Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like singing, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Avoid fillers (uh, like) and unnecessary repetition. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing even though I'm not very good at it because it helps me relax after a busy day. For example, I often sing my favorite songs quietly at home while cooking or walking, and it instantly improves my mood.

提案: Answer directly and explain briefly with a specific reason. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and give a short example. Avoid casual slang ('wanna') and unclear fragments.

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons because I don't feel confident in my ability and prefer to sing only for myself. For instance, I usually just hum melodies at home rather than practicing formally.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence naming who you sing for, then add one specific detail or example. Use linking words such as 'but' or 'however' to contrast feelings about friends versus strangers. Remove hesitations and correct grammar ('closest friends' not 'closest friends of me').

例: I usually only sing for my closest friends because I feel comfortable around them. However, singing in front of strangers feels awkward for me, so I avoid performing in public.

提案: Begin with a clear opinion, then give two concise, specific reasons linked with 'because' or 'for example'. Use correct grammar for plural/singular and verb forms. Avoid repeating similar points.

例: Yes, absolutely — singing can bring happiness because music can lift people's moods and connect them emotionally. For example, concerts create a joyful atmosphere for audiences, and new songs published online give listeners fresh, uplifting experiences.

提案: Answer clearly and provide a specific reason or example. Use linking words ('because' or 'so') and avoid repetition. Correct minor grammar and remove stuttering.

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing because they often perform better than I can and I can learn from their technique. For instance, I like watching live performances online to pick up phrasing and breathing tips.

提案: Give a direct answer and a concise reason. Avoid excessive hesitation and repetition. Offer a brief example or alternative activity you do instead of classes.

例: No, I have never taken a singing class because I don't want to invest in lessons when I sing only for fun. Instead, I prefer listening to music and practicing informally at home.

× 'Though I just, uh, enjoyed singing even though I'm not good at it, uh, I just, uh, listen to music and sometimes I will see my sing my favorite songs alone and I think it's a very nice way to relax and.'

✓ 'Though I just enjoy singing even though I'm not good at it, I just listen to music and sometimes I sing my favorite songs alone, and I think it's a very nice way to relax.'

'enjoyed' is past tense while the speaker describes a general habit, so present simple 'enjoy' is required. 'will see my sing' is ungrammatical and mixes future auxiliary with incorrect verbs; replace with present simple 'sing' for habit. Remove filler words and fix punctuation. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions (I enjoy, I listen, I sing).'

× 'I would like to say I can only see in front of the closest friends of me and I once seen in front of the strangers.'

✓ 'I would like to say I can only sing in front of my closest friends, and I have once sung in front of strangers.'

'seen' is past participle of see and incorrect here; the verb should be 'sing'. To express a past experience affecting the present, use present perfect 'have sung'. Also use 'my closest friends' (possessive) and 'in front of strangers' (no article).'

× 'That's why there are so many concert, so many songs that publish online and every year, even every day there are new songs that published and you can listen to them and it's really give you a happy mood.'

✓ 'That's why there are so many concerts and so many songs published online, and every year, even every day, new songs are published that you can listen to, and they really give you a happy mood.'

'concert' should be plural 'concerts' to agree with 'so many'. 'songs that publish online' is passive or reduced relative clause: use 'songs published online' or 'songs that are published online'. 'songs that published' missing passive auxiliary 'are'. 'it's really give' has subject-verb mismatch; 'they really give' matches plural 'songs'. Suggestions: ensure plural nouns match quantifiers and use passive constructions correctly ('are published').'

× 'I just wanna sing for myself. Like just hum a little sentence of it, hum a reason.'

✓ 'I just want to sing for myself. Like, just hum a little bit of a song, hum a refrain.'

'wanna' is colloquial; for a test use 'want to'. 'hum a little sentence of it' is unnatural — use 'hum a little bit of a song' or 'hum a refrain'. 'sentence' and 'reason' are incorrect nouns for musical context. Suggestion: choose correct noun collocations for singing (song, refrain, verse).'

× 'Yes, if this seems seem very well I would like to listen to and since I realize I'm not very good at it so I prefer to listen to others and I think that's a good way to learn or enjoy.'

✓ 'Yes, if someone seems to sing very well, I would like to listen to them, and since I realize I'm not very good at it, I prefer to listen to others; I think that's a good way to learn and enjoy.'

'this seems seem' is duplicated and ungrammatical. Use 'someone seems to sing very well'. 'listen to and' incomplete — include object 'them'. Maintain tense consistency with present simple for general facts ('I prefer'). Suggestion: avoid repetition and complete verbs with objects. Use clearer pronouns ('them') for people.'

× 'No, never. I think I don't have to because I'm not good at it, so I'm not interested in it. I just wanna sing for myself. Like just hum a little sentence of it, hum a reason.'

✓ 'No, never. I don't think I need to because I'm not good at it, so I'm not interested. I just want to sing for myself, like hum a little bit of a song.'

'I think I don't have to' is awkward; use 'I don't think I need to' for necessity. 'wanna' colloquial. Remove redundant 'in it'. Simplify to present simple for current opinions. Suggestion: use 'need to' instead of 'have to' when expressing lack of necessity and avoid colloquial contractions in formal speech.'

× 'I would like to say I can only see in front of the closest friends of me and I once seen in front of the strangers.'

✓ 'I would like to say I can only sing in front of my closest friends, and I have once sung in front of strangers.'

'the closest friends of me' uses incorrect article and word order; use 'my closest friends'. 'the strangers' is wrong here; use 'strangers' with no article when speaking generally. Suggestion: use possessive for people close to you and omit 'the' with plural indefinite groups.'

× 'That's really awkward and you know, I'm not good at it, so it's very hard for me to sing in.'

✓ 'That's really awkward, and, you know, I'm not good at it, so it's very hard for me to sing in front of people.'

'sing in' is incomplete; 'sing in front of' or 'sing in public' are appropriate prepositional phrases. Suggestion: complete the prepositional phrase to clarify the context.'

× 'No, never. Like I said before, I'm not good at singing. I just uh, enjoy, listen. So I think I don't have to spend money on it. It's not uh, it's not necessary for me, yes.'

✓ 'No, never. As I said before, I'm not good at singing. I just enjoy listening, so I don't think I need to spend money on it; it's not necessary for me.'

'don't have to' is acceptable but 'I don't think I need to' is more natural when expressing opinion. 'enjoy, listen' needs to be 'enjoy listening'. 'like I said before' better as 'as I said before'. Suggestion: use 'enjoy listening' for preference and use appropriate modal phrases to express lack of necessity.'}]} } `}