Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более естественным и грамматически правильным. Следует избегать повторений и неясных выражений, а также использовать связующие слова для логичности. Например, можно начать с утверждения, затем объяснить причину и привести пример.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and makes me happy. For example, my favorite type of music to sing is rap, especially songs by Raider Rep.

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и понятным. Следует использовать правильные времена и связующие слова, чтобы объяснить опыт обучения и причины.

例: Yes, I have been learning to sing opera and rap since 2016 because I want to become a rapper, which is my favorite music style.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Следует использовать связующие слова и чётко выразить свои планы и причины.

例: Currently, I sing for myself, but in the future, I want to become an influencer and sing for my fans because I believe they will enjoy my songs and listen to them every day.

提案: Ответ должен быть более ясным и логичным. Следует использовать правильные слова и грамматику, а также связующие слова для объяснения своей точки зрения.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because songs can express different emotions, such as sadness or joy. When people sing joyful songs, they usually feel happy and uplifted.

× Yes, I like singing because when I was a singing I feel myself so relax and it's make me so happy.

✓ Yes, I like singing because when I am singing I feel myself so relaxed and it makes me so happy.

The phrase 'I was a singing' is incorrect; 'singing' should be used as a present participle with the verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense 'I am singing'. Also, 'feel myself so relax' should be 'feel myself so relaxed' because 'relaxed' is the correct adjective form here. 'It's make me' should be 'it makes me' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× And. When? My favorite sync is Rep. I like Raider Rep.

✓ My favorite song is rap. I like Raider Rap.

'Sync' is incorrect; the correct word is 'song'. 'Rep' should be 'rap' referring to the music genre. 'Raider Rep' seems to be a mishearing or misspelling; assuming 'Raider Rap' is intended. Also, the sentence 'And. When?' is incomplete and unclear, so it is omitted for clarity.

× Yes, I learn it to toy and operas since 2016 Birds are I wanted to be a rapper.

✓ Yes, I have learned to sing toy and opera since 2016 because I wanted to be a rapper.

'Learn' should be in present perfect 'have learned' to indicate an action continuing from the past to present. 'To toy and operas' is unclear; assuming 'to sing toy and opera' or 'to sing in toy and opera styles' but likely 'toy' is a mishearing; corrected to 'to sing toy and opera' for structure. 'Birds are' is unclear and removed. 'I wanted' is correct past tense to express past desire.

× Because it's my favorite type of music.

✓ Because it's my favorite type of music.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.

× I sync for myself now, but I will be in. Influencer I will singing for my. Fans, because my fans will be. Like my songs and. Will. Listening every day.

✓ I sing for myself now, but I will be an influencer. I will sing for my fans because my fans will like my songs and will listen every day.

'Sync' should be 'sing'. 'I will singing' should be 'I will sing' because modal verb 'will' is followed by the base form of the verb. 'Influencer' needs the article 'an'. 'Will be. Like' should be 'will like'. 'Will. Listening' should be 'will listen'. Sentence fragments and punctuation are corrected for clarity.

× Yes, because songs have many types, likely miserable and joyful.

✓ Yes, because songs have many types, like miserable and joyful.

'Likely' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'like' to give examples.

× When people singing joyful music's they are. Say are happy, bring kit.

✓ When people sing joyful music, they say they are happy and it brings joy.

'People singing' should be 'people sing' to form a correct clause. 'Music's' is incorrect; should be 'music'. 'They are. Say are happy' is fragmented and corrected to 'they say they are happy'. 'Bring kit' is unclear; corrected to 'it brings joy' for meaning.