List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并用连词连接细节，使表达更自然流畅。

例: I usually don't make a list when I shop for daily items because I know what I need. However, for special occasions like celebrations, I always prepare a list to manage my budget better.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，句子不连贯。建议先直接回答问题，然后用具体细节支持，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I always make a list for my work. It helps me organize my tasks and avoid overloading at certain times. As a result, I can plan my schedule effectively and complete my work before the deadlines.

提案: 回答表达混乱，语法错误较多，逻辑不清晰。建议用简单句子表达观点，明确列出原因，并用连接词连接。

例: Some people dislike making lists because they value freedom and dislike restrictions. Also, they may believe that making lists takes too much time and does not always help complete tasks efficiently.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，建议简化句子，直接表达偏好，并说明原因，使用连接词使句子连贯。

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is more convenient and user-friendly. Also, I don't have to worry about losing paper lists or making errors when editing.

× At most times I randomly came the shopping list and directly go to the go to the shop to get something I need recently.

✓ Most of the time, I randomly came up with the shopping list and directly went to the shop to get something I needed recently.

句中“came”应为“came up with”表示“想出”，且“go”应使用过去式“went”，因为描述的是过去发生的动作。动词时态错误导致表达不准确。

× But if it is. For shopping it is a shopping task.

✓ But if it is for shopping, it is a shopping task.

句子结构不完整，断句错误。应将断句合并成完整句子，保证语义连贯。

× For celebrations together, I often make a list before for better budget account.

✓ For celebrations together, I often make a list beforehand for better budget accounting.

“before”用法不当，应使用副词“beforehand”表示“事先”；“budget account”表达不准确，应为“budget accounting”表示“预算管理”。

× And then organized a person who had been used to working following the schedule.

✓ And then I organize myself to get used to working according to the schedule.

原句缺少主语，且表达不清晰。应补充主语并调整句子结构，使表达完整且符合语法。

× In our daily working days, we can avoid loading tasks in certain times during the month and I indeed get some benefits on planning my schedule and finishing the work perfectly before deadline.

✓ In our daily working days, we can avoid overloading tasks at certain times during the month, and I indeed get some benefits from planning my schedule and finishing the work perfectly before the deadline.

“loading tasks”应为“overloading tasks”；“in certain times”应为“at certain times”；“benefits on”应为“benefits from”；“before deadline”应加定冠词“the deadline”。

× Well, I'm waiting is to make lists have the following reasons.

✓ Well, my reasons for making lists are the following.

“I'm waiting is to make lists”表达错误，主语和谓语不匹配，应改为“my reasons for making lists are”。

× Firstly, it is determined by in certain personality such as founder of freedom and not accustomed to restrictions.

✓ Firstly, it is determined by certain personality traits such as valuing freedom and not being accustomed to restrictions.

“determined by in”重复介词，应去掉“in”；“founder of freedom”表达错误，应为“valuing freedom”；“personality”应为“personality traits”。

× Secondly, some people probably think makes things making lists before hand with the time and necessarily have a positive impacts on completing tasks.

✓ Secondly, some people probably think that making lists beforehand wastes time and does not necessarily have a positive impact on completing tasks.

“think makes things making lists”结构错误，应为“think that making lists”；“before hand”应合写为“beforehand”；“necessarily have a positive impacts”主谓不一致且复数错误，应为“does not necessarily have a positive impact”。

× I prefer making a list on my phone as a user an friendly digital technique mobile phone has become necessary hour everyday life compared to making lists on paper we.

✓ I prefer making a list on my phone as a user-friendly digital device; mobile phones have become necessary in everyday life compared to making lists on paper.

“user an friendly”应为“user-friendly”；“digital technique mobile phone”表达不当，应为“digital device”或“mobile phone”；“necessary hour everyday life”应为“necessary in everyday life”；句子结构混乱需调整。

× Don't need to bother of losing papers from somewhere.

✓ We don't need to worry about losing papers somewhere.

句子缺少主语，应补充“we”；“bother of losing”搭配错误，应为“worry about losing”；“from somewhere”表达不自然，改为“somewhere”。