List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more organized. Use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, say: "Yes, I make a list when I shop to avoid confusion and buying unnecessary items. It helps me organize my shopping and prevents overconsumption."

例: Yes, I make a list when I shop to avoid confusion and buying unnecessary items. It helps me organize my shopping and prevents overconsumption.

提案: Answer the question directly and clearly. Use complete sentences and correct grammar. For example: "I don't work because I am a student. However, I make lists to organize my school subjects and assignments, which helps me manage my time effectively."

例: I don't work because I am a student. However, I make lists to organize my school subjects and assignments, which helps me manage my time effectively.

提案: Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words. For example: "Some people don't like making lists because they trust their memory more and feel happy managing things their own way. I understand this because everyone has their own style."

例: Some people don't like making lists because they trust their memory more and feel happy managing things their own way. I understand this because everyone has their own style.

提案: Improve your answer by using correct grammar and linking words. For example: "I prefer making lists on my phone because I carry it almost all the time, so I can access my notes quickly. Also, using paper requires pens, which I don't always have."

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I carry it almost all the time, so I can access my notes quickly. Also, using paper requires pens, which I don't always have.

× Yes, I do make a list when I shop so then I don't get confused and by the applicated stuff.

✓ Yes, I do make a list when I shop so that I don't get confused and buy the applicable stuff.

The phrase 'by the applicated stuff' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'buy' instead of 'by', and 'applicated' is not a word; the correct adjective is 'applicable'. Also, 'so then' should be 'so that' to express purpose clearly.

× Also it kind of like a way to help me organize my shopping experience as well so I don't being to overconsumption xan also buying stuff that I don't really need.

✓ Also, it is kind of like a way to help me organize my shopping experience as well so I don't begin to overconsume and also buy stuff that I don't really need.

The sentence has several issues: 'being to overconsumption' is incorrect; it should be 'begin to overconsume'. 'xan' is a typo for 'can'. Also, 'buying' should be 'buy' to maintain parallel structure. The verb 'is' is missing after 'it'.

× I don't work, I'm currently in school and most of the times.

✓ I don't work; I'm currently in school most of the time.

The phrase 'most of the times' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'most of the time' when referring to frequency in general.

× This is our about school subject and I tried to organize it too.

✓ This is about our school subjects, and I try to organize them too.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'This is our about school subject' is incorrect; it should be 'This is about our school subjects'. Also, 'I tried' should be 'I try' to match the present context, and 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural 'subjects'.

× Helps me spend my time's doing.

✓ It helps me spend my time doing things.

The phrase 'my time's doing' is incorrect. 'Time's' is a possessive form that does not fit here. The correct phrase is 'spend my time doing' followed by the activity.

× No homework an all the assignment.

✓ No homework and all the assignments.

The phrase 'an all the assignment' is incorrect. It should be 'and all the assignments' to connect ideas properly and use the plural form for 'assignments'.

× They don't some people don't like making list because they probably trust more about himself an because it's probably there happy as well.

✓ Some people don't like making lists because they probably trust themselves more and because they are probably happy that way as well.

The sentence has redundancy and pronoun errors. 'They don't some people don't' is incorrect; it should be 'Some people don't'. 'Making list' should be 'making lists' (plural). 'Trust more about himself' is incorrect; it should be 'trust themselves more'. 'There happy' should be 'they are happy'.

× And I couldn't blame them. I mean it's their life, right.

✓ And I couldn't blame them. I mean, it's their life, right?

The sentence is mostly correct but missing a comma after 'I mean' and a question mark at the end to indicate a tag question.

× And also they can do whatever they want and you know, just just like remember thing instead of just listing it and based in a little more time on this.

✓ Also, they can do whatever they want and, you know, just remember things instead of listing them and spending a little more time on this.

The sentence has repetition ('just just'), incorrect singular/plural ('thing' should be 'things'), and awkward phrasing ('based in a little more time' should be 'spending a little more time').

× I prefer to make a list on my phone rather than paper because.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone rather than on paper because...

The preposition 'on' is missing before 'paper'. The sentence is incomplete but the correction addresses the preposition issue.

× I carry my phone almost all the times and it's kind of like easier and quick access to get into the note.

✓ I carry my phone almost all the time, and it's kind of easier and quicker to access the notes.

'All the times' should be 'all the time'. 'Kind of like easier and quick access to get into the note' is awkward; it should be 'kind of easier and quicker to access the notes'.

× Also when writing on paper you will require to carry pens and sometimes I don't carry pants all the time so I prefer to make the list on iPhone.

✓ Also, when writing on paper, you need to carry pens, and sometimes I don't carry pens all the time, so I prefer to make the list on my iPhone.

'Require to carry' is incorrect; it should be 'need to carry'. 'Pants' is a typo for 'pens'. 'On iPhone' should be 'on my iPhone'.