Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意味が伝わりにくく、文法的な誤りや冗長な表現が多いです。より自然で効果的な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが必要です。例えば、感情の変化やストレス解消について具体的に述べると良いでしょう。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel happier and reduces my stress after a long day.

提案: 回答が断片的で意味が不明瞭です。文をつなげて論理的に話す練習が必要です。また、理由を明確に述べることで内容を豊かにできます。

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing yet, but I want to because it seems enjoyable. However, I haven't started due to the cost of lessons.

提案: 文が断片的で意味が伝わりにくいです。主語と動詞を明確にし、感情や理由を具体的に述べると良いでしょう。

例: I want to sing for my boyfriend because singing is a way to express my feelings when words are not enough.

提案: 内容が不明瞭で文法的にも誤りがあります。意見を述べる際は、理由や具体例を明確にし、論理的に話す練習が必要です。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people relieve stress and feel more positive.

× I like singing because singing is makes me fun.

✓ I like singing because singing makes me happy.

'is makes' is incorrect verb combination; 'makes me fun' is incorrect usage. Correct verb is 'makes' and the adjective should be 'happy' to express enjoyment.

× I when I sing our song my feeling is better than before and my stress.

✓ When I sing our song, my feelings are better than before and my stress decreases.

Sentence lacks proper structure and connectors; 'my feeling is better' should be plural 'feelings are better'; 'and my stress' is incomplete and needs a verb.

× Is stress is. I think.

✓ I think it reduces stress.

Fragmented sentence; 'Is stress is' is incorrect and incomplete; needs to be a complete sentence expressing the idea.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

'Learnt' is British English past tense; 'learned' is more common in American English. Both are acceptable but consistency is important.

× No, I haven't. I want to learn about singing. But. Learning chords. A money so I cannot think, I cannot run about singing.

✓ No, I haven't. I want to learn about singing, but learning chords costs money, so I cannot focus on singing.

Fragmented sentences and unclear phrases; 'A money' is incorrect; 'cannot run about singing' is unclear and likely means 'cannot focus on singing'.

× I want to sing for. My. My boyfriend and I want to tell my feelings.

✓ I want to sing for my boyfriend because I want to express my feelings.

Fragmented sentences; 'for. My. My boyfriend' is incorrect; needs to be a complete sentence.

× In the world, but I cannot, so I want to. Sync. For him.

✓ In the world, but I cannot, so I want to sing for him.

'Sync' is incorrect word; should be 'sing'; fragmented sentence; preposition use is unclear.

× Yes, I absolutely agree with this. Opinion and singing ladies are stress and depression.

✓ Yes, I absolutely agree with this opinion. Singing relieves stress and depression.

'Opinion' needs an article; 'singing ladies are stress and depression' is incorrect pronoun and noun usage; intended meaning is that singing helps reduce stress and depression.

× So I recommend. People hurt people. After sync.

✓ So I recommend it to people who are hurt after singing.

Fragmented sentences; 'people hurt people' is unclear; 'after sync' should be 'after singing'; sentence structure needs correction.