Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep within 3–4 sentences. Also use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "express my emotions", "feel self-conscious").

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. However, I usually sing alone because I feel self-conscious about my voice. As a result, I rarely perform in front of others except close friends.

提案: Start with a clear statement, use correct verb tenses and plural forms, and combine short sentences to avoid choppiness. Add specific details about what you learned and link ideas with words like "during" or "because".

例: Yes, I have. When I was a child my dad enrolled me in private singing lessons, which I took for two or three courses. During those lessons I learned breathing techniques, pitch control and stage presence, which improved my confidence.

提案: Begin with a concise topic sentence and use linking words to show cause and effect. Use more natural phrases (e.g., "I'm too shy to perform publicly"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct small grammatical slips.

例: At the moment, I wouldn't sing for anyone publicly because I'm too shy to perform. I get nervous and worry about being judged, so I usually sing only for myself or for close friends.

提案: Make a clear, grammatically correct opening sentence and avoid unclear pronouns. Provide specific reasons or examples and link them coherently. Use accurate nouns (e.g., "singers", "a single" -> "not only for singers to express themselves").

例: Definitely. Singing can bring people a lot of happiness because music evokes emotions and creates shared experiences. For example, popular singers can inspire fans and lift their moods at concerts or through uplifting songs.

提案: Answer directly, correct collocations and grammar (e.g., "I enjoy listening to others sing", "live singers"). Add a brief reason and an example using linking words like "especially" and "for example".

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing, especially live singers at bars or concerts because the atmosphere is more exciting. For example, I feel amazed when I discover a friend can sing well at an informal gathering.

提案: Provide a clear opening sentence and correct grammar ("private lessons", "I took a few courses"). Give specific outcomes from the classes and link them with words like "which" or "so".

例: Yes, I did. My dad enrolled me in private singing lessons when I was in primary school, and I took a few courses. Those lessons helped me gain confidence and practical skills such as breath control and pitch accuracy.