Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unnecessary repetition and informal fillers. Use correct verb forms and clearer phrasing.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it relaxes me and helps me express emotions. For example, I often sing pop and Bollywood songs in the bathroom, and I like Diljit Dosanjh’s music because his energetic style suits my personality.

提案: Use correct past tense and avoid odd wording (“magician”). Give a clear negative statement then explain recent actions with complete sentences. Reduce hesitation and finish your idea.

例: No, I haven't had formal singing lessons, but recently I downloaded a singing app where I plan to learn basic techniques such as pitch control and breathing exercises.

提案: Correct pronoun and tense errors and be direct. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add one brief reason. Avoid contradictory pronouns and filler phrases.

例: I would like to sing for my boyfriend to make him feel special and to show my affection. Singing a romantic song would help me express my feelings more personally.

提案: Organize response: give a clear opinion then support with two coherent reasons. Remove hesitations and correct grammar. Provide a specific example of how singing can comfort or cheer someone.

例: Yes, I think singing brings happiness because it helps people express emotions and lifts their mood. For instance, singing a cheerful song can comfort a friend who is upset and make them feel cared for.

提案: Avoid hesitations and use accurate names and adjectives. Start with a clear statement, then give specific examples (singers, concerts) and one reason why you enjoy them.

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to singers, especially Punjabi artists like Diljit Dosanjh. I also like going to concerts because live performances let me appreciate musicians’ energy and discover new songs.

提案: Use correct grammar (present perfect: I haven't taken any singing classes). State clearly and then explain current steps you are taking. Avoid repetition and fillers.

例: No, I haven't taken formal singing classes, but I recently downloaded a singing app to learn basic skills like breathing techniques and pitch control.

× I didn't learnt any music from any magician or any, uh, any singer.

✓ I didn't learn any music from any magician or singer.

After 'didn't' use the base form of the verb (learn). 'Didn't' is the past auxiliary and requires the base form, not the past participle or past simple. Suggestion: use 'didn't learn' for negative past actions.

× recently I downloaded an music app known as singers, uh, from that I will definitely learn some concepts and.

✓ Recently I downloaded a music app called Singers; from that I will definitely learn some concepts.

Use 'a' before a consonant sound ('a music app') not 'an'. Also 'known as' can be more simply 'called'. End the sentence properly. Suggestion: start with a capital and use 'a' for singular countable nouns beginning with a consonant sound.

× To be honest, I would love to sing for my boyfriend so that I can feel her connected and also show my care and affection toward him.

✓ To be honest, I would love to sing for my boyfriend so that I can feel connected to him and also show my care and affection toward him.

Pronouns must agree in gender and reference. 'Boyfriend' is male, so 'her' is incorrect. Also use 'feel connected to him' rather than 'feel her connected'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun gender and object preposition are correct.

× So if we want to share, uh, show others how much we love uh, them, we can express that through our vocals and if one anyone get angry from us.

✓ So if we want to show others how much we love them, we can express that through our vocals; if anyone gets angry with us, we can try to comfort them with song.

The original mixes fragments and has incorrect verb form and preposition. Use 'show others how much we love them' (no extra 'share'), 'anyone gets' (subject-verb agreement), and 'angry with' (correct preposition). Suggestion: break into two clear clauses and correct agreement and prepositions.

× Yes, I love to listen uh singers such as Tulsi Dosanjh, Punjabi renounced singer.

✓ Yes, I love to listen to singers such as Tulsi Dosanjh, a renowned Punjabi singer.

'Listen' needs the preposition 'to' before the object. 'Renounced' is incorrect; use 'renowned' meaning famous. Also use the article 'a' before the noun phrase. Suggestion: learn common collocations like 'listen to' and the difference between 'renounced' and 'renowned'.

× I also love to go to concerts so that we can listen different musicians and also spend time in enjoying their songs.

✓ I also love to go to concerts so that we can listen to different musicians and also spend time enjoying their songs.

Use 'listen to' with the object. Do not use 'in' before 'enjoying' here; 'spend time enjoying' is the correct pattern. Suggestion: practice verb-preposition combinations and 'spend time' constructions.

× To be honest uh, I have went a learnt any singing from any single uh, but uh recently I downloaded and singe app and I hope that I will learn some basics of singing.

✓ To be honest, I have not taken any singing lessons, but recently I downloaded a singing app and I hope that I will learn some basics of singing.

'Have went' is incorrect; the present perfect of 'go' is 'have gone', but the intended meaning is probably 'have not taken any singing lessons'. Use 'taken lessons' instead of 'went a learnt'. 'Singe app' is a misspelling; use 'singing app'. Suggestion: use 'have not taken' for experience up to now and 'recently I downloaded' for a past recent action; choose proper collocations like 'take lessons' and 'singing app'.

× I listen and memorize him.

✓ I listen to him and memorize his songs.

Use 'listen to' with the preposition. 'Memorize him' is unnatural; you memorize songs or lyrics, not a person. Suggestion: use correct object nouns with verbs and include 'to' after 'listen'.

× But being a Punjabi and a loud person, I also love Diljit Dosanjh and his latest album.

✓ As a Punjabi and a loud person, I also love Diljit Dosanjh and his latest album.

'Being a Punjabi' is grammatical but 'As a Punjabi' is more natural for stating identity or background. This is a style suggestion rather than strict grammar. Suggestion: prefer 'As a' for expressing background.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

This question is fine; no correction needed. Included here to show no change is necessary.