Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and concise supporting reasons. Avoid contradictions ("I don't think well" is unclear). Use linking words to connect ideas and keep to 2–4 sentences. Be specific about when and why singing relaxes you.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a long day. For example, when I sing familiar songs I forget my worries and feel happier, so I often sing for 10–15 minutes before bed to unwind.

提案: Begin with a clear statement about whether you have learned singing, then give specific details about how you learned and your practice routine. Use linking words (e.g., "however", "so") and correct tense/grammar. Keep it concise.

例: Yes, I have taught myself some singing techniques by watching TikTok tutorials and livestream lessons. However, I still find some techniques difficult, so I practice every day for about 20 minutes to improve my voice.

提案: Start with a direct answer naming who you would sing for, then explain why using linking words. Correct grammar ("introverted") and avoid informal fillers. Be specific about circumstances you might sing for them.

例: I would like to sing for my parents or close friends because I am quite shy about performing publicly. For instance, I might sing for them at family gatherings when I feel comfortable and supported.

提案: Answer directly and provide clear reasons with specific examples. Use appropriate linking words ("because", "for example") and correct word choices ("fun" rather than "funny" here). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I believe singing can make people happier because it reduces stress and helps them focus on the present. For example, singing in the shower or humming a favorite tune can lift your mood and improve your day.

提案: Respond with a clear topic sentence and give specific details about what you enjoy (genres, artists, platforms). Fix grammar ("I usually listen to"), and explain why you like listening to certain singers using linking words.

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to many singers on TikTok, especially talented and popular artists. I like watching short covers because they introduce me to new styles and inspire me to try different songs.

提案: Give a direct answer then explain the reason briefly and state your future plan. Use correct grammar and natural expressions ("I haven't taken any singing classes"; "I plan to"), and avoid repetition. Be specific about steps you will take.

例: No, I haven't taken any singing classes because I can't afford them at the moment. However, I plan to practice more with online lessons and save money or ask my parents for support so I can take classes in the future.

× Actually I don't think well, but I very like singing because when I sing I feel more relaxed and I think it's a funny activities and when I was more I like to become a singer.

✓ Actually I am not very good at it, but I really like singing because when I sing I feel more relaxed and I think it's a fun activity, and when I was younger I wanted to become a singer.

Multiple issues: 'I don't think well' is unnatural; use 'I am not very good at it' for ability. 'I very like' is incorrect adverb use; use 'I really like'. 'a funny activities' mixes singular/plural and adjective choice; use 'a fun activity'. 'when I was more' is unclear; likely 'when I was younger'. Also ensure verb tense and agreement: 'I wanted to become' fits past desire. Suggestions: choose appropriate adverbs (really, very) and maintain singular/plural agreement for nouns, use clear time expressions.

× I have learned on the Tiktok video and the live stream but I still don't sing well and I think it's a difficult for me but I very still like it and I also sing every day.

✓ I learned from TikTok videos and live streams, but I still don't sing well. I think it is difficult for me, but I still really like it and I also sing every day.

'have learned' is acceptable but simple past 'learned' is natural here. Use preposition 'from' not 'on' with sources: 'from TikTok videos and live streams'. 'it's a difficult' wrongly uses adjective where noun phrase 'difficult' needs 'a' + noun or 'difficult for me' without 'a'; so use 'it is difficult for me'. 'I very still like' has wrong adverb order; use 'still really like' or 'really still like'. Suggestions: use correct prepositions, correct adjective/noun forms, and place adverbs in natural order.

× I usually sing along because I'm very shy and I'm introvert person but I'm gonna be to try sing for my parents or my friends.

✓ I usually sing along because I'm very shy and I'm an introverted person, but I'm going to try to sing for my parents or my friends.

'I'm introvert person' needs an article and adjective form: 'an introverted person'. 'gonna be to try sing' is incorrect informal and ungrammatical; use 'going to try to sing'. Suggestions: use 'an' before nouns starting with vowel sounds, use adjective form 'introverted', and form future intention as 'going to try to + verb'.

× Yes, I think when we think we can reduce our stress and focus only for ourselves and don't pay attention to another activities, it's just funny.

✓ Yes, I think singing can reduce our stress and help us focus on ourselves and not pay attention to other activities; it's just enjoyable.

Original repeats 'think' and has awkward structure. 'focus only for ourselves' should be 'focus on ourselves'. 'another activities' is wrong; use 'other activities'. 'funny' is a wrong adjective for pleasant; use 'enjoyable' or 'pleasant'. Suggestions: avoid repetition, use correct prepositions ('focus on'), and use appropriate adjectives.

× I usually listening to many of singer on the Tiktok and I admit the very famous and is a talented person.

✓ I usually listen to many singers on TikTok, and I admit some are very famous and talented.

'I usually listening' needs base verb 'listen' after 'usually' (simple present). 'many of singer' should be 'many singers'. 'I admit the very famous and is a talented person' is ungrammatical; express as 'some are very famous and talented'. Suggestions: ensure correct verb forms after adverbs of frequency, use plural nouns for 'many', and simplify clauses.

× No, I don't. I don't have enough money to take care of singing class, but I'm gonna be to try to study more harder and encourage my parents to give me money.

✓ No, I haven't. I don't have enough money to take singing classes, but I'm going to try to study harder and encourage my parents to give me money.

'I don't' as answer to 'Have you ever taken' should be 'No, I haven't.' 'take care of singing class' is incorrect; say 'take singing classes'. 'gonna be to try to' is wrong; use 'going to try to'. 'more harder' is incorrect double comparative; use 'harder'. Suggestions: use correct short answers for present perfect questions, correct verb phrases for attending classes, and avoid double comparatives.