Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I like singing), then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and unfinished phrases. Focus on natural expressions (e.g., "when I was bored" not "board").

例: Yes, I enjoy singing. It helps me relax when I feel bored or stressed, and singing cheerful songs usually improves my mood quickly.

提案: Give a direct answer and support it with brief, relevant details. Use linking words like "however" or "but" correctly, and avoid repeating the same idea. Clarify whether you have taken lessons or just sing casually.

例: To be frank, I haven't taken formal singing lessons, but I sing frequently at home for fun. However, I would consider lessons in the future to improve my technique.

提案: Complete your sentence and be specific about reasons. Use correct nouns and plural forms ("older people"), and give one clear reason for each person you mention. Keep it to one or two sentences.

例: I would like to sing for my parents and older people because my parents appreciate family performances, and singing for elders often brings them joy and memories.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and then a specific reason with an example. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" properly. Avoid fragmented sentences and clarify your point about musical preferences.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because music suits different tastes; for example, some people feel uplifted by pop songs while others prefer rap or classical music.

提案: Answer directly and give one or two specific details about what you like. Mention the type of singers or songs and why they inspire you. Keep sentences grammatically correct and avoid unclear references (e.g., "he's a very young rapper").

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to other singers, especially those with strong vocal skills. I often listen to inspirational songs and young rappers whose lyrics motivate me.

提案: Use past experience correctly: say "I haven't taken" if never, and give a clear reason. Avoid contradictory phrases. Be concise and use linking words like "because" to explain your motivation.

例: No, I haven't taken any singing classes because I haven't been very interested in formal training; instead, I listen to music on my own for enjoyment.

× Yes, I like the singing because it may when I was in board it make my it will make me rephrase and so singing a song help me to reduce my. Strange. So singing is important for me.

✓ Yes, I like singing because when I was on board it would make me relax, and singing a song helps me reduce my stress. So singing is important to me.

Problems: unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'singing'; incorrect preposition 'in board' should be 'on board'; modal and tense confusion 'may when I was' changed to 'when I was' with 'would' to express habitual past effect; 'it make my it will make me rephrase' was unclear and corrected to 'would make me relax'; subject-verb agreement 'singing a song help' changed to 'helps'; 'reduce my. Strange.' replaced with 'reduce my stress'; use 'important to me' not 'for me'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles, choose correct prepositions (on board), ensure verb tense consistency and correct subject-verb agreement, and use clear nouns (stress).

× To be frankly, I haven't learned to sing, but sometime I frequently sing, but I haven't tried to sing. But singing a song is a really interesting party. But yeah.

✓ To be frank, I haven't learned to sing, but sometimes I sing frequently; however, I haven't had formal singing lessons. Singing is really interesting.

Problems: 'To be frankly' should be 'To be frank' (adverb/adjective misuse); 'sometime' (one time) vs 'sometimes' (occasionally); tense inconsistency 'I haven't learned' vs 'I frequently sing' clarified; awkward repetition 'I haven't tried to sing' changed to 'I haven't had formal singing lessons' to fit meaning; 'interesting party' incorrect collocation changed to 'interesting'. Suggestion: use correct adverb forms, 'sometimes' for frequency, and avoid repeating the same idea; use precise phrases like 'formal lessons'.

× I would like to sing the song for old peoples and for my parents because.

✓ I would like to sing songs for elderly people and for my parents.

Problems: 'the song' is too specific; 'old peoples' is incorrect plural and noun form — use 'elderly people' or 'old people'; trailing 'because' incomplete. Suggestion: use correct noun phrases and avoid incomplete sentences; use plural 'songs' if general, and 'elderly people' as the standard term.

× Is of course the singing can bring happiness for people because people have different. Mindset Some people want to want to listen diff rap music and someone need to.

✓ Of course singing can bring happiness to people because people have different mindsets. Some people want to listen to different rap music, and some people need it.

Problems: extra 'Is' at start removed; 'bring happiness for' should be 'bring happiness to'; sentence fragments 'because people have different. Mindset' combined into 'different mindsets'; 'want to want to listen diff rap music' corrected to 'want to listen to different rap music'; 'someone need to' corrected to 'some people need it'. Suggestion: ensure complete sentences, correct prepositions 'to', pluralize 'mindset' to 'mindsets', and avoid repetitions.

× Yes, of course I like listening other music because they have a nice singing skill. I usually listen between song which is which inspired me about life and he's a very young rapper and.

✓ Yes, of course I like listening to other music because they have good singing skills. I usually listen to songs that inspire me about life; for example, there's a very young rapper I like.

Problems: missing preposition 'to' after 'listening'; 'a nice singing skill' should be plural 'good singing skills' or 'a nice singing voice'; 'listen between song' incorrect — use 'listen to songs'; 'which is which inspired me about life' corrected to 'that inspire me about life'; sentence fragment at end completed. Suggestion: use 'listen to', choose correct noun number and collocations ('singing skills' or 'singing voice'), and make relative clauses clear.

× To be friendly I won't take any singing class because umm I didn't have more interest in this singing, but I listen some music for some period for when I put singing is not interested in my life.

✓ To be honest, I wouldn't take any singing classes because I don't have much interest in singing, though I listen to some music occasionally when singing is not a focus in my life.

Problems: 'To be friendly' should be 'To be honest'; 'I won't take' implies future refusal—use 'I wouldn't take' or 'I don't take' depending on meaning; 'didn't have more interest' changed to present 'don't have much interest' to match overall context; 'listen some music' needs 'listen to some music'; 'for some period for when I put singing is not interested in my life' was unclear and rephrased as 'occasionally when singing is not a focus in my life'. Suggestion: use correct modal forms to express willingness/hypothetical ('would'), correct prepositions, and keep tense consistent to convey current attitudes.