List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with concise reasons. For example, avoid repeating words like 'when I' and correct 'becaused' to 'because'.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helps me remember what to buy and saves time.

提案: Focus on clarity and grammar. Avoid unclear phrases like 'America list' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me complete tasks on time and organize how and when to do each job.

提案: Work on sentence variety and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be more specific about reasons why people avoid lists.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it stressful to set deadlines, which can create pressure to finish tasks quickly.

提案: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like 'there is no fair to store one of the list'. Use concise sentences and clear vocabulary to express your preference.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's easy to carry, store, and helps me complete tasks efficiently.

× Definitely, I make a list when I when I shop becaused it is really helpful for me to remember the things were to buy in the shopping.

✓ Definitely, I make a list when I shop because it is really helpful for me to remember the things to buy while shopping.

The word 'becaused' is incorrect; the correct form is 'because'. Also, 'were to buy' is incorrect past tense usage here; it should be 'to buy' to indicate purpose. The phrase 'in the shopping' is incorrect preposition usage; 'while shopping' is more appropriate.

× Definitely America list for my work because it is helpful me to complete my work at the proper time and it is really helpful me to decide the work, how the work to be performed and when was the work to be performed.

✓ Definitely, I make a list for my work because it helps me complete my work on time and helps me decide what work to perform and when it should be performed.

'America list' is a mishearing or typo; it should be 'I make a list'. 'Helpful me' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'helps me'. The sentence structure is awkward and needs rephrasing for clarity and correct verb forms.

× I think people don't like to make list becaused they feel it is hectic for them to make a list of their work or their job because in this way they have the pressure to perform their work within that time.

✓ I think people don't like to make lists because they feel it is hectic to make a list of their work or job since this puts pressure on them to complete their work within a certain time.

'Becaused' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. 'Make list' should be plural 'make lists' to match the plural subject 'people'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and correct preposition use.

× I prefer I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is very easy to to carry and there is no there is no fair to store one of the list and it is a quite easy to carry anywhere and it is helpful to accomplish the job.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is very easy to carry, there is no fear of losing the list, and it is quite easy to carry anywhere, which helps me accomplish my tasks.

Repeated phrases like 'I prefer I prefer' and 'to to' are errors and removed. 'There is no fair' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'there is no fear'. 'One of the list' is incorrect; it should be 'losing the list' or similar. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.