Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但语言不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子，直接表达喜欢唱歌的原因，并用连词连接细节，使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and relieves my stress. When I feel overwhelmed, singing allows me to express my emotions and feel more motivated.

提案: 回答不够清晰，语法和表达混乱。建议直接回答是否学过唱歌，并简要说明学习方式或经验，避免重复和无关内容。

例: No, I have never taken singing classes. I usually learn by listening to my favorite singers like JHL and singing along with their songs.

提案: 回答表达不够清楚，句子结构混乱。建议直接回答是否愿意为别人唱歌，并说明原因，使用连词使表达更连贯。

例: Actually, I prefer singing alone because it helps me relax and feel motivated. I don't want to sing for others since I might not sing well and worry they won't enjoy it.

提案: 回答内容有一定逻辑，但表达不够清晰，句子不完整。建议简化句子，明确说明唱歌如何带来快乐，并用连词连接观点。

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because the lyrics and melody can help people relax and feel encouraged. For example, singing in the car can help release stress and express emotions.

× I like saying because it's can let me feel more relaxing and encourage me to do everything and also when I have a lot of stress in my life and I can't use this method to help me to express what I have was the stresses of me and also inspire me too.

✓ I like singing because it can let me feel more relaxed and encourage me to do everything. Also, when I have a lot of stress in my life, I can use this method to help me express my stresses and inspire me too.

原句中“it's can”中“can”作为情态动词不应与“is”连用，应直接用“it can”。此外，“relaxing”应改为形容词“relaxed”来描述感受。句子结构混乱，建议拆分成两句以表达清晰。

× Especially I don't have it. Any. Learn or in classes before when I want to have a singing I just like the singer that such as JHL this kind of singers alike too. Listen to the songs and also sing together. Don't I don't have any other expn.

✓ Especially, I haven't had any learning or classes before. When I want to sing, I just like singers such as JHL. I listen to their songs and sing along. I don't have any other experience.

原句中“don't have it. Any. Learn or in classes before”时态错误，应使用现在完成时“haven't had”表示过去到现在的经历。句子断裂且表达不完整，需调整句子结构使其通顺。

× Actually, there's no person I would like to sing with because I like seeing by myself too.

✓ Actually, there's no person I would like to sing with because I like singing by myself too.

原句中“seeing”应为“singing”，这是词汇使用错误，导致句意不明。应使用正确的动名词形式表达喜欢唱歌。

× I think these kinds of activities is just like me to be relaxed and be more more motivated.

✓ I think these kinds of activities are just like me to be relaxed and more motivated.

主语“these kinds of activities”为复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”，而非单数“is”。

× I don't want to sing to another people to let them feel maybe it's not great to listen or is really hard. Or is really upset for it.

✓ I don't want to sing to other people because they might feel it's not great to listen to or it might be really hard or upsetting for them.

“another people”用法错误，应为“other people”。此外，句子缺少主语，导致表达不完整，需补充主语和调整句子结构。

× I think singing can bring happiness to people because that's kind of lyrics and melody can make people feel relaxing an also be encouraged when they have some problems in their life and also if you go to singing in car keys and you can't.

✓ I think singing can bring happiness to people because the kind of lyrics and melody can make people feel relaxed and encouraged when they have some problems in their life. Also, if you sing in the car, you can express what you want to say and relieve your stress.

原句中“go to singing in car keys”用法错误，应为“sing in the car”。“relaxing”应改为“relaxed”形容感受。句子结构混乱，需拆分并调整表达。

× Express what you have want to say and your stress can be.

✓ Express what you want to say and relieve your stress.

“have want”结构错误，应为“want”。“your stress can be”表达不完整，需改为“relieve your stress”以表达减轻压力的意思。