Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答题要更直接、语法准确且避免冗长与重复。可把主题句明确表述（I enjoy singing），然后用一到两句具体原因并用连接词衔接。注意时态与代词（in the bathroom, I can sing loudly; I feel like a star; it relieves my anxiety）。

例: I enjoy singing, especially when I'm in the bathroom because I can sing loudly without worrying about others. It makes me feel like a star and helps relieve my anxiety, so I often sing there to relax.

提案: 回答要更简洁并注意句子结构与用词。先直接回答（No, I haven't），然后给出两点原因，每点用连词（firstly, secondly）连接，避免重复且改正表达错误（e.g. 'my voice is not very good'）。

例: No, I haven't taken singing lessons. Firstly, I don't plan to be a professional singer, so I didn't think lessons were necessary. Secondly, I feel my voice isn't very good, so I preferred to sing only as a hobby.

提案: 回句时注意主谓一致与代词使用，先给出回答（I would sing for two people），然后用清晰的短句分别说明理由。避免重复与混乱的代词（he/she/them）。

例: I would like to sing for two people. First, I would sing for my mother to thank her for raising me and supporting me. Second, I would sing for my boyfriend to show my love and appreciation for him.

提案: 答案要更自然并注意单复数及搭配（a best way → the best way / a good way）。先给主题句，然后用一到两条具体例子或解释，用连接词使逻辑更清楚。

例: Yes, I think singing and music can make people happy. For example, a cheerful song can lift your mood and help you imagine positive memories, which makes you feel happier almost instantly.

提案: 回答要更地道并注意动词时态与搭配（listen to music; when I face something bad）。给出简洁理由并举例说明喜欢的歌手或歌曲如何影响你。

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to other people sing. I listen to music almost every day, and my favorite singer is Justin Bieber because his songs cheer me up. When I have a bad day, I often play his music to relax and feel better.

提案: 回答要更简洁并纠正语法错误（'have you ever taken' → 'No, I haven't'; 'people who take singing classes'；hobby 拼写）。说明文化原因时用清晰短句并给出个人选择。

例: No, I haven't taken a singing class. In my country, taking singing lessons is often seen as preparing for a professional career, and I only sing as a hobby, so I never felt the need for formal lessons.

× Especially when I at the bathroom I can sing very loud and at that time I think I see myself as a senior because I think my voice is very beautiful.

✓ Especially when I am in the bathroom I can sing very loudly, and at that time I feel like a star because I think my voice is very beautiful.

问题类型：副词位置与词形错误（归类为“Incorrect adverb placement”）。句中“I at the bathroom”缺少动词be且介词使用错误，正确为“am in the bathroom”。“sing very loud”中“loud”应为副词“loudly”。“I think I see myself as a senior”表达不自然且“senior”用词不当，意图应为“像一位明星（a star）”，并用“feel like”更自然。建议把副词放在动词之后并使用正确的形态，注意固定搭配。

× This is because singing can relieve the anxiety in my heart and it can let me.

✓ This is because singing can relieve the anxiety in my heart and let me relax.

问题类型：时态/句子结构错误（归类为“Past tense issue”因原句不完整）。原句结尾“it can let me.”不完整，缺少宾语或补语。应改为“let me relax”来表达“让我放松”。建议完整表达意图并使用不定式或动词原形作宾补。

× Unfortunately, I haven't learned how to sing because in the one in the one hand, I don't want to be a singer in the future, so I won't join in something in class which need professional teachers to teach me.

✓ Unfortunately, I haven't learned how to sing because, on the one hand, I don't want to be a singer in the future, so I won't join classes that need professional teachers to teach me.

问题类型：存在结构/短语错误（归类为“There be issue”因为存在表达结构问题）。原句“in the one in the one hand”重复且错误，应为“on the one hand”。“join in something in class”不自然，改为“join classes”或“join in classes”。“which need professional teachers to teach me”从句中时态和词序可简化为“that need professional teachers”。建议使用固定连词短语“on the one hand”并简洁表达。

× On the other hand, I think my ways is not so beautiful that can make the others think.

✓ On the other hand, I think my way of singing is not so beautiful to impress others.

问题类型：代词/名词使用错误（归类为“Incorrect use of pronouns”）。原句“my ways is”主谓不一致且“ways”用法不当，应该是“my way of singing”或“my singing style”。“that can make the others think”不自然，应改为“不足以打动别人”即“to impress others”。建议注意可数/不可数名词及主谓一致，并用合适的固定搭配。

× I have two person I want to sing for.

