List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and structured by starting with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific reasons. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence clarity.

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because I tend to forget items otherwise. Writing down everything I need helps me shop more efficiently and ensures I don't miss anything.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using clearer sentence structures and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating similar phrases and focus on specific benefits of making lists for work.

例: Yes, I always make lists for my work. For example, when I was in high school, writing down tasks helped me stay organized and complete everything on time. Therefore, making lists makes my work easier and more efficient.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and lacks coherence. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas and express contrasting opinions clearly. Also, be more specific about reasons why some people dislike making lists.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it time-consuming and unnecessary. However, I believe that writing lists is very helpful and improves productivity.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more fluent by avoiding sentence fragments and using linking words. Also, try to give a clear preference or explain why you use both methods.

例: I use both paper and my phone for making lists. When I was in high school, I preferred paper for daily tasks, but now I find it easier to use my phone for shopping lists because it's convenient to access.

× Honestly speaking, I usually forget what I want during my shopping time, so it is a better way to write down everything which about things you want whenever you are shopping because it makes much more easier for a person to shop.

✓ Honestly speaking, I usually forget what I want during my shopping time, so it is a better way to write down everything about the things you want whenever you are shopping because it makes it much easier for a person to shop.

The phrase 'everything which about things you want' is incorrect. 'Which' is a relative pronoun and should be used to introduce a relative clause, but here it is misused. The correct phrase is 'everything about the things you want'. Also, 'much more easier' is incorrect; 'easier' is a comparative adjective and should be preceded by 'much' or 'a lot' but not 'much more'. The correct form is 'much easier'. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Honestly speaking, I usually forget what I want during my shopping time, so it is a better way to write down everything which about things you want whenever you are shopping because it makes much more easier for a person to shop.

✓ Honestly speaking, I usually forget what I want during my shopping time, so it is a better way to write down everything about the things you want whenever you are shopping because it makes it much easier for a person to shop.

The phrase 'much more easier' is incorrect because 'easier' is already a comparative adjective. Using 'more' with 'easier' is redundant. The correct form is 'much easier' to intensify the comparative adjective properly.

× It makes my work much more easier and it helped me to remember whatever the task I wanted to complete.

✓ It makes my work much easier and it helped me to remember whatever task I wanted to complete.

Again, 'much more easier' is incorrect; 'easier' is a comparative adjective and should be preceded by 'much' or 'a lot' but not 'much more'. Also, 'whatever the task' is awkward; 'whatever task' is more natural and grammatically correct here.

× So I always write down all of my task which I wanted to complete in a day.

✓ So I always write down all of my tasks which I want to complete in a day.

The word 'task' should be plural 'tasks' because 'all of my' refers to multiple items. Also, 'which I wanted' should be 'which I want' to maintain present tense consistency with 'I always write down'. This correction ensures subject-verb agreement and tense consistency.

× People do not like making lists is because they find it time consuming and they think that it is not that relevant for them to write down everything and making down lists of tasks they want to complete.

✓ People do not like making lists because they find it time-consuming and think that it is not relevant for them to write down everything and make lists of tasks they want to complete.

The phrase 'People do not like making lists is because' is incorrect; 'is' should be removed. 'Time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as an adjective. 'Making down lists' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'make lists'. Also, 'they think that it is not that relevant' is better as 'think that it is not relevant' for conciseness and correctness.

× For me, both are relevant. If I talk about writing down my list on a paper is the time when I was in high school, I used to write down every single task that I wanted to complete in a day, and for shopping I used to write down a list on my phone because it was quite easy.

✓ For me, both are relevant. If I talk about writing down my list on paper, it was when I was in high school that I used to write down every single task that I wanted to complete in a day, and for shopping, I used to write down a list on my phone because it was quite easy.

The phrase 'on a paper' is incorrect; 'on paper' is the correct expression. The sentence structure is awkward and needs rephrasing for clarity: 'If I talk about writing down my list on paper, it was when I was in high school that I used to...'. Also, commas are added for better sentence flow.

× For me. To go through and collect the shopping items.

✓ For me, it is easy to go through and collect the shopping items.

The original sentence fragment 'For me. To go through and collect the shopping items.' is incomplete and lacks a main verb. It should be combined into a complete sentence to convey the intended meaning clearly.