to be organized and helps me with my time management.

✓ I list what I need to do in order to be organized and it helps me with my time management.

The sentence lacks a subject for the verb 'helps'. Adding 'it' clarifies the subject and corrects the sentence structure.

× And it actually does work for me because I am a productive person and I like things to it.

✓ And it actually does work for me because I am a productive person and I like things to be organized.

The phrase 'I like things to it' is incorrect pronoun usage. The correct form is 'I like things to be organized' to express preference.

× I like things to be organized and by doing a lot of things with proper time management.

✓ I like things to be organized and I do a lot of things with proper time management.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb in the second clause. Adding 'I do' completes the sentence structure.

× I think that they don't make a list.

✓ I think that they don't make lists.

The plural subject 'they' should be followed by the plural noun 'lists' to maintain agreement.

× It is because they don't want everything like a plan, they want spontaneous things up.

✓ It is because they don't want everything to be planned; they want spontaneous things.

The phrase 'like a plan' is incorrect; 'to be planned' is the correct form. Also, 'things up' is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× Do you prefer to do that because of surprise?

✓ Do you prefer to do that because of the surprise?

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'surprise' to specify the noun.

× Yeah, I think. This. Their point?

✓ Yeah, I think this is their point.

The original is fragmented and unclear. Combining into a complete sentence improves clarity and structure.

× It is more convenient to write my list on my phone because I am holding my phone every day and I'm bringing everyday.

✓ It is more convenient to write my list on my phone because I carry my phone every day.

The phrase 'I am holding my phone every day and I'm bringing everyday' is awkward and incorrect pronoun and verb usage. 'I carry my phone every day' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Then bring a paper that might beat airport or might be wet and I think that.

✓ Bringing paper might cause it to get lost at the airport or become wet, I think.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rephrasing improves sentence structure and clarity.

× The same in a phone, it is more convenient.

✓ Using a phone is more convenient.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. Simplifying the sentence improves clarity and correctness.