Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Please try to give a direct response with clear reasons and avoid incomplete sentences. Use simple and correct sentences to express your ideas naturally.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and express my feelings. I enjoy listening to music and sometimes play the piano while singing.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use correct verb tenses and explain your experience clearly with linking words.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. I took singing lessons when I was in junior high school, and it was very fun because I really like singing.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Please give a clear reason why you want to sing for your grandmother and use correct sentence structure.

例: I want to sing for my grandmother because she always supports me and enjoys my singing.

提案: Your answer is too short and lacks explanation. Please provide reasons or examples to support your opinion to make your answer more effective.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them relax and express their emotions.

× Yes, I like to sing because mystery.

✓ Yes, I like to sing because it is mysterious.

The original sentence lacks clarity and proper sentence structure. 'Because mystery' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'it is mysterious' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Like. It Yeah, get Brenda piano or ricin to the music.

✓ I like it. Yeah, I get Brenda piano or listen to the music.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Like. It Yeah' is not a proper sentence. 'Get Brenda piano or ricin to the music' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo. Correcting to 'I like it. Yeah, I get Brenda piano or listen to the music' improves clarity, though 'get Brenda piano' remains unclear but is kept as is due to lack of context.

× So I also write this English.

✓ So I also write in English.

The phrase 'write this English' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'in' when referring to writing in a language.

× Yes I have. I have run the hard to sing when I was in junior high scores music, bless it.

✓ Yes, I have. I worked hard to sing when I was in junior high school music class, bless it.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'I have run the hard to sing' is incorrect past tense usage; 'junior high scores music' is likely a mishearing of 'junior high school music'; 'bless it' is unclear but kept. Correcting verb tense and wording improves clarity.

× It was very fun because I really like to singing.

✓ It was very fun because I really like singing.

The verb 'like' should be followed by either the infinitive 'to sing' or the gerund 'singing'. 'Like to singing' is incorrect. Using 'like singing' is correct here.

× I want to sing for my grandmother because my grandmother right my singing.

✓ I want to sing for my grandmother because my grandmother likes my singing.

The word 'right' is incorrect here; it should be 'likes' to express that the grandmother enjoys the singing. Also, repeating 'my grandmother' is redundant but acceptable.