Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but improve grammatical accuracy and use a concise, natural structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundant words and fix verb forms (e.g., use "helps" instead of "helped").

例: Yes, I enjoy singing. It relaxes me and helps me relieve stress, especially after a long day at work because concentrating on the melody calms my mind.

提案: Your idea is clear but the grammar and wording are incorrect. Use a direct negation and then give two concise, specific reasons. Use correct verb forms and articles (e.g., "learned how to sing", "academic subjects").

例: No, I have never learned formal singing lessons because they are expensive, and my parents preferred that I concentrate on academic subjects when I was young.

提案: Main idea is understandable but the answer is long, repetitive and contains many errors. Give a clear topic sentence (I usually sing for myself), then one specific reason with a brief example. Correct vocabulary (e.g., "boost my energy", "stressful situation").

例: I usually sing for myself because it relaxes me and boosts my energy; for example, I sing quietly after a stressful day at the office to feel better.

提案: Your response has a good idea but needs clearer phrasing and fewer repetitions. Start with a direct opinion, then provide a specific reason and an example. Use correct sentence structure (e.g., "connect people from different cultures").

例: Yes, definitely. Singing can bring people happiness because melodies often transcend language and can connect people from different cultures, for example at international music festivals where audiences sing along together.

提案: The main idea is positive but the sentence is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Use a simple topic sentence and one specific supporting detail about why you enjoy it. Replace incorrect words ("thinking") with "singing" and avoid vague phrases.

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing because a powerful performance makes me feel happy and excited, and I like sharing that enjoyment with the audience.

提案: Your response explains reasons but needs clearer, grammatically correct phrasing and logical sequencing. Use past tense for childhood reasons and present for current situation. Be concise and specific about the current barrier (e.g., lack of time).

例: No, I have never taken singing classes. When I was a child my parents felt they were too expensive, and now I would like to learn but I don't have enough free time due to work.

× I love singing because I find it's very relaxed and the music's already helped me to release my stress.

✓ I love singing because I find it very relaxing and the music already helps me to relieve my stress.

The original uses mixed tenses and incorrect adjective form: 'it's very relaxed' should be 'it is very relaxing' to describe the effect of singing. 'the music's already helped me' mixes present perfect with 'already' awkwardly; using simple present 'helps' matches the general truth context. 'release my stress' is less idiomatic than 'relieve my stress'. Improve by using consistent present tense and correct adjective/verb forms.

× No, I have never experienced about learning sing singing.

✓ No, I have never experienced learning to sing.

Errors: 'experienced about' is incorrect; 'experience' is transitive and does not need 'about' here. 'learning sing singing' mixes forms; the correct structure is 'learning to sing' or 'learning singing'. Use present participle 'learning' with infinitive 'to sing' for clarity.

× This is because it's very expensive and my parents would like me to focus on academic subject.

✓ This is because it is very expensive and my parents want me to focus on academic subjects.

'would like me to' is not wrong but 'want me to' is more natural for habitual stance. 'academic subject' should be plural 'academic subjects' when speaking generally. Also use 'it is' instead of contraction for formality consistency.

× Actually I love to sing for myself because when I sing I find it's very relaxed and feel good and also boot my energy after I find office the terrible situation.

✓ Actually I love to sing for myself because when I sing I find it very relaxing and feel good, and it also boosts my energy after I encounter a terrible situation at the office.

Multiple issues: 'it's very relaxed' should be 'it is very relaxing' (adjective form). 'boot my energy' is incorrect verb; use 'boosts my energy'. Word order and prepositions: 'after I find office the terrible situation' is jumbled; correct to 'after I encounter a terrible situation at the office.' Ensure subject-verb agreement 'it also boosts'.

× I think singing can bring happiness to people because the singing or the melody can connect between people who from different culture and from different country is can connect them together.

✓ I think singing can bring happiness to people because the melody can connect people from different cultures and countries.

Sentence has redundancy and incorrect grammar: 'connect between people' should be 'connect people'. 'who from different culture and from different country' needs correct noun forms and preposition: 'people from different cultures and countries'. Remove extra 'is can connect them together'. Simplify for clarity.

× Yes, I like listening to other thinking because when I hear something awesome people thinking I feel fun and enjoy with them.

✓ Yes, I like listening to others sing because when I hear something awesome, I feel happy and enjoy it with them.

'other thinking' is incorrect; intended 'others sing'. 'people thinking' is ungrammatical. 'I feel fun' should be 'I feel happy' or 'I have fun'. 'enjoy with them' needs an object: 'enjoy it with them.' Use commas to separate clauses.

× No, I never have a staking a singing class because when I was a child my parents thought it's very expensive and when I grow up I have enough money, but I don't have time to learn.

✓ No, I have never taken a singing class because when I was a child my parents thought it was very expensive, and when I grew up I had enough money, but I did not have time to learn.

Multiple tense errors: 'never have a staking a singing class' should be 'have never taken a singing class'. 'my parents thought it's very expensive' should use past 'it was' to match 'thought'. 'when I grow up I have enough money' should be past 'when I grew up I had enough money' and final clause 'but I don't have time' should be past 'did not have time' to keep consistent past narrative. Also remove 'staking' typo.