Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用完整的句子并直接回答问题，同时避免重复和断断续续的表达。可以先明确表达喜欢唱歌的原因，然后补充具体细节。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel relaxed and happy. When I am busy with work, I often listen to songs to refresh myself and gain more energy.

提案: 回答中有很多语音和语法错误，建议用完整句子清楚表达自己是否学过唱歌，并且避免重复和断句错误。可以先直接回答问题，再补充相关经历。

例: I have never learned how to sing formally, but I took music classes in middle school and secondary school.

提案: 回答不够连贯，句子不完整，建议先直接回答问题，然后用连词连接补充细节，表达清楚想为母亲唱歌的原因。

例: I want to sing for my mother because she can play the piano and sing well. I want to express my appreciation and thanks to her for all her help.

提案: 回答中有很多语法和表达错误，建议用完整句子表达观点，并用连词使句子连贯，具体说明唱歌如何带来快乐。

例: Yes, I definitely think singing can bring happiness to people because music and rhythm can express emotions like happiness and love. Through singing, we can also learn about feelings from the soul.

× I like saying oh thing can make me feel relaxed and pleasant.

✓ I like singing because it can make me feel relaxed and pleasant.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the gerund form 'singing' to express enjoyment of an activity. 'Saying oh thing' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'singing' to match the context.

× Also, when I was occupied with my work, I often listen to songs too.

✓ Also, when I am occupied with my work, I often listen to songs too.

The sentence mixes past tense 'was' with present tense 'listen'. To express habitual action, present tense 'am' and 'listen' should be used consistently.

× Make myself more. Energy. To.

✓ It makes me feel more energetic.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a clear subject and verb. The corrected sentence provides a complete structure with subject, verb, and object.

× I've never learned how to see seeing.

✓ I've never learned how to sing.

The phrase 'see seeing' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation or typo. The correct verb related to the context is 'sing'.

× I didn't receive any formal. Teachers to seeing Oh but I do take the music class in the middle school and secondary school.

✓ I didn't receive any formal singing lessons, but I did take music classes in middle school and secondary school.

'Teachers to seeing' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'formal singing lessons'. Also, 'music class' should be pluralized to 'music classes' to match the context.

× I want to see for my mother.

✓ I want to sing for my mother.

The verb 'see' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'sing' to match the question about singing.

× Because my mother is really. She can play piano and sing some songs I want to.

✓ Because my mother is really talented. She can play the piano and sing some songs I like.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding 'talented' clarifies the meaning, and 'play piano' should be 'play the piano'. Also, 'songs I want to' is incomplete and corrected to 'songs I like'.

× I trust my express my appreciation and thanks to my mom. For her help.

✓ I want to express my appreciation and thanks to my mom for her help.

'I trust my express' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'I want to express'. Also, the sentence should be combined for clarity.

× Yes, definitely think I'm bringing happiness to people.

✓ Yes, I definitely think singing brings happiness to people.

The original sentence lacks the subject 'I' before 'think' and uses 'I'm bringing' which is less appropriate here. The corrected sentence uses simple present tense to express a general truth.

× Because the music and the rhythm. Sometimes can express. An indie ran the happiness and love.

✓ Because music and rhythm can sometimes express happiness and love.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unclear words like 'indie ran'. The corrected sentence is concise and clear.

× And we can learn something from the soul.

✓ And we can learn something from the soul through music.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'through music' clarifies the meaning.