Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "singing" repeated) and grammatical errors (use present simple correctly and correct verb forms).

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it comes naturally to me and makes me feel relaxed. In particular, I like performing in front of an audience since their encouragement boosts my confidence and makes the experience more enjoyable.

提案: Answer directly and cleanly. Use a topic sentence then one clear reason with a linking word. Fix grammar: use 'learned' or 'taken singing lessons' and correct infinitive forms. Avoid repetition of 'singing skill.'

例: No, I haven't taken formal singing lessons, but I'm interested in learning because I want to improve my technique and expand my vocal range.

提案: Be concise and specific. Begin with a clear statement, then give a brief reason with a linking word. Correct grammar ("listens to", "appreciate her") and avoid hesitations and repetition.

例: I would like to sing for my mother because she always listens to me and supports my singing. I appreciate her encouragement, so performing for her would mean a lot to me.

提案: Provide a clear, coherent answer with specific reasons and avoid unclear nouns. Start with a direct statement, then support it with examples and linking words. Fix grammar and word choice ('people smile', 'singing brings many benefits').

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it can make people smile and lift their mood. For example, when I sing for friends they often relax and applaud, which creates a positive atmosphere.

提案: Give a clear reason and specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid unclear fragments. Explain how listening helps your learning with one concrete example, and correct grammar and vocabulary.

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing because it helps me learn new techniques and styles. For instance, by listening to experienced singers I can study their phrasing and breath control and then try to copy those techniques.

提案: Respond directly and explain the reason succinctly. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so') correctly and give one specific detail about scheduling or priorities. Avoid filler words and correct tense and vocabulary.

例: No, I haven't taken a singing class because I had to focus on other subjects like science, math and Japanese at school. However, I would like to study music in the future if I have the opportunity.

× Yes, I like singing because I'm good at singing so it is very comfortable to sing very well.

✓ Yes, I like singing because I'm good at it, so it feels comfortable to sing well.

The original places adverbs and phrases awkwardly ('very comfortable to sing very well') and repeats 'singing'. Move 'very/comfortable/well' to natural positions and replace redundant words. Use 'it' to refer to 'singing'. Suggestion: avoid repeating the noun and put adjectives/adverbs next to the verbs or nouns they modify.

× Especially I like singing in front of many people because they are always cheer me up.

✓ Especially, I like singing in front of many people because they always cheer me up.

Incorrect structure 'are always cheer me up' mixes auxiliary and main verb. Use 'they always cheer me up' (subject + verb + object). Remove unnecessary 'are'. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms after subject pronouns.

× No, I've never, but I'm interested in learning it because I'm I want to my skill, I want to improve my singing skill.

✓ No, I haven't, but I'm interested in learning because I want to improve my singing skills.

'I've never' needs an object (e.g., 'I've never learned') or 'I haven't' depending on context. The sentence also contains ungrammatical fragments ('I'm I want to my skill'). Use present continuous for interest and simple present for desire. Use plural 'skills' is more natural here. Suggestion: Complete 'I've never' with a past participle or change to 'I haven't', and simplify to 'I want to improve my singing skills'.

× I would like to sing for my mother because she always listen to my singing and she is she likes my sing singing.

✓ I would like to sing for my mother because she always listens to my singing and she likes my singing.

Subject-verb agreement error with 'she always listen' should be 'she always listens' (third person singular). Also remove duplicated words. Use consistent noun 'singing'. Suggestion: Use third person singular '-s' with he/she/it and avoid repetitions.

× I'm very appreciate her so I would like to sing for my mother.

✓ I really appreciate her, so I would like to sing for my mother.

'I'm very appreciate' is incorrect; 'appreciate' is a verb, not an adjective. Use 'I really appreciate her' or 'I'm very grateful to her.' Suggestion: Use appropriate adverb + verb structure ('really appreciate') or an adjective with 'be' ('I'm very grateful').

× Yeah, definitely. Umm, when when I sing in front of someone, they always be happy on the smile.

✓ Yeah, definitely. When I sing in front of someone, they always smile and are happy.

'They always be happy on the smile' is ungrammatical. Use 'they always smile' or 'they are always happy'. Remove duplicated 'when'. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms and natural collocations: 'smile' rather than 'on the smile'.

× I'm very happy to see their face and behavior.

✓ I'm very happy to see their faces and behaviour.

Use plural 'faces' when referring to multiple people and the noun 'behaviour' (or 'behavior' in US English). 'Their face' sounds awkward when referring to more than one person. Suggestion: Match number of pronoun with noun ('their faces').

× So I think the Singapore will bring numerous and benefits.

✓ So I think singing will bring numerous benefits.

'The Singapore' is incorrect; likely intended 'singing'. Word order 'numerous and benefits' is wrong; correct phrase is 'numerous benefits'. Suggestion: Check for word choice and word order; ensure nouns match meaning.

× Yes, definitely, because it is the IT is.

✓ Yes, definitely, because it is useful.

'It is the IT is' is nonsensical. Replace with a clear description such as 'it is useful' or 'it helps me'. Suggestion: Use concise, meaningful phrases instead of repeated filler words.

× It studies the study for me to learn how to sing well and I can learn the other way to sing, such as be brought or take to the.

✓ It is a study opportunity for me to learn how to sing well, and I can learn different singing techniques.

Original sentence is fragmented and unclear ('be brought or take to the'). Rephrase to convey the idea of learning techniques or methods. Use 'different singing techniques' rather than unclear fragments. Suggestion: Break long sentences into clear clauses and replace unclear phrases with precise vocabulary.

× Uh no I've never because I have to measure in other classes such as science or math umm the Japanese.

✓ No, I've never, because I had to take other classes such as science, math, and Japanese.

'I've never' is incomplete without an object. 'Have to measure in other classes' is wrong verb choice; use 'had to take' for past obligation. Maintain past tense if speaking about past decisions. Suggestion: Use 'I've never taken' or 'No, I haven't' and use 'take classes' for attending courses.

× So I I can't choose but I wanted to major in the music class.

✓ So I couldn't choose, but I wanted to major in music.

Mix of tenses and unnecessary article 'the' before 'music class'. Use past modal 'couldn't' for inability and 'major in music' without 'class'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use correct collocations: 'major in music'.