Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 简洁明确地回答问题，注意时态和单复数，以及用词准确。可以把重复的表述压缩成一到两句并加一点细节说明原因或感受。例如把“love singing very much”和“so I love singing very much”合并，避免冗余。

例: Yes, I do. I’ve loved singing since childhood because my parents encouraged me and I used to sing with friends at family gatherings, which created many happy memories.

提案: 注意动词时态和词汇选择（如learn, singing lessons而不是 swimming lessons），并使用连贯词来组织内容。说明具体学到的技巧或记忆中的课程能提升答案具体性。

例: Yes, I took singing lessons when I was a child. My teacher taught vocal warm-ups, breath control and how to express emotions in a song, which helped me perform more confidently.

提案: 回答要直接并逻辑清晰，避免重复并纠正词序和语法（e.g. "sing for myself" vs "sing to"）。可以说明为什么偏好朋友或家人，并举例具体场合。

例: I prefer to sing for my friends and family rather than strangers because I feel less nervous with people I know. For example, I often sing at birthday parties or family dinners.

提案: 注意表达准确（singing 而非 seeing），用一两句说明原因并举例说明如何带来快乐。使用连接词使论述更连贯。

例: Yes, I believe singing can make people happy because it helps them relax and share emotions. For instance, singing with friends at a karaoke night often lifts everyone’s mood.

提案: 注意句子结构与代词使用（e.g. "my friends' singing"），并说明具体感受或原因，避免模糊表达。可以举例说明听别人唱歌时的具体感受或场景。

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to my friends sing because it makes me feel closer to them. When they sing, I can understand their emotions and it creates a warm atmosphere.

提案: 修正时态与词汇（e.g. took singing classes, techniques not battery），并具体列出学到的技能和老师的教学方法，使答案更具体和自然。

例: Yes, I took singing classes as a child. The teacher was very kind and taught vocal techniques such as breath control, pitch training and how to convey emotions in a performance.

× I love singing very much because when I was young my parents give me singing license.

✓ I loved singing very much because when I was young my parents gave me a singing license.

句中描述的是过去发生的事情，应使用一般过去时。原句使用现在时“give”与“when I was young”时间点不一致，应改为过去式“gave”。此外，'singing license' 表达不自然，可改为 'a singing license' 或更常见的 'singing lessons'。

× I sing with my friends and we have a happy time.

✓ I sang with my friends and we had a happy time.

句子上下文在讲过去的经历（前文提到 'when I was young'），所以动词应使用过去时。将 'sing' 和 'have' 改为过去式 'sang' 和 'had'。

× Yes, of course. When I was young, I have swimming lessons and the teacher told us how to sing songs and what emotions should we provide for the audience.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was young, I had singing lessons and the teacher told us how to sing songs and what emotions we should convey to the audience.

'When I was young' 指过去，应使用过去时 'had'，而不是现在完成时 'have'。此外，'swimming lessons' 明显不合语境，改为 'singing lessons'。'what emotions should we provide' 的疑问语序不符合陈述句，应改为 'what emotions we should convey'。'provide' 用在情感传达上不自然，改为 'convey' 更合适。

× I like to sing for myself because I think if I sing to the strangers I will feel shy and sing to my friends or my parents.

✓ I like to sing for myself because if I sing to strangers I will feel shy, so I sing for my friends or my parents.

'the strangers' 中不需要定冠词，应为 'strangers'。句子结构不够连贯，加入连接词 'so' 并调整顺序更清晰。将 'sing to my friends or my parents' 用作结果说明。

× I like to. I don't know what I want to sing, but for me a lot of songs can chose chose.

✓ I like to. I don't know exactly what I want to sing, but many songs are suitable for me.

原句 'a lot of songs can chose chose' 结构混乱且动词使用错误。'can chose' 拼写和时态错误，应使用被动或形容词短语，如 'many songs are suitable for me' 或 'I can choose from many songs'。

× Especially, of course, I think seeing is a good way to relax and provide our emotions to others.

✓ Especially, of course, I think singing is a good way to relax and to express our emotions to others.

'seeing' 显然是拼写或用词错误，应为 'singing'。'provide our emotions' 用法不自然，应改为 'express our emotions'。保持不定式并列 'to relax and to express' 更通顺。

× Definitely, I like to listen to my friends their singing because we I can't.

✓ Definitely, I like to listen to my friends sing because I can't (sing) as well as they can.

原句 'listen to my friends their singing' 中重复使用所有格不正确，正确表达是 'listen to my friends sing' 或 'listen to my friends' singing'。'we I can't' 无意义，应改为完整对比句 'I can't sing as well as they can'。

× I feel I'm will be closer with her relationship and when she was singing she shows her inner experience so I like it.

✓ I feel I will be closer to her, and when she sings she shows her inner feelings, so I like it.

'I'm will be' 混用现在进行和将来时，改为 'I will be'。'closer with her relationship' 用法错误，应为 'closer to her' 或 'closer in our relationship'。'when she was singing she shows' 时态混乱，保持一般现在时 'when she sings she shows' 更符合描述经常发生的情况。'inner experience' 改为更常用的 'inner feelings'。

× Yes, when I was young I have seen classes.

✓ Yes, when I was young I attended classes.

'When I was young' 表示过去，应使用过去时。'have seen classes' 用法不正确，'see classes' 一般不用于上课，应使用 'attended classes' 或 'took classes' 来表达上过课。

× The teacher is very nice, she told me a lot of singing skills and some battery to sing better.

✓ The teacher was very nice; she taught me a lot of singing techniques and some exercises to sing better.

上下文为过去，应把 'is' 改为过去式 'was'。'told me a lot of singing skills' 表达不当，应为 'taught me a lot of singing techniques'。'battery' 用词错误，应为 'exercises' 或 'drills'（练习）。

× And what emotions should we provide to the ideals?

✓ And what emotions should we convey to the audience?

句子结构混乱且 'ideals' 用词不当。应为 'audience'（观众）。'provide' 同样不自然，改为 'convey' 或 'express'。保持疑问句语序 'what emotions should we convey to the audience?'。