Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer clearer and more natural by using correct grammar and avoiding redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons with linking words. For example, explain why singing is important to you in happy and sad moments using simple and correct sentences.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my feelings. For instance, when I am very happy, I sing loudly to celebrate. On the other hand, when I feel sad, singing helps me forget my worries and feel better.

提案: Make your answer more direct and coherent by avoiding hesitation and using linking words. Clearly state whether you have learned singing formally or informally, and give specific details about how you learned.

例: I have not learned singing from a professional, but I learned by observing people who sing well. I try to imitate their techniques and practice on my own.

提案: Provide a complete and clear answer with a topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: If I had the chance, I would like to sing for a special person in my life, such as my fiancé. Singing for them would show my love and appreciation.

提案: Make your answer more organized and specific. Start with a clear opinion, then give examples with linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people. For example, in the Philippines, many people enjoy singing during special events and celebrations, often using video game machines for karaoke.

× Yes, I do like singing, especially dreaming my extreme moments like when I'm very happy I would love to seeing on top of my lungs, but when I'm very sad I also want to sing so that I could forget somehow those bad.

✓ Yes, I do like singing, especially dreaming my extreme moments like when I'm very happy I would love to sing at the top of my lungs, but when I'm very sad I also want to sing so that I could somehow forget those bad moments.

The phrase 'love to seeing' is incorrect because after 'would love to' the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. The correct form is 'love to sing'. Also, 'on top of my lungs' should be 'at the top of my lungs' as the correct preposition is 'at'. Additionally, 'forget somehow those bad' is awkward; 'somehow forget those bad moments' is clearer.

× Yes. I mean no. It's not that I learned it from a professional artist or singer, but it was just a simple observance from people who know how to sing well, and I apply.

✓ Yes. I mean no. It's not that I learned it from a professional artist or singer, but it was just simple observation from people who know how to sing well, and I applied it.

The word 'observance' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'observation'. Also, 'I apply' should be in past tense 'I applied' to match the past context of learning.

× If given a chance. I'd like I'd like the same. For a person, special person in my life. And that. My love, my life. My fiance. And I want to.

✓ If given a chance, I'd like to sing for a special person in my life, my love, my fiancé.

The original sentences are fragmented and incomplete. Combining them into a single coherent sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Here in the Philipines, most people here are singing. The video came much in the video game machine, especially during. Uhm activities or special events that they celebrating and.

✓ Here in the Philippines, most people sing. The video comes up a lot in the video game machines, especially during activities or special events that they celebrate.

'Philipines' is misspelled; correct spelling is 'Philippines'. 'Are singing' is better as 'sing' for habitual action. 'The video came much' is incorrect; 'comes up a lot' is more natural. 'Video game machine' should be plural 'machines'. 'That they celebrating' should be 'that they celebrate' to use the correct verb form.