List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Use present tense consistently and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I prefer to make a list when I shop to stay organized and ensure I don't forget anything."

例: I prefer to make a list when I shop to stay organized and ensure I don't forget anything.

提案: Focus on clarity and avoid awkward phrases like "accessory time". Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, "I make lists for work to stay organized and use my time efficiently. This method really helps me be more productive."

例: I make lists for work to stay organized and use my time efficiently. This method really helps me be more productive.

提案: Improve grammar and word choice. Avoid unclear words like "vestige" and use linking words for coherence. For example, "Some people avoid making lists because they believe they can remember everything, and they think making lists wastes time. However, lists can actually help organize tasks better."

例: Some people avoid making lists because they believe they can remember everything, and they think making lists wastes time. However, lists can actually help organize tasks better.

提案: Clarify your answer and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly. For example, "I prefer to make lists both on paper and on my phone, depending on the situation. For grocery shopping, I use apps on my phone for convenience, but at work, I usually write lists on paper."

例: I prefer to make lists both on paper and on my phone, depending on the situation. For grocery shopping, I use apps on my phone for convenience, but at work, I usually write lists on paper.

× I always wanted to stay organized and don't want to miss anything when I go and.

✓ I always want to stay organized and don't want to miss anything when I go.

The phrase 'I always wanted' incorrectly uses the past tense 'wanted' when the present tense 'want' is appropriate to express a habitual desire. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'go and,' which is incomplete and should be removed for clarity.

× it doesn't waste my own accessory time and always make my time productive an organized in a well mannered way.

✓ it doesn't waste my own accessory time and always makes my time productive and organized in a well-mannered way.

The verb 'make' should be in the third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it.' Also, 'an' should be 'and' to correctly connect the adjectives 'productive' and 'organized.' The phrase 'well mannered' should be hyphenated as 'well-mannered' when used as a compound adjective.

× For some people who don't like making list, I believe the reason behind is they feel like they are well capable enough to keep the things mem memorized and it could be a vestige of time for them to spend some time on making the list.

✓ For some people who don't like making lists, I believe the reason is that they feel capable enough to keep things memorized and that it could be a waste of time for them to spend time making the list.

The noun 'list' should be pluralized to 'lists' to match the context. The phrase 'well capable enough' is redundant; 'capable enough' suffices. 'Mem memorized' appears to be a typo and should be 'memorized.' 'Vestige of time' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'waste of time.' Also, 'spend some time on making the list' is better expressed as 'spend time making the list.'

× I personally prefer to make a list on paper as well as on the phone depending on the situation or the scenario.

✓ I personally prefer to make a list on paper as well as on my phone depending on the situation or the scenario.

The phrase 'on the phone' is less precise than 'on my phone' when referring to using a personal device. Using 'my' clarifies possession and is more natural in this context.

× Where is FM at the work? I all.

✓ At work, I use my phone.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Where is FM at the work? I all.' does not form a coherent sentence. The correction provides a clear and grammatically correct sentence that likely reflects the intended meaning.