Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答是否喜欢，再说明听歌如何影响你的情绪。注意使用自然搭配，如“listen to people singing”，避免重复“or”，并补全最后一句；可以用一个具体场景丰富回答。

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to people singing, especially when I feel stressed. A calm song helps me relax, while an upbeat one can cheer me up.

提案: 回答有参加过课程后，简要说明课程内容以及收获。注意使用“singing classes”“didn't teach me”和“listen to music”等正确表达，并删去重复的“in the class”和含糊的“thing”。

例: Yes, I took singing classes in primary and secondary school. We mostly learned basic music theory and watched videos, so I didn't get much practice singing.

提案: 先清楚表达喜欢唱歌，再解释唱歌能帮你放松或释放情绪。注意“singing”与“sing”的词形，并把“something that annoying me”改为自然表达；避免把唱歌简单说成“shouting”，可说明自己不擅长但仍享受其中。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me unwind when something is bothering me. I'm not a very good singer, but I still have fun singing along to my favorite songs.

提案: 明确说明以前是否学过，并区分过去和现在的时态。可补充一项具体学习内容，再说明练习不足或目前的水平；注意“attended”“singing”以及“sing well”等表达。

例: Yes, I had some singing lessons in primary and secondary school. The teachers taught us basic techniques, but I didn't practise very much, so I'm still not confident about my singing.

提案: 对象和理由都回答到了。把“it's really relaxed”改成描述人的感受的“it's relaxing”，并将“the moments that sing with me”改为“the time we spend singing together”；最后一句可用更自然的表达说明他们不介意你的歌唱水平。

例: I'd like to sing for my family and friends. Singing together is relaxing, and I enjoy spending time with them because they don't judge me, even though I'm not a great singer.

提案: 观点明确，也提到了唱歌可以释放压力。注意“singing”的拼写和“release stress”等自然搭配；删掉重复的“It makes”，并用一个具体例子说明唱歌如何让人开心。

例: Yes, I think singing can make people happier because it helps them release stress and express their feelings. For example, singing along with friends can be fun and bring everyone closer.

× I'm quite interested in listening sounds that seem by others.

✓ I'm quite interested in listening to sounds that seem by others.

动词短语“listen to”中的 listen 后必须接介词 to，再接听的对象。

× I'm quite interested in listening sounds that seem by others.

✓ I'm quite interested in listening to songs that are sung by others.

这里表达“由别人演唱的歌曲”，需要使用被动语态“are sung”。原句中的“seem by others”不能表达这个意思。

× I have taken sing classes in my primary school and my secondary school, but actually it doesn't taught me how to sing and listen music and watch some videos about thing in the class.

✓ I have taken singing classes in my primary school and my secondary school, but actually it doesn't taught me how to sing and listen music and watch some videos about thing in the class.

名词“classes”前需要使用表示课程内容的动名词“singing”，因此应说“singing classes”，不能用动词原形“sing”直接修饰。

× I have taken sing classes in my primary school and my secondary school, but actually it doesn't taught me how to sing and listen music and watch some videos about thing in the class.

✓ I have taken singing classes in my primary school and my secondary school, but actually the classes didn't teach me how to sing, listen to music, or watch some videos about things in class.

这里描述过去上课的经历，应使用过去时“didn't teach”。助动词 did 后面要接动词原形 teach，不能使用“taught”。

× I have taken sing classes in my primary school and my secondary school, but actually it doesn't taught me how to sing and listen music and watch some videos about thing in the class.

✓ I have taken singing classes in my primary school and my secondary school, but actually the classes didn't teach me how to sing, listen to music, or watch some videos about things in class.

“listen”表示“听”时，后面通常需要接介词 to，因此应说“listen to music”。

× I have taken sing classes in my primary school and my secondary school, but actually it doesn't taught me how to sing and listen music and watch some videos about thing in the class.

✓ I have taken singing classes in my primary school and my secondary school, but actually the classes didn't teach me how to sing, listen to music, or watch some videos about things in class.

