Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は明確で自然ですが、表現がやや単調で繰り返し（"others" や "with others"）があるため、語彙の多様性と具体例を加えて説得力を高めてください。また、文をもう1〜2文にまとめ、接続詞を使って流れを滑らかにしましょう。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it lifts my mood and helps me relax. Singing in a group is especially rewarding since collaborating with others creates a strong sense of unity and shared achievement.

提案: 答えは基本を満たしていますが、文が途中で切れており詳細が不足しています。学んだ具体的なスキルやどのように克服したかを付け加え、接続語（for example, however, so）を使って説明をつなげてください。

例: Yes, I took singing lessons in high school. At first I found harmonizing difficult, but with regular practice and feedback from my teacher I gradually improved my pitch control and blending with the choir.

提案: 内容は良く伝わっていますが、語法のミス（"a lasting memories"）と冗長な表現があります。より自然な言い回しと具体的な例を加えると更に良くなります。

例: I enjoy singing for my family and friends at birthday parties because it helps make the celebration more personal and creates lasting memories. For example, I often learn a special song for my sister that everyone remembers afterward.

提案: 意見は明確ですが、文法ミス（"song have"）と抽象的な表現が目立ちます。具体的な理由や例を挙げ、接続詞を用いて論理的に述べてください。

例: Yes, I believe singing can lift people's spirits because music often conveys emotions and encouragement. For example, a cheerful song can motivate someone going through a difficult time and boost their confidence.

提案: 回答は理解できますが"adult singing"という表現が不自然です。また、繰り返しや不明瞭な主語（"they give me encouragement"）があり、誰を指しているか曖昧です。聞き手や歌手について具体的に述べ、接続語で文を整理してください。

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to other singers, especially my favourite artists. Their live performances make me feel happy, and going to concerts with friends is encouraging and uplifting.

提案: 内容に明らかな誤り（"poker training classes"）があり、文法も不自然です。正確な語彙を使い、時制と受動・能動の使い方を整え、具体的な活動内容（頻度や学んだこと）を加えてください。

例: Yes, I attended singing classes in high school and joined the school choir. Vocal coaches visited regularly and taught us techniques for breathing, pitch control, and harmonizing.

× When we sing with others, we enjoy the collaboration with others and feel the unity of making one thing.

✓ When we sing with others, we enjoy collaborating with them and feel united by creating something together.

The phrase 'enjoy the collaboration with others' is grammatically acceptable but more natural is 'enjoy collaborating with them' using the verb+ -ing form after 'enjoy'. Also 'feel the unity of making one thing' is awkward; 'feel united by creating something together' uses natural collocation and correct participle structure.

× Yes, I took music lessons for singing when I was a high school student.

✓ Yes, I took music lessons for singing when I was a high school student.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense; no change required. However, you could also say 'I took singing lessons' for conciseness.

× It was a little bit tough for me to acquire skills of harmonizing with others and.

✓ It was a little bit tough for me to acquire skills in harmonizing with others.

The original ends with an incomplete conjunction 'and.' Removing 'and' and using the prepositional phrase 'skills in harmonizing' corrects the sentence structure and completes the thought.

× I like to sing for my family and my friends on their birthdays because it is a great opportunity to celebrate with everyone and also it can create a lasting memories for them.

✓ I like to sing for my family and friends on their birthdays because it is a great opportunity to celebrate with everyone and can create lasting memories for them.

Use of the article 'a' with plural 'memories' is incorrect; remove 'a' to form 'lasting memories'. Also 'my family and my friends' is repetitive; 'my family and friends' is more natural. Remove redundant 'also' for conciseness.

× Yes, I think singing can make people happier because the song have great power to encourage people and give strength to move forward.

✓ Yes, I think singing can make people happier because songs have great power to encourage people and give them strength to move forward.

Subject-verb agreement: 'the song have' is incorrect. Use plural 'songs have' or singular 'the song has'. Also add 'them' after 'give' to clarify the object: 'give them strength'.

× Yes, I enjoy listening to adult singing.

✓ Yes, I enjoy listening to adult singers.

'adult singing' is awkward; use the noun 'singers' to describe people who sing. 'Listening to adult singers' is the natural collocation.

× For example, my favorite artist's performances bring me happiness and enjoyment.

✓ For example, my favorite artist's performances bring me happiness and enjoyment.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no article changes required. It is fine as written.

× I often go to their concerts with my friends and they give me encouragement.

✓ I often go to their concerts with my friends, and they give me encouragement.

The sentence is correct but needs a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses. 'Give me encouragement' is acceptable.

× Yes, I took poker training classes when I was a high school student.

✓ Yes, I took vocal training classes when I was a high school student.

The word 'poker' is likely a typo; 'vocal training classes' fits the context. Past tense 'took' is correct.

× My friends and I joined a choir team, so vocal trainers regularly visit us and taught how to harmonize well.

✓ My friends and I joined a choir, so vocal trainers regularly visited us and taught us how to harmonize well.

Tense consistency: 'joined' is past, so follow with past 'visited' and 'taught'. Also add object pronoun 'us' after 'taught' and use 'choir' rather than 'choir team' for naturalness.