Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 首先，回答不够流利且包含许多语法和用词错误，表达不清楚。建议：1) 开头直接给出简短的主题句，如"Not really"或"I don't enjoy singing"；2) 用1-2句具体原因支持主题句，避免重复；3) 使用正确的短语和句子结构，如"my singing is bad"或"my friends say I sing badly"；4) 控制在最多5句内，保持连贯。练习示例句型并模仿。

例: Not really. I don't enjoy singing because my singing voice is quite weak and my friends often say I sing badly, which makes me self-conscious.

提案: 回答包含信息但语法混乱，词汇使用不当。建议：1) 先简短回答（Yes/No + when）；2) 用1-2句具体说明学到的内容或为什么没有帮助；3) 使用正确词汇，如"singing lessons"、"technique"、"practice"；4) 注意时态和句子结构以提高清晰度。

例: Yes. I took singing lessons in primary school where the teacher showed us basic techniques like breathing and pitch, but I didn't practice enough, so they didn't help much.

提案: 回答比较自然但有冗余和语法错误。建议：1) 开头直接回应对象，如"I would sing for my friends"；2) 用一两句具体说明原因并举例（例如在生日或聚会时）；3) 避免重复表达，如"my friends"多次出现；4) 使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I'd sing for my friends, especially at small gatherings or birthdays, because it's a nice way to show affection and they usually enjoy it.

提案: 回答观点明确但表达混乱且有许多不相关或错误短语。建议：1) 先给出直接回答（Yes/No + brief reason）；2) 用具体例子说明怎样带来快乐（如减压、提升情绪、社交）；3) 避免无意义或错误的翻译字词，保持句子简洁；4) 可提到个人经历支持观点。

例: Yes. Singing can lift people's mood and reduce stress — for example, I sing quietly after a busy day and it helps me relax and feel more positive.

提案: 回答表达意图不清且句子混乱。建议：1) 直接回答并说明喜欢的类型或歌手；2) 提供具体细节，如听朋友或偶像唱歌时的感受；3) 使用连贯的句子并避免重复；4) 控制在最多五句内。

例: Yes. I enjoy listening to other people sing, especially my favourite singers and a friend who often performs for me — their performances are relaxing and enjoyable.

提案: 回答重复之前信息且存在大量语法错误和拼写错误。建议：1) 简洁回应并说明时间和内容（e.g. "Yes, in primary school"）；2) 说明为什么课程未能帮到你（如缺乏练习或老师方法不合适）；3) 注意动词时态和名词形式（singing class, it didn't help me）并避免重复；4) 提供可改进的细节，例如你后来是否自学或放弃。

例: Yes, I took a singing class in primary school where the teacher taught basic vocal techniques, but it didn't help much because I didn't practice regularly.

× To be honest not great.

✓ To be honest, I'm not very good at singing.

句子缺少主语和谓语，属于句子结构错误。应补充主语和系动词（I am），并用适当形容词短语（not very good at singing）来表达意思。建议在句首加逗号并完整表达："To be honest, I'm not very good at singing."

× I don't like to sing because my sing song is so bad.

✓ I don't like singing because my singing is so bad.

动词后更自然用动名词（singing）而不是不定式；"sing song" 是错误词序，正确为"singing"或"singing voice"。建议使用动名词或名词短语："I don't like singing because my singing is so bad."

× My friends always told me at a terrible to listen a song for my song.

✓ My friends always tell me it's terrible to listen to my singing.

原句语序混乱且用词错误（told me at a terrible、listen a song for my song）。需调整成完整句子并使用动词不定式/动名词结构："tell me it's terrible to listen to my singing." 注意时态一致可用现在时（always tell）。

× Definitely when I was in primary school I had a music course and the teacher taught me how to sing sound and how to wise, but I single these classes don't have any help for my sing songs.

✓ When I was in primary school I had a music class and the teacher taught me how to sing and how to use my voice, but single these classes didn't help my singing.

原句中时态混用和单复数错误（course/class, don't/didn't）。应使用过去时描述过去经历（had、taught、didn't help）。另外词汇错误："sing sound" 和 "how to wise" 改为 "sing" 和 "use my voice"；"sing songs" 改为 "singing"。

× Who do you want to sing for? / I want to sing for my friends because I always share something with my friends. Of course I would really want to sing something for my friend to show my love and they are delighted.

✓ I want to sing for my friends because I always share things with them. Of course I would really like to sing something for a friend to show my affection and make them happy.

原句代词使用混乱（my friends / my friend / they）和礼貌表达问题（would really want -> would really like）。需统一代词（them）并用恰当冠词和动词短语（show my affection, make them happy）。

× For example, I am a master degree with student Sin can make me detected and reduce stress.

✓ For example, when I practice singing, it can help me relax and reduce stress.

原句结构混乱且词汇错误（I am a master degree with student Sin can make me detected）。应改为清晰的条件或原因状语从句，表达唱歌能让我放松、减压。使用正确动词短语（help me relax）。

× It can help me to have a grateful tooth face new day started.

✓ It can help me feel grateful and face a new day.

原句使用了错误词语（grateful tooth face）且语序混乱。应使用固定搭配"feel grateful" 和 "face a new day" 来表达情感与态度。

× Of course I have my favorite singers I like to sing the song for her and my friend really likes to sing song.

✓ Of course I have favorite singers. I like to sing their songs, and my friend also likes to sing.

原句缺少标点和连接词，且代词与名词不一致（her / singers）。应拆成两句并使用复数代词"their"或指明单数。保持句子简洁清晰。

× She usually sings song for me so I really want to listen and talk with her.

✓ She usually sings for me, so I really want to listen and talk with her.

"sings song" 为冗余错误，应直接使用动词+sings 或加名词短语 "sings songs"。原句需要逗号连接并保持代词一致。

× Definitely when I was in Parimarry school I have a singing class the teacher taught me about how to sing song and make voice but to be honestly, this calls don't help me a lot.

✓ When I was in primary school I had a singing class. The teacher taught me how to sing and how to make a good voice, but honestly, the class didn't help me much.

原句时态混合（was ... I have）应全部用过去时（had、taught、didn't help）。拼写错误（Parimarry -> primary），词汇错误（make voice -> make a good voice），以及单复数和冠词使用需修正。

× I still get a terrible in Sing Song.

✓ I still sing terribly.

原句语法错误（get a terrible in Sing Song）。应使用副词修饰动词（sing terribly）来表达唱得很差。保持现在时以表示一般现在的状态。