Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, and then explain why you like singing using simple and correct English. Avoid vague phrases like 'I like something' and incomplete ideas.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress and makes me feel excited and happy.

提案: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Try to clearly state whether you have learnt singing formally or informally. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition.

例: No, I have never taken professional singing lessons, but I enjoy singing along to music and following the tunes and beats.

提案: Your answer has good content but is unclear and contains many errors. Try to organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use correct vocabulary and grammar, and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer singing for myself because it brings me joy. However, if I had to sing for someone, I would choose my girlfriend because I love her very much. I would dedicate romantic songs and poems to her.

提案: Your answer is vague and grammatically incorrect. Try to give a clear opinion and support it with reasons. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it is a form of entertainment that helps them relax. Also, singing is a good habit that can improve mood and make people feel happier.

× Yes, I like something because it from stress and also for the excitement in our.

✓ Yes, I like it because it helps with stress and also for the excitement it brings.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'something' and 'from stress' which are not appropriate prepositions or expressions here. The phrase 'helps with stress' is the correct prepositional usage to express relief from stress. Also, 'in our' is incomplete and unclear, so it is corrected to 'it brings' to convey excitement.

× No, I don't learn singing from anybody like a professional tutor with somebody like that, but I always.

✓ No, I haven't learned singing from anybody like a professional tutor or somebody like that, but I always try.

The sentence uses present tense 'don't learn' incorrectly when referring to past experience. The correct form is present perfect 'haven't learned' to indicate experience up to now. Also, the sentence is incomplete and 'try' is added to complete the thought.

× But I always single musical like arriving on the tunes and vibing on the beats only.

✓ But I always sing music, like arriving on the tunes and vibing on the beats only.

The word 'single' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'sing'. Also, 'musical' should be 'music' as a noun. The verb 'sing' is used in base form here to match the subject 'I' and present tense.

× Is Carrie I prefer singing for myself and for my joy, but if the if I consider a person I would like to sing, it is for my girlfriend because I love her very much and she is very lovable to me.

✓ Actually, I prefer singing for myself and for my joy, but if I consider a person I would like to sing for, it is my girlfriend because I love her very much and she is very dear to me.

The original sentence has unclear structure and incorrect phrasing 'Is Carrie'. It is corrected to 'Actually' to start the sentence properly. The phrase 'lovable to me' is awkward; 'dear to me' is more natural. Also, 'sing for' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× So I will I will dedicate him summer romantic lines and poultry.

✓ So I will dedicate to her some romantic lines and poetry.

The pronoun 'him' is incorrect because the subject refers to 'my girlfriend' who is female, so 'her' is correct. Also, 'summer romantic lines and poultry' is incorrect; 'some romantic lines and poetry' is the intended meaning.

× Yes a everybody have a source over entertainment if it makes them happy and for some people it can be single as a singing is also a good habit so it can make someone happier.

✓ Yes, everybody has a source of entertainment if it makes them happy, and for some people, it can be singing as singing is also a good habit, so it can make someone happier.

The sentence has singular/plural errors: 'everybody have' should be 'everybody has' because 'everybody' is singular. 'source over entertainment' should be 'source of entertainment'. 'single as a singing' is incorrect; it should be 'singing as singing'. These corrections fix subject-verb agreement and noun usage.