Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 発音の誤り（"daddy"や"seeing"など）と語彙の誤用（"do drugs"は不適切）があります。意味が伝わりにくいため、正しい単語を使い、簡潔で自然な表現にしましょう。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a busy day. It also allows me to express my emotions and feel happier.

提案: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭です。"learned how to sing"の正しい表現を使い、具体的な内容を簡潔に述べましょう。

例: No, I have never learned how to sing formally. However, I enjoy practicing singing by myself because I love music.

提案: 最後の文の意味が不明瞭で、語彙の誤用があります。文を簡潔にし、意味が通るようにしましょう。

例: I want to sing for my family because we enjoy singing together and it brings us closer. Even though I'm not very good at singing, I want to improve.

提案: "tumbling happiness"などの表現は不自然で意味が伝わりにくいです。具体例を挙げつつ、自然な表現を使いましょう。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people. For example, at concerts, many people feel joyful when they listen to music.

× I daddy enjoy seeing it because it helps me do drugs after a busy day.

✓ I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a busy day.

The pronoun 'daddy' is incorrect and likely a typo for 'really'. Also, 'seeing' should be 'singing' to match the context. 'Do drugs' is inappropriate here; 'relax' fits the intended meaning better.

× No, I have never learned how to think before.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing before.

The verb 'think' is incorrect in this context; the student meant 'sing'. The pronoun usage is correct but the verb choice is wrong.

× However, I do like the invading my singing skills in the Utah because I enjoy music.

✓ However, I do like improving my singing skills in Utah because I enjoy music.

The word 'invading' is incorrect; the correct word is 'improving'. Also, 'the Utah' is incorrect; 'Utah' should be used without 'the'.

× However, I do like the invading my singing skills in the Utah because I enjoy music.

✓ However, I do like improving my singing skills in Utah because I enjoy music.

The definite article 'the' before 'Utah' is incorrect because 'Utah' is a proper noun and does not require an article.

× Although I'm not very good at singing it, I want the embedding mascaras.

✓ Although I'm not very good at singing, I want to improve my skills.

The phrase 'singing it' is incorrect; 'singing' alone suffices. 'The embedding mascaras' is nonsensical here; likely intended to say 'to improve my skills' or similar.

× Yes, in my opinion, singing tumbling happiness to people for example.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, singing brings happiness to people, for example.

The verb 'tumbling' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'brings'. The sentence also needs a comma before 'for example'.

× In a concert, many many people becomes happy by listening to music.

✓ In a concert, many people become happy by listening to music.

The verb 'becomes' does not agree with the plural subject 'people'. The correct verb form is 'become'. Also, 'many many' is redundant; one 'many' is sufficient.