Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce filler words (uh, umm) and correct grammar (e.g., “my friends and I go to karaoke” not “my friends with I will want to”).

例: Yes, I enjoy singing. For example, my friends and I often go to a karaoke bar to sing pop songs, and singing together makes us feel happy and relaxed.

提案: Give a clear, concise answer and provide one specific example. Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Include linking words to connect ideas (e.g., “when I was little, my mother taught me basic singing and also I had music classes.”).

例: Yes, I learned some singing when I was little. My mother taught me basic techniques, and I also took music classes at school where we practised simple songs.

提案: Answer directly then support with a brief reason using linking words. Avoid repetition and fillers. Clarify whether you sing for yourself, friends, or both and give a specific context (e.g., karaoke nights).

例: I usually sing for myself and my friends. For example, at karaoke nights I sing with my friends because it helps us relax and have fun together.

提案: Give a clear opinion followed by one or two specific reasons, linked smoothly. Avoid vague words and fillers. Provide a specific example or explanation (e.g., group singing, cultural events) to support your point.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people relax and express emotions. For example, many people in China enjoy singing together at social gatherings, which creates a sense of belonging.

提案: Give a direct answer (yes/no/depends) then explain with a specific reason and example. Use correct verbs (e.g., “sing” not “saying”) and reduce fillers. Mention what makes you enjoy listening (voice quality, emotion, style).

例: It depends on the singer. For example, I enjoy listening to my friend because he sings with emotion and has a pleasant voice, which makes the performance enjoyable.

提案: Respond clearly and give specific details about how you learned or practised singing. Avoid informal words like “nope” in formal tests, and reduce hesitation. Mention online lessons, mimicry of famous singers, or self-practice as evidence.

例: No, I haven't taken formal singing classes. Instead, I learn by listening to famous singers and practising their songs at home, which helps me imitate their style and improve my voice.

× For example, sometimes, uh, my friends with I will want to, uh, karaoke shop to singing, uh, we prefer singing pop song.

✓ For example, sometimes my friends and I want to go to a karaoke shop to sing; we prefer singing pop songs.

Original sentence uses incorrect pronoun order and form ('my friends with I') and incorrect verb and noun forms. 'My friends and I' is the correct subject order. Use 'want to go to' for intention and place, 'to sing' (base verb) after 'go to a karaoke shop', and pluralize 'pop songs'. Use a semicolon or split into two clauses for clarity.

× they make us feel happy and.

✓ They make us feel happy.

Sentence fragment ended with 'and.' Remove the dangling conjunction to complete the thought. 'Make us feel happy' is present simple and matches habitual action.

× When I was little my mom taught me a little and we have music class when I was little but.

✓ When I was little, my mom taught me a little, and we had music class when I were young.

Mixed tenses and redundancy: 'taught' is past correct, but 'we have music class' should be past: 'we had music class'. Also avoid repeating 'when I was little'; use 'when I were young' is wrong—correct is 'when I was young'. Final correction should be: 'When I was little, my mom taught me a little, and we had music class.' Use past tense consistently for past experiences.

× I I studied a song of about.

✓ I studied a song.

The original repeats 'I' and ends with an incomplete phrase 'of about.' Remove repetition and the incomplete part to make a grammatical sentence. If the speaker means duration, specify it: 'I studied a song for a while.'

× Uh, myself also my friends, umm, when we umm went to the uh, karaoke bar, we same together umm and we feel happy and relax.

✓ I sing for myself and my friends; when we go to the karaoke bar, we sing together and feel happy and relaxed.

'Myself also my friends' is incorrect; use 'I' or 'I sing for myself and my friends.' 'We same together' should be 'we sing together.' Use present tense 'go' for habitual activities or past 'went' if referring to a specific occasion. 'Relax' should be past participle 'relaxed' after 'feel.'

× This is a good way to relax.

✓ This is a good way to relax.

No grammatical error; sentence is correct and fits context. Included for completeness.

× Of course, I think singing can uh, relax people and uh, uh, give people, umm, satisfied and uh, umm, umm, happy, umm, so, uh, in China many people like to.

✓ Of course, I think singing can relax people and make them feel satisfied and happy, so in China many people enjoy singing.

Original has awkward structure and missing verb phrases. 'Give people satisfied' is incorrect; use 'make them feel satisfied.' Conclude the clause with 'enjoy singing' to complete thought. Remove filler words and use parallel verbs.

× That depends on uh, For example, one of my friends, uh, he is very good at saying umm, every time when he sing we feel very enjoyable.

✓ That depends. For example, one of my friends is very good at singing; every time he sings, we enjoy it very much.

'Good at saying' is wrong; use 'good at singing.' Subject-verb agreement: 'he sing' should be 'he sings.' 'We feel very enjoyable' is incorrect; use 'we enjoy it' or 'we feel very happy.' Split into clearer sentences.

× Umm, he is very umm, good at singing.

✓ He is very good at singing.

Remove filler words; sentence is grammatically correct aside from fillers. Present simple 'is' is correct for ability.

× Nope, I haven't umm, I seem just uh, follow, uh, famous stars, umm, singer, famous singer, uh, sometimes I like uh, their song.

✓ No, I haven't. I just follow famous singers, and sometimes I like their songs.

Combine clauses properly and use plural 'singers' and 'songs.' 'I haven't' needs an object ('I haven't taken a class') but context implies 'I haven't taken one.' Better: 'No, I haven't; I just follow famous singers, and sometimes I like their songs.' Use simple present for habitual actions.

× I will sing with them, follow them like I will.

✓ I sing along with them; I follow them online.

Original 'I will sing with them, follow them like I will' mixes future and unclear phrasing. Use 'sing along with' for joining the song and 'follow them' (present) for following artists. Avoid redundant 'I will.'