Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and structured. Try to start with a direct response, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it is a popular pastime in the Philippines. For example, my family often bonds over karaoke sessions, which makes it a fun and social activity.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Aim to give a direct answer first, then explain with clear and complete sentences. Avoid hesitations and incomplete thoughts to improve fluency and coherence.

例: No, I have never had formal singing lessons. However, I learned to sing informally because my mother used to sing lullabies to me when I was a child, which helped me develop my singing skills.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and better organised. Start with a direct response, then add supporting details using linking words. Also, try to avoid minor grammatical errors for better clarity.

例: I would like to sing for my future children, just like my mother sang lullabies to me when I was young. Singing is a way for me to express myself and boost my happiness.

提案: Your answer shows your opinion but is fragmented and lacks fluency. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For instance, when I sing, it usually improves my mood, especially if I am feeling stressed or upset.

× In fact, as a Filipino, we love singing so much that we do it on a daily basis, and that's even one of our favorite hobbies.

✓ In fact, as Filipinos, we love singing so much that we do it on a daily basis, and that's even one of our favorite hobbies.

The phrase 'as a Filipino, we' mixes singular and plural forms incorrectly. 'A Filipino' is singular, but 'we' is plural. To correct this, both should be plural: 'as Filipinos, we'. This ensures subject consistency and correct plural usage.

× And family also bond over karaoke.

✓ And families also bond over karaoke.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject-verb agreement and plural form. 'Family' as a singular noun does not agree with 'bond' in this context. Using 'families' (plural) with 'bond' (plural verb) corrects the sentence structure and meaning.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

While 'learnt' is acceptable in British English, 'learned' is more common in other varieties. Since the rest of the transcript uses standard forms, 'learned' is preferred for consistency. However, this is a minor stylistic choice rather than a strict grammar error.

× I don't remember that I have had a formal education when it comes to singing.

✓ I don't remember having had a formal education when it comes to singing.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. The phrase 'I don't remember that I have had' is incorrect. The correct form uses the gerund phrase 'having had' to express past experience that is not remembered.

× And. I think I've only learned singing because my mom usually sings me lullaby eyes whenever I go to sleep and also it's.

✓ I think I've only learned to sing because my mom usually sings lullabies to me whenever I go to sleep.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains errors: 'learned singing' should be 'learned to sing'; 'sings me lullaby eyes' is incorrect, it should be 'sings lullabies to me'; the phrase 'and also it's' is incomplete and unnecessary. The corrected sentence is clear and grammatically correct.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Whom do you want to sing for?

In formal English, 'whom' is the correct object pronoun after a preposition like 'for'. However, in spoken English, 'who' is commonly used. This correction is for formal grammar adherence.

× I think like my mom who sang me lullaby eyes when I was a child, I would also love to sing for my future children or if not for now, just fixing for myself.

✓ I think, like my mom who sang lullabies to me when I was a child, I would also love to sing for my future children or, if not now, just sing for myself.

The original sentence has several errors: 'sang me lullaby eyes' should be 'sang lullabies to me'; 'just fixing for myself' is incorrect and should be 'just sing for myself'; commas are added for clarity. The corrected sentence is grammatically correct and clearer.

× It's a form of expression and to make myself feel happier.

✓ It's a form of expression and a way to make myself feel happier.

The original sentence lacks parallel structure. 'A form of expression' is a noun phrase, but 'to make myself feel happier' is an infinitive phrase. Changing 'to make' to 'a way to make' creates parallel noun phrases, improving grammatical correctness.

× When I do sing. I usually. Make my self become happier and if I do have problems I just saying it a bit and immediately my mood gets better so yeah.

✓ When I do sing, I usually make myself feel happier, and if I have problems, I just sing a bit and immediately my mood gets better, so yeah.

The original sentences are fragmented and contain errors: 'Make my self become happier' should be 'make myself feel happier'; 'I just saying it a bit' is incorrect, should be 'I just sing a bit'; punctuation is corrected to form complete sentences. The corrected version is grammatically correct and coherent.