Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答切题，也给出了喜欢的原因，但“their sound”“in the day”和“new thoughts for me to acquire new technique”表达不够自然。可以使用“hearing other people sing”“brighten my day”和“pick up new singing techniques”等说法。第二句可具体说明你会从别人的演唱中学到什么。

例: Yes, I really enjoy listening to other people sing because it can brighten my day. I also like noticing how they control their breathing and express emotion, which gives me ideas for improving my own singing.

提案: 你提供了童年经历和学习结果，但回答中有明显的停顿和语法问题。“signed me up uh, uh, singing class”应为“signed me up for a singing class”；“music technology”可能想表达“music theory”；“keep seeing it”应为“keep studying music”或“still take lessons”。建议按“何时开始—学到什么—现在的影响”组织回答。

例: Yes. My mother signed me up for singing lessons when I was four, and I learned basic vocal techniques and music theory. I kept studying music as I grew up, and I’m now majoring in music performance at university.

提案: 回答表达了喜欢唱歌以及害羞的原因，但“seeing”应为“singing”，而且“Because of my shyness I can't perform in public”与前一句意思重复。可以补充一个具体场景，并用“although”或“so”让句子衔接更自然。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing, although I’m quite shy. I usually sing when I’m alone or with close friends, because I feel more relaxed around them. I haven’t had the confidence to perform in public yet.

提案: 回答内容较完整，但“listening class”与问题中的学唱歌不一致，可能应为“singing lessons”。“continued”重复出现，且“listening skills improved”与学唱歌的联系不够清楚。建议说明课程具体训练了哪些演唱技能，以及这些技能如何影响你。

例: Yes. I started taking singing lessons when I was about four and continued for several years. They taught me how to control my breathing and stay in tune, which gave me the confidence to keep studying music.

提案: 你选择为父母演唱，并提供了感人的经历，这是很好的具体内容。不过有多处表达影响理解：“show my expression correctly”可改为“express my feelings”；“I was just sing”应为“I sang”；“a son with a son”可能想表达“a song that I wrote myself”。建议先清楚说明对象和原因，再简洁讲述那次经历。

例: I’d like to sing for my parents to show them how much I appreciate them. I once sang a song I had written for my mother, and she became so emotional that she cried. I was really touched by her reaction.

提案: 回答结构清楚，也使用了“On the other hand”进行对比。“slow sounds with sad bodies”不是自然搭配，可以改为“slow songs with sad lyrics”或“gentle melodies”。另外，最后的“make listening feel calm”不够自然，可改成“help listeners feel calm”。

例: Yes, I think singing and music can bring people happiness, although it depends on the mood of the song. Upbeat pop or dance music can lift people’s spirits, while slow songs with gentle melodies can help listeners relax and feel peaceful.

× Yes, I really enjoy listening to others singing because I think their sound will make me happier and more joyful in the day.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy listening to others singing because I think their sound will make me happier and more joyful during the day.

表示“在白天”时，通常使用介词短语“during the day”，而不是“in the day”。建议记住常见时间表达“during the day”。

× Also other sounds will provide new thoughts for me to acquire new technique for singing.

✓ Also, other sounds will provide new thoughts for me to acquire a new technique for singing.

“technique”是可数名词单数，前面需要冠词。这里可以加不定冠词“a”。

× When I was four years old, my mother signed me up uh, uh, singing class, and I learned a lot of music technology since then, so I still keep seeing it until now and choose music performance as my major in university.

✓ When I was four years old, my mother signed me up for a singing class, and I learned a lot of music technology since then, so I still keep seeing it until now and choose music performance as my major in university.

“sign someone up”后面接课程时，通常要用“for”，即“sign someone up for a class”。建议记住“sign someone up for something”这一搭配。

× When I was four years old, my mother signed me up uh, uh, singing class, and I learned a lot of music technology since then, so I still keep seeing it until now and choose music performance as my major in university.

✓ When I was four years old, my mother signed me up for a singing class, and I learned a lot of music technology since then, so I still keep seeing it until now and choose music performance as my major in university.

“class”是可数名词单数，前面需要冠词；这里用“a singing class”。建议检查可数名词单数前是否有冠词。

× When I was four years old, my mother signed me up uh, uh, singing class, and I learned a lot of music technology since then, so I still keep seeing it until now and choose music performance as my major in university.

✓ When I was four years old, my mother signed me up for a singing class, and I have learned a lot of music technology since then, so I still keep seeing it until now and choose music performance as my major in university.

“since then”表示从过去某个时间开始并持续到现在，通常要用现在完成时。因此应将“I learned”改为“I have learned”。

× Absolutely. When I was about four years old, my mother signed me up for a listening class and I continued taking them for several years.

✓ Absolutely. When I was about four years old, my mother signed me up for a listening class and I continued taking it for several years.

“a listening class”是单数，后面的代词应使用单数“it”，不能用复数“them”。建议让代词的单复数与其指代的名词保持一致。

× Last time I was just sing for my mother a son with a son made by myself.

✓ Last time I just sang for my mother a song with a song made by myself.

“Last time”表示过去的时间，应使用动词过去式。“sing”的过去式是“sang”；“was sing”不是正确的过去时结构。