✓ I have two people I want to sing for.

问题类型：代词/名词使用错误（归类为“Incorrect use of pronouns”）。“person”单数不符合数量，应使用复数“people”。根据语境需用复数形式。建议复习可数名词单复数变化。

× The first one is my mom because I'm very appreciative about what he did to me and he raised me up and the fir and the second person is my boyfriend because I want to sing to her to express the love that I have to him.

✓ The first one is my mom because I'm very appreciative of what she did for me and she raised me. The second person is my boyfriend because I want to sing to him to express the love I have for him.

问题类型：代词使用错误（归类为“Incorrect use of pronouns”）。原句把母亲指代为“he/she”混淆，应使用“she”。“appreciative about”应为“appreciative of”，“did to me”常用“did for me”，“raised me up”可简化为“raised me”。关于男朋友，代词也混乱，用“him”而不是“her”。此外“the fir”是残缺。建议注意性别代词和固定搭配（appreciative of, do for sb.）。

× Of course, I think music is always a best ways to cheer somebody up.

✓ Of course, I think music is always the best way to cheer somebody up.

问题类型：量词/冠词使用错误（归类为“Incorrect use of quantifiers”）。原句“a best ways”同时使用不定冠词和比较级/最高级不当，且“ways”与“a”不匹配。正确为“the best way”或“a great way”。建议理解可数/不可数名词与冠词及最高级用法。

× When you hear the tone, you will imagine a story which you may never can experience.

✓ When you hear the tune, you can imagine a story that you may never be able to experience.

问题类型：时态/情态动词使用错误（归类为“Incorrect use of tense and modal structure”但按列表可归为“Modal verb usage”或“Past tense issue”）。原句“may never can”错误叠用情态动词，应使用“may never be able to”或“might never be able to”。另外“tone”在此语境应为“tune”。建议不要同时使用两个情态动词，改用“be able to”结构。

× And this is the sense of the happiness come from, especially when you hear some joyful music.

✓ And this is where the sense of happiness comes from, especially when you hear joyful music.

问题类型：动词+ing/句子结构（归类为“Verb + -ing form”或“Sentence structure errors”）。原句“the sense of the happiness come from”语序错误，正确结构为“this is where ... comes from”。去掉不必要的冠词“the”使表达更自然。建议练习从句和固定句型“this is where ... comes from”。

× I listen music almost every day and I prefer the thing called Justin Bieber.

✓ I listen to music almost every day and I prefer the singer Justin Bieber.

问题类型：动词与冠词使用错误（归类为“Incorrect use of verbs and articles”）。动词短语应为“listen to music”。“the thing called Justin Bieber”不礼貌且不准确，改为“the singer Justin Bieber”或“an artist called Justin Bieber”。建议注意固定搭配和称呼人时使用适当的名词。

× He's a favorite singer that I admire because his songs can always cheer me up.

✓ He's my favorite singer because his songs can always cheer me up.

问题类型：代词/定语错误（归类为“Incorrect use of pronouns”）。“a favorite singer that I admire”冗长且不自然，直接说“my favorite singer”更简洁自然。建议使用更简练的所有格表达喜好。

× When I met some terrible thing, I can listen to his songs to relieve myself.

✓ When I meet something terrible, I can listen to his songs to cheer myself up.

问题类型：时态错误（归类为“Incorrect use of tense”）。原句“met”用过去式与后文的“一般现在可以”不一致，应用一般现在时“meet”。“relieve myself”搭配不自然，改为“cheer myself up”。建议确保时间状语与动词时态一致，使用自然搭配。

× This is because in our country who taken a singing class mean she or he want to be a singer or a musician in the future.

✓ This is because in our country taking a singing class means that someone wants to be a singer or a musician in the future.

问题类型：冠词/动名词结构错误（归类为“Article errors”）。原句“who taken a singing class”语法错误，应使用动名词“taking”。“mean she or he want”主谓不一致且人称混用，应改为“means that someone wants”。建议使用动名词作主语，并保持主谓一致与人称一致。

× But I don't have that dream so I just singing as my Hobbit, not a professional thing.

✓ But I don't have that dream, so I just sing as my hobby, not as a professional pursuit.

问题类型：动词形式与名词拼写错误（归类为“Incorrect use of verbs and nouns”）。“I just singing”缺少助动词或应改为动词原形“sing”。“Hobbit”拼写错误，应为“hobby”。“not a professional thing”不自然，改为“not as a professional pursuit”。建议注意动词时态与动名词/不定式的正确使用，以及拼写检查。