Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够连贯，建议简化句子结构，避免冗长，使用连接词使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress and meet new people who share the same interest. Singing gives me a great opportunity to expand my circle of friends.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但可以增加连接词使句子更连贯，同时丰富细节以增强表达效果。

例: Not really. I haven't learned to sing professionally, but I have watched some tutorial videos on social media to improve my singing skills.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇，表达略显笨拙。建议避免重复，使用更自然的表达方式，并适当使用连接词。

例: I would like to sing for my mother because we are usually too shy to express our love directly. Singing a song of gratitude would help me convey my feelings more easily.

提案: 回答内容具体，但缺少连接词使句子衔接不够自然。建议增加连接词并丰富细节。

例: Certainly, singing can bring happiness to people. For example, during the Spring Festival in China, people often sing a famous song called "Nan Wang Jing Xiao" at night, which creates a joyful atmosphere.

× Of course, because singing can relieve my pressure and help me make friends with people who like singing songs for me, it's a good chance to expand my friends circle and.

✓ Of course, because singing can relieve my pressure and help me make friends with people who like singing. For me, it's a good chance to expand my friend circle.

原句结构混乱，句子过长且连接不当，导致表达不清晰。建议将句子拆分，明确表达两个意思：唱歌能减压并帮助交朋友；对我来说，这是扩大朋友圈的好机会。

× Not really, I haven't learned how to sing professionally but I tried to watch some tutoring videos on social media just to improve my singing ability.

✓ Not really, I haven't learned how to sing professionally but I have tried to watch some tutoring videos on social media just to improve my singing ability.

句中“tried”使用了一般过去时，但前半句用的是现在完成时，时态不一致。应使用现在完成时“have tried”，表示从过去到现在的经历。

× In our daily life, it is difficult to express our love because we are too shy, but through singing a song of gratitude gratitude, I think I can express it easily.

✓ In our daily life, it is difficult to express our love because we are too shy, but through singing a song of gratitude, I think I can express it easily.

句中“gratitude”重复出现，属于词语重复错误，应删除多余的“gratitude”。

× it's a good chance to expand my friends circle and.

✓ it's a good chance to expand my friend circle.

“friends circle”应为“friend circle”，因为“circle”前的名词作定语时通常用单数形式。

× help me make friends with people who like singing songs for me

✓ help me make friends with people who like singing

“singing songs for me”表达不清，且“singing songs for me”与“people who like”搭配不当。应简化为“people who like singing”，更符合习惯表达。