Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, đồng thời giới hạn câu trả lời trong 3-5 câu để tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. For example, I often sing to myself when I take a shower, which helps me feel comfortable and joyful.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn. Hãy tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt rõ ràng ý tưởng của mình.

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons. However, I like to sing when I feel stressed because it helps me relax and express my emotions.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn. Hãy tập trung vào ý chính và diễn đạt cụ thể hơn.

例: I want to sing for my family and friends because singing together makes us happy and helps us relax after a busy day.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, đồng thời dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy cung cấp lý do cụ thể và rõ ràng.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their emotions and connect with others, creating a positive atmosphere.

× Yes I do when I singing, when I said when I am singing I feel so I feel so happy for confortable like when I when I shower, when I go to shower and always is well singing to myself.

✓ Yes, I do. When I sing, I feel so happy and comfortable, like when I shower. I always sing to myself.

The verb 'singing' is incorrectly used after 'when I'. The correct form is the base verb 'sing' after 'when I'. Also, 'for confortable' is incorrect; it should be 'comfortable'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and correctness.

× No I haven't, I chosed are seen when I feel so stretched and it is a good way to have me leave my stretch and express my emotions. So actually I don't really learned how to sing.

✓ No, I haven't. I choose to sing when I feel stressed, and it is a good way to relieve my stress and express my emotions. So actually, I haven't really learned how to sing.

The word 'chosed' is incorrect past tense; the correct past tense is 'chose'. However, since the sentence is about a habitual action, present tense 'choose' is more appropriate. 'Learned' should be in present perfect 'haven't learned' to match the negative form and context. Also, 'stretched' should be 'stressed', and 'leave my stretch' should be 'relieve my stress'.

× I really want to sing for my family and my friends because they are really friendly and we also feel with you so happy when we sing together and it makes code fewer are few high confortable in can relive our stretch after a busy day.

✓ I really want to sing for my family and my friends because they are really friendly, and we also feel so happy when we sing together. It makes us feel more comfortable and can relieve our stress after a busy day.

The phrase 'feel with you so happy' is incorrect; it should be 'feel so happy'. 'Code fewer are few high confortable' is nonsensical and corrected to 'feel more comfortable'. 'Can relive our stretch' should be 'can relieve our stress'. Pronouns and phrases are corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes I do. I think singing can bring happiness to people because uh, we can express our emotions to everyone know. And also is a good way to connect others to connect others and it makes it makes a positive environment.

✓ Yes, I do. I think singing can bring happiness to people because we can express our emotions to everyone. Also, it is a good way to connect with others, and it creates a positive environment.

The phrase 'express our emotions to everyone know' is incorrect; 'know' is unnecessary. 'Connect others to connect others' is repetitive and should be 'connect with others'. 'It makes it makes a positive environment' is repetitive and corrected to 'it creates a positive environment'.