Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接，理由也比较清楚，并使用了“because”和“also”进行连接。建议避免使用可能过于绝对或不自然的表达，例如“I'm tone deaf”可以改为“I’m not very good at singing”。另外，可以减少口语填充词“Uh”，并加入一个更具体的例子，使答案更自然、有效。

例: I don’t really enjoy singing because I’m not very good at keeping a tune. I also feel nervous in situations like karaoke because other people might notice my mistakes. So, I usually prefer listening to music rather than singing myself.

提案: 内容完整，能够说明上课经历、老师的评价以及后续选择，但开头“Why was I tired?”明显不符合问题语境，可能是表达或录音错误；“my teacher told I”应改为“my teacher told me”。建议使用更准确的词组，如“had a talent for dancing”，并减少重复的“singing”。

例: Yes, I did. I took singing lessons for a short time when I was younger, but my teacher told me that I wasn’t very good at singing and that I had more talent for dancing. As a result, I switched to dance lessons and continued them for several years.

提案: 回答表达了听众对象和原因，但第一句“The only occasions I think are...”结构不自然，而且问题问的是“为谁唱”，应直接回答“my close friends”或“my best friend”。“the same whole happy birthday sounds”不自然，应说“the traditional Happy Birthday song”。建议补充具体场景并使用对比结构。

例: I’d mainly like to sing for my close friends, especially at my best friend’s birthday party. I usually sing the traditional “Happy Birthday” song because I’m not very confident in my singing ability. I’d rather sing casually for people I know than perform on a stage.

提案: 观点明确，并通过洗碗时唱歌提供了具体例子，内容发展较好。需要注意“seeing”应为“singing”，“It also give”应改为“It also gives”，“help”应改为“helps”。可以使用“as a result”连接结果，使逻辑更清晰。

例: Definitely. Singing can lift people’s mood and help them reduce stress. For example, I often sing while washing the dishes because I’m alone and feel relaxed. As a result, I have more energy and can forget about my worries for a while.

提案: 回答有明确观点和演唱会例子，但存在严重的人称和专有名词一致性问题：如果歌手是女性，应使用“she/her”；如果是男性，应使用“he/him”。“stage press”不自然，可能想表达“stage presence”。建议确认歌手姓名，并保持代词一致。

例: Yes, I really enjoy listening to other people sing, especially my favourite singer, Liao Ning. She is extremely talented and has a unique voice. I went to her concert last year, and her live performance and stage presence really impressed me.

提案: 回答有清晰的经历、课程内容和结果，但“bicycle vertical techniques”不是自然的英语表达，可能应为“vocal techniques”或“vocal exercises”。“keen and warm hearted”应改为“enthusiastic and warm-hearted”，并建议拆分过长句子、加入连接词以提高清晰度。

例: Yes, I took singing lessons when I was a child. We mainly practised breathing and basic vocal techniques. My teacher was very enthusiastic and warm-hearted, so I gradually became more confident when singing in front of other people.

× My teacher told I wasn't very good at singing.

✓ My teacher told me that I wasn't very good at singing.

动词“tell”后面需要接人称代词作宾语，因此应使用“told me”，不能直接说“told I”。此外，加入“that”可以更清楚地引出后面的宾语从句。建议记住：tell + 人 + that从句，例如“ She told me that she was tired.”

× The only occasions I think are at my best friend's birthday party.

✓ The only occasion I can think of is my best friend's birthday party.

原句的句子结构不完整且表达不自然。“occasion”在这里指一个场合，应使用单数；“I can think of”是修饰“occasion”的定语从句；主句应使用“is”连接主语和表语。建议使用结构“The only occasion I can think of is...”来表达“我唯一能想到的场合是……”。

× It also give me more energy and help me forget about my worries for a while.

✓ It also gives me more energy and helps me forget about my worries for a while.

主语“It”是第三人称单数，因此一般现在时中两个并列动词都要加“-s”： “give”变为“gives”，“help”变为“helps”。并列动词的形式应保持一致。

× I prefer listening to my favorite singer Liaoning because he is extremely talented and has a unique voice. I got a ticket to her concert last year and had an amazing time. His live performance and stage press really impressed me.

✓ I prefer listening to my favorite singer Liaoning because he is extremely talented and has a unique voice. I got a ticket to his concert last year and had an amazing time. His live performance and stage presence really impressed me.

同一个人前后使用了不一致的代词：“he”“her”和“his”互相冲突。如果使用男性代词，就应保持“he/his”一致，因此“her concert”应改为“his concert”。另外，“stage press”不是正确的表达；“stage presence”表示“舞台表现力”。