Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更自然和准确。注意发音错误（seeing → singing），句子结构混乱，避免冗长重复。可先直接给出主题句，然后用1-2句具体原因或例子支持，使用连词如 because 或 so 来连接。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing, especially with friends at karaoke. Singing helps me relieve stress because it lets me forget about my studies for a while and have fun with others.

提案: 回答要简洁有力，减少填充词（uh, I, I'm）。先给出直接回答，再解释原因并给具体细节（例如通过模仿喜欢的歌手学习）。可用 linking words 如 because 或 so。

例: No, I haven't taken formal singing lessons because I don't plan to be a professional. Instead, I learn by imitating my favourite singers when I like a song.

提案: 总体内容清楚，但时态和部分词汇需调整（wanted → want）。可以用一两句补充具体场景或感受，使用连接词 like or because 来增强连贯性。

例: I like to sing with my friends, usually at a KTV. Singing with them makes me feel happy and relaxed because we can joke and encourage each other.

提案: 表达不够清晰且有多处用词错误（scene? seeing? active?）。先直接回答，然后给出具体原因或例子，避免模糊词汇，使用词组 like 'positive lyrics' 或 'uplifting melodies'。

例: Yes, I think singing can make people happy because many songs have positive lyrics and uplifting melodies. For example, listening to an upbeat song can lift your mood and energise you.

提案: 回答结构可更清晰，避免重复和语法错误（'listening a song' → 'listening to a song'，'would not to listen' → 'would not listen'）。用条件句简洁表达并给具体标准或例子说明为什么。

例: It depends. I enjoy listening to professional singers because they perform well and convey emotion. But I usually avoid listening to amateur performances if the singing is off-key or lacks expression.

提案: 回答应更流畅并减少重复。先直接回答，没有正式课程，而是通过模仿学习；说明理由（时间/费用/兴趣）。注意语法（follow a singer → follow a singer, 'scene classes' → 'singing classes'）。

例: No, I haven't taken formal singing classes. I learn by following and imitating singers I like because I don't want to be a professional and classes would take too much time and money.

× Yes, I like seeing sometimes I as I will sing with my friends in Katy way because I think singing can release my stress and put my mind off the study.

✓ Yes, I like singing sometimes because I sing with my friends in KTV; I think singing can relieve my stress and take my mind off studying.

句中原用“seeing”是错误的动名词形式，应为“singing”。另外有拼写和词序问题（Katy 应为 KTV），以及習慣用語“relieve my stress”和“take my mind off studying”。建议使用正确的动名词形式和固定搭配：'singing', 'relieve my stress', 'take my mind off studying'。

× No, I haven't learned how to sing uh, because I, I'm, I don't want to, uh, be a singer, but uh, sometimes I will. I will follow a singer to sing his songs if I like that song.

✓ No, I haven't learned how to sing because I don't want to be a singer. But sometimes I do follow a singer and sing his songs if I like them.

原句中时态和助动词使用混乱（'sometimes I will' 在这里不自然，应使用一般现在时或惯常行为 'sometimes I do'）。另外代词一致性问题：'that song' 改为复数 'them' 或直接 'the song'。建议用一般现在时描述习惯性动作。

× I wanted to sing with my friends. Sometimes I will go outside with my friends to sing songs in KTV together because I feel happy and relaxed when I sing songs with them.

✓ I want to sing with my friends. Sometimes I go out with my friends to sing in KTV because I feel happy and relaxed when I sing with them.

原句 'I wanted' 用过去式与上下文不符，应为一般现在时表现在愿望或习惯（'I want'）。'go outside' 在此语境更自然的表达为 'go out'，并且不需要重复 'songs'。建议用现在时描述现在的喜好和习惯。

× Yes, I think the scene can uh, make people feel happy, uh, because uh, a lot of our songs, uh, have positive contents. When people are seeing them, they will feel active and a sense of positive.

✓ Yes, I think singing can make people feel happy because many of our songs have positive content. When people listen to them, they will feel energetic and positive.

原句中'scene' 用词错误，应该是 'singing' 或 'songs'。'positive contents' 不自然，常用单数 'content'。'When people are seeing them' 语法不对，应为 'When people listen to them'。'a sense of positive' 也是错误搭配，应为 'feel positive' 或 'a sense of positivity'。建议用正确名词和固定搭配：'singing/songs', 'content', 'listen to', 'feel positive'。

× It depends, if I'm listening a song, sing sing sing by a professional singer, I will feel happy to listen to him. But if a person cannot sing a song well, I would not to listen to his songs.

✓ It depends. If I'm listening to a song sung by a professional singer, I will enjoy it. But if a person cannot sing well, I would not listen to their songs.

'listening a song' 缺少介词 'to'，应为 'listening to a song'。'sing sing sing by' 结构混乱，应为 'sung by'（过去分词作被动/形容词用法）。'would not to listen' 中多了 'to'，正确为 'would not listen'。另外性别中性用法用 'their' 更自然。建议注意动词搭配 'listen to' 以及被动/分词结构 'sung by'。

× No, I learned, I learned to sing, uh, by follow a singer, uh, BA uh, because I don't want it to be a professional, uh, singer. And it will spend a lot of time and money, uh, having scene classes.

✓ No, I learned to sing by following a singer because I don't want to be a professional singer. It would take a lot of time and money to have singing classes.

原句 'by follow' 应为动名词 'by following'，这属于动词+ -ing 结构的错误同时影响时态表达。'I don't want it to be a professional' 结构错误，主语不明确，应为 'I don't want to be a professional singer'。'It will spend a lot of time and money' 也不合适，正确为 'It would take a lot of time and money' 或 'It takes a lot of time and money'。最后 'scene classes' 拼写错误，应为 'singing classes'。建议使用动名词 'following'，正确的主语和常用搭配 'take time and money'。