Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 表达要准确并用恰当词汇，避免把“singing”说成“seeing”。开头应直接回答问题，随后提供一两条具体原因并用连接词衔接。注意句子简洁、语法时态一致，提高发音和流利度。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and feel peaceful. In addition, singing together can help strangers bond, as shared music often creates a friendly atmosphere.

提案: 回答要更直接并使用正确时态，可用简单明了的句子说明时间和原因。补充一两个具体细节（例如学了什么技巧、参加过哪些活动）会更有说服力。

例: Yes, I learned to sing when I was a child because I was chosen for the school choir. During that time I practiced breathing techniques and learned how to harmonize with others.

提案: 先给出明确的对象（例如: friends, family），再用一两句解释原因。注意语法与词汇选择，避免重复和不连贯的表达，使用连接词如 'because' 或 'so'。

例: I usually sing for my friends because singing together creates a relaxed, friendly atmosphere and helps us enjoy our time together.

提案: 先直接回答（Yes/No），然后给出一到两条具体理由或例子。注意使用正确词汇（比如 'singing can bring happiness'），并保持句子简洁、逻辑清楚。

例: Yes, I believe singing can make people happy because music often relaxes listeners and lifts their mood. For example, watching a popular concert can make the audience feel excited and connected.

提案: 直接回应并说明偏好场合（e.g. live performances, theaters）。避免重复词汇，保持句子简短并使用正确搭配（enjoy listening to, enjoy watching）。

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing, especially during live performances in theaters, because the atmosphere and sound quality make the experience more impressive.

提案: 先明确是否上过正规课程，然后补充相关经历（例如学自朋友或家人）。注意时态一致和句子结构，避免混淆词汇。用简短句子说明是谁教的、学到了什么。

例: No, I haven't taken formal singing classes, but a friend taught me some basics when we were young because her mother was a vocal teacher. She showed me simple breathing and pitch exercises.

× Well, I love seeing because I think seeing can make me feel relaxed and sound peaceful.

✓ Well, I love singing because I think singing can make me feel relaxed and sound peaceful.

原句中把 'singing' 错误地拼为 'seeing'，這是詞彙拼寫/使用錯誤，屬於形容詞/副詞使用範疇中的用詞錯誤。應使用動名詞 'singing' 表示喜歡唱歌。建議多注意關鍵詞拼寫並確認語境是否需要動名詞。

× And I also think seeing can make a new relationship between strangers because we can sing together and have fun with each other.

✓ And I also think singing can create new relationships between strangers because we can sing together and have fun.

原句同樣將 'singing' 拼為 'seeing'；此外 'make a new relationship between strangers' 用法不自然，應改為 'create new relationships between strangers'，並將複數處理以符合一般情境。建議使用 'create' 搭配 'relationships'，並刪去冗餘 'with each other'。

× I think so. I had learned how to sing when I was a child because that time I had been selected to be a member of school singing. So I learned how to sing at that time.

✓ I think so. I learned how to sing when I was a child because at that time I was selected to be a member of the school choir. So I learned how to sing then.

原句過度使用過去完成時（had learned, had been selected），而描述過去的經歷一般用簡單過去（learned, was selected）。另外 'school singing' 不自然，應為 'school choir' 或 'school singing group'；'that time' 改為 'at that time' 或 'then'。建議理解過去完成時用於兩個過去事件其中一個先發生的情況，否則用簡單過去。

× Maybe my friends I enjoy singing with my friends because it can make the atmospheres more peaceful and see we see for my friends can respect my friendly.

✓ Maybe my friends. I enjoy singing with them because it can make the atmosphere more peaceful, and my friends respect me.

原句有冗長重複（'my friends' 重複）和代詞使用錯誤（'we see for my friends can respect my friendly' 無意義）。應用代詞 'them' 代替重複名詞；'atmospheres' 應為不可數名詞 'atmosphere'；'respect my friendly' 應為 'respect me'。建議說話時先理清要表達的主語和賓語，避免重複並用正確代詞。

× It's like sinking company have these two peoples because most people will be very relaxed and peaceful when they heard a sounds.

✓ It's like being in a singing company with other people because most people feel very relaxed and peaceful when they hear sounds.

原句有多處用詞錯誤：'sinking' 應為 'singing' 或 'being in a singing group'；'company have these two peoples' 完全不通，改為 'with other people'；'heard'（過去式）應為 'hear'（一般現在時，描述普遍情況）；'a sounds' 應為複數 'sounds' 或 'a sound'。建議注意單詞拼寫和時態一致（描述一般情況用現在時）。

× And if you see, uh, popular shows, uh, people may be seen with you.

✓ And if you watch popular shows, people may sing with you.

原句 'see' 和 'watch' 在語境中應使用 'watch popular shows'；'people may be seen with you' 語法錯誤，應為 'people may sing with you' 或 'people may be seen singing with you'。另外動詞形式需與語境一致。建議學會區分 'see' 和 'watch' 的用法，並用正確的被動/主動表達。

× Of course, actions are enjoying listening to other things, especially in the theaters.

✓ Of course, I enjoy listening to others sing, especially in theaters.

原句 'actions are enjoying listening to other things' 完全不通；應為 'I enjoy listening to others sing' 或 'I enjoy listening to other people sing'；'the theaters' 可簡化為 'theaters'（泛指）。建議重構句子主語和動詞，保持語義清晰。

× Actually, I enjoy to watch a music theaters in the theaters.

✓ Actually, I enjoy watching musical performances in theaters.

動詞 'enjoy' 後應接動名詞（watching），不能接不定式 'to watch'；'a music theaters' 語數和搭配錯誤，應為 'musical performances' 或 'musicals'，並與 'theaters' 搭配。建議記住 'enjoy + -ing' 結構，並正確使用單複數和名詞搭配。

× Not exactly, I don't take a thing class for minutes, but my friends touch me how to say when we was young because his mother is a teacher to how to to teach people how to sing.

✓ Not exactly. I didn't take formal singing classes, but my friend taught me when we were young because his mother is a singing teacher.

原句有時態、動詞和結構混亂：'don't take a thing class for minutes' 無意義；應表達過去未曾正式上過課 'I didn't take formal singing classes'；'my friends touch me how to say' 應為 'my friend taught me'（過去式）；'we was young' 主詞和動詞不一致，應為 'we were young'；'his mother is a teacher to how to to teach people how to sing' 應為 'his mother is a singing teacher'。建議釐清要表達的時間（過去/現在），使用正確的過去式和主謂一致，並刪除冗餘詞語。