Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 内容积极但表达不够清晰、重复多且有口语填充词。建议：1) 开头直接给出主题句（I love singing），避免多余填充词（uh, you know）。2) 用一两句说明频率和原因，避免重复数字或词语错误（say "I go to karaoke four times a week"). 3) 用连接词使句子流畅（because, so）。4) 控制在3–4句内，确保语法正确。

例: I love singing because it helps me relax and lifts my mood. I go to karaoke about four times a week, so it’s become a regular hobby for me. Because singing makes me feel energized, I often sing after a long day at work.

提案: 表达含糊且多次出错，语法和词汇使用不准确。建议：1) 直接回答（No, I haven't）并给出明确原因。2) 用正确词汇（formal singing lessons / lessons）。3) 给出具体理由并用连接词（because）扩展。4) 避免重复和填充词。

例: No, I haven't taken any formal singing lessons because I'm afraid professional training might make singing feel like work rather than fun. However, I sometimes watch online tutorials to improve casually.

提案: 答案情感真实但结构混乱、重复多且形容词使用不恰当。建议：1) 开门见山说明主要对象（My mom），然后用连接词补充其它对象。2) 用具体原因支持（to thank her, to make friends happy）。3) 避免重复和啰嗦，使用恰当形容词。4) 控制在3句内，清晰有逻辑。

例: I'd mainly like to sing for my mother to show my appreciation because she supports me a lot. I would also sing for my friends to cheer them up, and sometimes I sing to my dog just for fun because he seems to enjoy it.

提案: 观点明确但表达不连贯且有语音错误。建议：1) 直接给出主题句（Yes, I do）并用because解释原因。2) 使用具体效果词（reduce stress, lift spirits）。3) 用连接词组织句子，避免重复。4) 给出个人例子增强说服力。

例: Yes, I do. Singing can lift people's spirits and reduce stress because it releases tension and boosts mood. For example, after a stressful day I sing for a few minutes and I always feel much calmer and happier.

提案: 回答含糊且语法、逻辑混乱，否定开头不明确。建议：1) 明确回答（Yes or No），并说明条件（only if they sing well）。2) 使用正确词汇（singing, technique, pleasant, terrible）。3) 用一至两句具体说明为什么喜欢或不喜欢。4) 避免重复和不必要的停顿。

例: I do enjoy listening to others sing, but only when they sing well. A pleasant, well-controlled voice can be inspiring, while poor pitching or noisy singing can be unpleasant to listen to.

提案: 证实性回答后细节混乱、用词错误（seen clause, scene, wrong eyes）。建议：1) 简洁说明曾在小学上过合唱或唱歌课（We had choir twice a week）。2) 用正确词汇描述老师（kind/strict, strong voice）。3) 给出一两个具体记忆或感受，避免描述外貌中可能冒犯的词语。4) 保持句子简短清晰。

例: Yes, I have. At primary school we had choir twice a week, and I remember enjoying those sessions. My choir teacher had a very strong voice and was strict but encouraging, which helped me improve.

× I'm go go to karaoke 4 four times a week.

✓ I go to karaoke four times a week.

句子使用现在习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时。原句中 “I'm go go” 是错误的进行时和重复词，应改为简单现在时的动词形式 “go”。建议：描述经常性活动时使用一般现在时，如“I go to karaoke twice a week.”

× Uh, you know what I'm saying? Uh, it's, uh, I feel incredibly relaxed and this gives me a boost. It leaves my mood.

✓ I feel incredibly relaxed and it gives me a boost; it lifts my mood.

原句中“leaves my mood”是不正确的固定搭配，应为“lift my mood”。同时句子冗长且口语填充词多，需整理句子结构为完整连贯的陈述句。建议：去掉多余语气词，使用正确的动词短语“lift someone's mood”。

× Have you ever learnt how to sing? Student: No, I've never taken a formal saying listen, uh, just no reason.

✓ No, I've never taken any formal singing lessons; there's no particular reason.

原句“formal saying listen”词序和词形错误。应使用名词短语 “formal singing lessons”。同时口语中的“listen”应为“lessons”。建议：使用正确的名词形式“singing lessons”表示课程。

× Uh, because uh, I'm worried if I take a singing essence, I will no longer enjoy singing.

✓ I'm worried that if I take singing lessons, I will no longer enjoy singing.

原句“singing essence”是错误词汇，应为“singing lessons”。句子中使用条件从句表达将来结果，“if... will...”在从句中一般不用将来时，但口语可接受。改为更加自然的“if I take... I will...”。建议：把“essence”改为“lessons”，并保持条件句结构清晰。

× Well, actually, well, actually I'm quite on the fence. Uh, maybe I want to sing for my mom because she gives me everything, uh, which she think is the best.

✓ I'm quite on the fence. Maybe I want to sing for my mom because she gives me everything, which she thinks is the best.

原句“which she think”主语为第三人称单数，动词应加 -s，为“thinks”。另外重复“well, actually”可删除。建议：注意主谓一致，第三人称单数动词需加 -s。

× And maybe I want to sing for my friends 'cause they are so, they are so adorable and cute and even I want to sing for my dogs.

✓ Maybe I want to sing for my friends because they are so adorable and cute, and I even want to sing for my dog.

原句“for my dogs”如果只有一只狗应为“my dog”。另外多余的重复“they are so, they are so”应简化。建议：确认单复数一致并去掉重复表达。

× Uh, I feel like seeing Kim gives the, gives people the energy and can reduce, uh, reduce, uh, the stress, the pressure and, and for me when I, when I'm seeing, I'm really relaxed.

✓ I feel like singing gives people energy and can reduce stress and pressure, and when I'm singing, I'm really relaxed.

原句多处“seeing”误用，正确动词为“singing”。另外重复词和断句需整理。建议：确认动词拼写并使用一致的现在进行/一般现在时结构，去掉多余填充词。

× No, uh, there's only reason I like to listening.

✓ No, the only reason I like listening is...

原句缺少冠词“the”。“there's only reason”应为“the only reason”。此外“like to listening”也不自然，应为“like listening”。建议：在特指的名词短语前使用定冠词“the”，并用合适的动词形式。

× Other thing is this person have a nice listening skills, but if this person saying awful is uh, this saying is a bad noisy sounds for me.

✓ Another thing is this person has nice listening skills, but if this person sings awfully, it sounds bad and noisy to me.

原句中“have”应为第三人称单数“has”；“listening skills”语义也不太准确，可改为“singing skills”或“listening skills”视上下文；“this person saying awful”应为动词-ing形式“sings awfully”。“a bad noisy sounds”数量与单复数不匹配，应为“sounds bad and noisy”。建议：确保主谓一致，使用正确的动词形式和名词短语，注意单复数一致。

× Yes, of course. Uh, where were, where was that primary school? We had seen clause twice a week and I remember my scene.

✓ Yes, of course. It was at primary school. We had singing classes twice a week and I remember my teacher.

原句“where were, where was that primary school?”语序和表达混乱，应为“It was at primary school.” “We had seen clause”词形错误，应为“singing classes”。“I remember my scene”应为“I remember my teacher”。建议：使用正确的名词形式并调整句子为清晰的过去时描述。

× Teacher is a well built woman with uh, wrong eyes and strong voice.

✓ My teacher was a well-built woman with brown eyes and a strong voice.

原句“wrong eyes”显然是发音或拼写错误，应为颜色或特征如“brown eyes”。另外形容词“well built”应连字符“well-built”；“Teacher is”在叙述过去经历时应使用过去时“was”，并在“strong voice”前加不定冠词“a”。建议：注意词汇拼写并与时态一致，形容词短语适当连字符。