这里的“thing”表示课堂上学到的多个内容，应使用复数“things”。

× So I don't learn much about thing in the class.

✓ So I didn't learn much about things in class.

句子总结的是过去上课的经历，应将一般现在时“don't learn”改为一般过去时“didn't learn”。

× So I don't learn much about thing in the class.

✓ So I didn't learn much about things in class.

“thing”在这里泛指学到的内容，不止一项，因此需要使用复数“things”。

× I love seeing because sing can make me relax when I have some something that annoying me.

✓ I love seeing because singing can make me relax when I have something that is annoying me.

“singing”在 because 引导的从句中作主语，需要使用动名词形式“singing”，不能使用动词原形“sing”。

× I love seeing because sing can make me relax when I have some something that annoying me.

✓ I love seeing because singing can make me relax when I have something that is annoying me.

“something”本身已经表示“某件事”，前面不能再加“some”；删除多余的“some”。

× I love seeing because sing can make me relax when I have some something that annoying me.

✓ I love seeing because singing can make me relax when I have something that is annoying me.

从句“that annoying me”缺少助动词。描述某件事正在使人烦恼时，应使用现在进行时“is annoying me”。

× However, to be honest, I don't think sing well, but I think it's just like shouting.

✓ However, to be honest, I don't think I sing well, but I think it's just like shouting.

“I don't think”后面的宾语从句缺少主语。应补上“I”，构成“I sing well”。

× To be honest, although I attend some classes in primary school and secondary school, the teachers taught me much about the theory and ways to sing, but actually I don't sting in the class and I didn't sing well.

✓ To be honest, although I attended some classes in primary school and secondary school, the teachers taught me much about the theory and ways to sing, but actually I don't sting in the class and I didn't sing well.

句子讲述小学和中学时的经历，应使用过去时“attended”，而不是现在时“attend”。

× To be honest, although I attend some classes in primary school and secondary school, the teachers taught me much about the theory and ways to sing, but actually I don't sting in the class and I didn't sing well.

✓ To be honest, although I attended some classes in primary school and secondary school, the teachers taught me much about the theory and ways to sing; actually, I don't sting in the class and I didn't sing well.

“although”已经表示让步，通常不能再在同一个句子中用“but”重复连接。可以保留“although”，并删除“but”。

× I want to sing for my family members or friends because when I sing with them I think it's really relaxed and they just enjoy the moments that sing with me.

✓ I want to sing for my family members or friends because when I sing with them, I think it's really relaxing, and they just enjoy the moments that sing with me.

“it”指和家人朋友一起唱歌这件事，描述事情带来的感受时应使用“relaxing”；“relaxed”通常描述人的感受。

× I want to sing for my family members or friends because when I sing with them I think it's really relaxed and they just enjoy the moments that sing with me.

✓ I want to sing for my family members or friends because when I sing with them, I think it's really relaxing, and they just enjoy the moments when they sing with me.

“the moments that sing with me”中的关系从句缺少主语，而且 moments 后表示时间时用“when”更合适。可改为“the moments when they sing with me”。

× They don't care how I see whether I see well or bad.

✓ They don't care whether I sing well or badly.

原句把“how”和“whether”重复、混乱地连接起来，导致结构不清。表达“他们不在乎我唱得好不好”时，可以直接使用“whether”引导的从句。

× They don't care how I see whether I see well or bad.

✓ They don't care whether I sing well or badly.

这里修饰动词“sing”，需要使用副词。与“well”并列时应使用副词“badly”，不能使用形容词“bad”。

× It's a way that we can release our emotional baggage and makes It makes people feel relaxed and they can output their stress.

✓ It's a way for us to release our emotional baggage, and it makes people feel relaxed and helps them release their stress.

原句中“and”连接的部分结构不平行，并且“It makes”出现重复，导致句子结构混乱。可改成“It is a way for us to...”以及“it makes... and helps...”，让并列结构清晰、完整。