Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子有语法和用词错误，表达也有些重复。回答应更简洁并使用连贯词连接观点与例子。注意时态一致性（例如把“make”改为“makes”，“forgot”改为“forget”或用现在完成时），并把“interesting”换为更合适的形容词如“happy”或“refreshed”。可用两个到三句完成回答，开头给出观点，接着用具体例子支持。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and forget about work stress. For example, when I sing alone at home or with friends, I feel refreshed and more cheerful, which helps me unwind.

提案: 表达含糊且有语法错误，句子零散。应直接回答并给出原因，使用完整句子并避免不必要的词。用连词（because, so）把原因和结论连接得更流畅。

例: No, I haven't had formal singing lessons because I don't see it as a necessary skill for my career. I usually sing for fun, so I haven't felt the need to take classes.

提案: 口语过于随意（如“wanna”）且时态和冠词使用有误。回答应更具体并用正确时态描述过去经历，同时用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I'd sing for strangers or anyone around me. For example, once I was at a restaurant and heard someone celebrating a birthday, so I sang ‘Happy Birthday’ with other customers to join the celebration.

提案: 表达意思清楚但有语法错误和措辞不自然（如“finish exhausted day”）。建议用更地道的短语（例如“after a tiring day”），并保持时态一致。将比喻（like a cure）保留可，但要简洁。

例: Yes, I believe singing can lift people's spirits. After a tiring day or when someone feels lonely, singing can relieve stress and instantly make them feel happier.

提案: 句子有主谓一致、时态和词形错误（如“who are”, “won't listening”）。回答应先给观点，再用一两句说明标准，避免评价他人负面时用词过于绝对。

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing, especially when they are talented. However, if a performance sounds tired or unprepared, I might not be very interested.

提案: 用词不正式（如“Nope”），并有语法、数与词序错误（如“senior class”, “isn't a necessary classes”）。应直接回答并解释原因，避免重复，并用正确名词形式。

例: No, I haven't taken any singing classes because I don't consider singing a necessary skill for me. It's more of a personal hobby, so I haven't pursued formal lessons.

× I love singing because it make me feel relaxed and forgot the stress from work.

✓ I love singing because it makes me feel relaxed and forget the stress from work.

句子中主语是“I/it”，这里动词应使用第三人称单数形式“makes”。此外，“forgot”与前面的“make”并列，应使用原形“forget”，保持时态一致。建议记住：主语为第三人称单数（it）时动词加-s，并在并列动词中保持相同的形式。

× For example, every time when I was alone to sing at home or with my friends hanging out, I will feel interesting and relieve myself.

✓ For example, every time when I am alone singing at home or hanging out with my friends, I feel interested and relaxed.

“to sing”在此处应使用动名词短语“singing”表达正在进行的动作；“with my friends hanging out”词序错误，改为“hanging out with my friends”。情感表达用“feel interested”而非“feel interesting”（主语感觉是“interested”）；“relieve myself”不自然，改为“feel relaxed”。时态也应与“every time”一般现在时一致。

× I haven't learned how to sing because I don't think it's a necessary skill we need to handle it.

✓ I haven't learned how to sing because I don't think it's a necessary skill we need.

句尾的“handle it”多余且不合适；应直接说“a necessary skill we need”。另外整体使用现在完成时(yet)来表达未学过是可以的，保持原句时态即可。建议避免重复意思的短语。

× Just a personal. Interesting. So I haven't learned singing before.

✓ It's just a personal preference. So I haven't learned to sing before.

原句断句不完整且用词不当。“Just a personal. Interesting.”应合并为“It's just a personal preference”。“learned singing”不常用，通常说“learned to sing”。保持句子完整并使用正确名词短语。

× I wanna sing for stranger or anyone else.

✓ I wanna sing for strangers or anyone else.

“stranger”应使用复数“strangers”或加不定冠词“a stranger”。这里表达泛指其他人，使用复数更自然。注意口语中“wanna”可以，但正式写作建议用“want to”。

× For example once I was at the restaurants and heard the other customers birthday at that day and I sing a happy birthday song to celebrate with them.

✓ For example, once I was at a restaurant and heard it was another customer's birthday that day, so I sang a happy birthday song to celebrate with them.

“the restaurants”应为“a restaurant”；“the other customers birthday at that day”结构和介词错误，改为“it was another customer's birthday that day”；时态应为过去时，用“sang”。此外加连词使句子更流畅。

× singing is like a cure for people who finish exhausted day or alone at home.

✓ singing is like a cure for people who have had an exhausting day or are alone at home.

“finish exhausted day”语序和形容词形式错误，应为“have had an exhausting day”；“or alone at home”缺少动词，需补“are”。使用现在完成时/状态描述更自然。

× It was the best way to relieve person's stress and bring happiness at that same moment.

✓ It is the best way to relieve a person's stress and bring happiness at that moment.

时态应与普遍事实一致用现在时“is”；“person's stress”需要不定冠词“a person's”；“that same moment”冗余，简化为“that moment”或“at the moment”。

× if the person who are talented on music, I would definitely love to hear that.

✓ If the person is talented in music, I would definitely love to hear them.

“who are”与单数“the person”不一致，改为“is”；“talented on music”介词应为“talented in music”；指代听的人用“them”更自然且性别中性。

× However, if someone who seems exhausted, I definitely won't listening to their songs.

✓ However, if someone seems exhausted, I definitely won't listen to their songs.

情态动词后应接动词原形，不能用动名词，故“won't listening”应改为“won't listen”。同时“if someone who seems exhausted”中“who”多余，改为“if someone seems exhausted”。

× Nope, I don't attend any senior class before because I think singing isn't a necessary classes or lecture I need to learn.

✓ Nope, I haven't attended any singing classes before because I don't think singing is a necessary class or lecture I need to take.

时态应用现在完成式“haven't attended”来表示之前没参加过；“senior class”误用，应为“singing class(s)”；单复数要一致，“a necessary class”或“necessary classes”；“need to learn”应改为“need to take”。

× I think it's more about personal preference I think.

✓ I think it's more about personal preference.

句中重复“I think”，造成冗余，删除一个即可；时态和句子类型为一般现在，保持不变。

× I never take class before.

✓ I have never taken a class before.

表示过去至今未做过某事应使用现在完成时“have never taken”；“take class”搭配不自然，改为“taken a class”。