Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix tense errors (e.g., use past simple for past habit).

例: I don't sing much now. However, when I was a child I loved singing in the bathroom because the acoustics made my voice sound stronger and I dreamed of becoming a singer.

提案: Use correct verb forms and give a short reason. Begin with a direct answer, then add a specific explanation using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: No, I haven't. I never took it seriously because I preferred to imitate my favorite artists rather than take formal lessons.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and use correct phrasing. Use linking words to explain your reason and avoid repetition. Correct vocabulary like 'express' instead of 'appeared'.

例: I hadn't really considered singing for anyone in particular, but if I had to choose, I would sing for my mum to express my appreciation for everything she has done.

提案: Answer directly and support with a clear example. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and linking words such as 'for example' to make it coherent. Be specific about how singing affects emotions.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness. For example, when a singer gives a great performance, the audience often becomes excited and cheers, which shows how music can lift people's spirits.

提案: Structure your answer with a clear conditional sentence and correct word order. Use linking words like 'however' for contrast and be specific about reasons. Avoid hyperbole like 'for the rest of my life' unless you clarify it's an exaggeration.

例: It depends on the singer. If it's a friend, I sometimes find it a bit annoying because they are not very skilled; however, if it's my favourite singer, I really enjoy listening because their voice and style are inspiring.

提案: Give a direct answer then explain with clear past tense and reasons. Use linking words like 'because' and correct repetition errors. Add a brief consequence or reflection to enrich the response.

例: No, I haven't. When I was young my mum wanted me to take singing lessons, but I refused because I preferred to keep singing as a hobby and didn't want to make it a career.

× I don't like singing anymore, but when I was younger I liked to sing in my bathroom so much because in in when when I was a kid, I want to be a singer.

✓ I don't like singing anymore, but when I was younger I liked to sing in my bathroom a lot because when I was a kid, I wanted to be a singer.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly: 'I want to be a singer' should be past 'I wanted' to match the earlier past timeframe 'when I was a kid'. Also remove duplicated words 'in in when when' and change 'so much' to 'a lot' for naturalness. Suggestion: keep the past tense consistent when describing past desires or habits.

× No I haven't. I never take it so serious. I just think follow my favorite artist.

✓ No, I haven't. I never took it seriously. I just followed my favorite artist.

The student replies to a past experience question, so past tense is required: 'take' should be 'took' and the adverb 'seriously' is needed instead of the adjective 'serious'. 'I just think follow my favorite artist' is ungrammatical and should be past: 'I just followed my favorite artist' or 'I just imitated my favorite artist'. Suggestion: use past tense verbs and correct adverb forms when talking about past habits.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This question sentence is grammatically correct as written. No correction needed. (Included for completeness.)

× I never thought about it. I never think that I'm gonna think for someone, but if I have choosing for someone, I would sing for my mum to show my appeared appeared appreciation to her.

✓ I never thought about it. I never thought I would sing for someone, but if I had to choose someone, I would sing for my mum to show my appreciation to her.

Inconsistent tenses: 'I never think' should be past 'I never thought' to match 'I never thought about it'. Colloquial 'I'm gonna think for someone' is incorrect; use 'I would sing for someone' or 'I would sing for someone'. 'If I have choosing' should be 'if I had to choose'. Remove duplicate word 'appeared' and use 'appreciation' without 'appeared'. Suggestion: maintain tense consistency and use standard conditional forms ('if I had to choose').

× Yes, of course if singer have good performance can make audience so happy like I saw in many concert the fan club hyped so much when meat and here their favorite artist.

✓ Yes, of course. If a singer has a good performance, they can make the audience very happy. I saw this at many concerts: the fan clubs get very excited when they meet and hear their favorite artist.

Multiple errors: singular/plural and agreement: 'singer have' should be 'a singer has'. Use articles: 'a singer', 'the audience', 'many concerts'. Verb forms: 'can make audience so happy' -> 'can make the audience very happy'. Spelling/word choice: 'meat and here' should be 'meet and hear'. 'Fan club' should be plural 'fan clubs' or 'the fan club gets excited'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and correct article use; choose correct homophones (meet/hear) and maintain consistent noun number.

× It depends on who who is singing is. If it's my friend I don't like to listen to them because I found it a bit annoying. But if it is my sing my favorite singer I would love to listen for the rest of my life.

✓ It depends on who is singing. If it's my friend, I don't like listening to them because I find it a bit annoying. But if it is my favorite singer, I would love to listen for the rest of my life.

Remove duplicated words 'who who is singing is' -> 'who is singing'. Verb tense/consistency: 'I found' should be 'I find' to express a general feeling. 'I don't like to listen to them' is better as 'I don't like listening to them'. 'my sing my favorite singer' is garbled; correct to 'my favorite singer'. Suggestion: avoid duplicate words, keep present tense for general statements, and use correct pronoun placement.

× No, I haven't. Even when I was young my mum wanted to to take me to singing class but I don't want to be there because I think I will keep singing as a hobby. I don't want to make it serious.

✓ No, I haven't. Even when I was young my mum wanted to take me to singing classes, but I didn't want to go because I thought I would keep singing as a hobby. I didn't want to make it serious.

Mix of past and present: because the events occurred in the past, use past tense consistently: 'I don't want' -> 'I didn't want', 'I think I will keep' -> 'I thought I would keep'. Remove duplicate 'to'. Use plural 'singing classes' or 'a singing class' and replace 'be there' with 'go' for clarity. Suggestion: match tense to the time frame being described and correct minor word choice issues.