Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复和冗余，同时注意时态和词汇的准确使用。可以尝试用更自然的表达方式来描述自己的感受。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax. However, I'm not very confident in my singing skills, so I usually sing with friends at karaoke for fun.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，句子结构不够清晰，建议使用正确的时态和更准确的词汇表达经历，并且注意句子连贯性。

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was about eight years old in primary school. My music teacher played the piano while we sang "Twinkle Twinkle Little Star." It was a fun experience, but I found it hard to follow the music sheet.

提案: 回答中存在语法和表达混乱的问题，建议简化句子，明确表达自己的想法，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I usually sing alone because I am introverted. Singing helps me relieve stress and relax, so I don't have a specific person I want to sing for.

提案: 回答内容较好，但存在发音和用词错误（如'saying'应为'singing'），建议注意词汇的准确性和表达的清晰度。可以增加更多具体细节使回答更丰富。

例: Yes, definitely. Research shows that singing calm melodies can increase dopamine in the brain, which makes people feel happier. It also helps reduce stress and improve mood.

× To be honest, although I love singing but I'm not very good at this aspect because I'm not very confident for its my singing skills.

✓ To be honest, although I love singing, I'm not very good at this aspect because I'm not very confident in my singing skills.

句子中同时使用了“although”和“but”，这两个连词不能一起用，属于连词使用错误。应去掉“but”，并将“for its my singing skills”改为“in my singing skills”，使表达更准确。

× When I singing with my friend in a karaoke, although the stress for relate but I think my sound is a little bit noisy.

✓ When I sing with my friend in a karaoke, although the stress is related, I think my sound is a little bit noisy.

“When I singing”中动词形式错误，应使用动词原形“sing”而非动名词“singing”。另外，句中“although the stress for relate but”结构混乱，需调整为“although the stress is related”。

× Yes, I learn how to sing.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing.

描述过去经历时，动词应使用过去式，“learn”应改为“learned”。

× When I was in primary school around 8 years old, my music teacher also played the piano in Access 2 saying twinkle Twinkle Little star.

✓ When I was in primary school, around 8 years old, my music teacher also played the piano in Access 2, singing "Twinkle Twinkle Little Star."

句子结构不清晰，“saying”应改为“singing”，并且需要用引号标示歌曲名，句子中应加逗号分隔时间状语和主句。

× I think it was a very fun experience, but I found it difficult for me to stay on the right page.

✓ I think it was a very fun experience, but I found it difficult to stay on the right page.

“difficult for me to”中“for me”多余，且“difficult to stay”是正确搭配，去掉“for me”更自然。

× To be honest, I'm a very introverted person so I don't have a specific person I want to sing full are usually singing alone because it helps me lose all my stress and worries.

✓ To be honest, I'm a very introverted person, so I don't have a specific person I want to sing for. I usually sing alone because it helps me lose all my stress and worries.

句中“sing full are usually singing alone”语法混乱，应拆分为两句，并将“sing full”改为“sing for”。

× Saying is a very relaxing activity for me that means it's helped me.

✓ Singing is a very relaxing activity for me; that means it helps me.

“Saying”应为“Singing”，且“it's helped me”时态不当，应改为一般现在时“it helps me”。

× According to some research, saying a quiet and still see melody can help increase dopamine levels in our brain, which is a chemical that can make us happier.

✓ According to some research, singing a quiet and still melody can help increase dopamine levels in our brain, which is a chemical that can make us happier.

“saying”应为“singing”，且“still see melody”应为“still melody”，去掉多余词语。