Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and coherent by using complete sentences and linking words. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you like singing with specific details, and avoid short fragmented sentences.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me unwind and relieve stress after a hectic day at school. For instance, I love singing Taylor Swift songs as they make me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: Improve your grammar and sentence structure by using correct verb forms and linking your ideas logically. Also, make sure your answer directly addresses the question and provides clear reasons.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing before, but I stopped because I wanted to focus more on my studies and aim to ace my exams.

提案: Try to combine your ideas into complete sentences and use linking words to make your answer more fluent and natural. Also, be careful with grammar, such as verb tenses and prepositions.

例: I want to sing for my parents as a way to show my appreciation for taking care of me from the day I was born until now. I would like to dedicate a song to them to express how much I love them.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and complete sentences. Also, explain your opinion with specific reasons or examples to enrich your response.

例: Absolutely, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows us to express our gratitude and feelings in a joyful way.

× I really like singing because.

✓ I really like singing because it helps me relax.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a main clause after 'because'. To improve, complete the sentence by explaining the reason for liking singing.

× I can unwind.

✓ I can unwind.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× My stress.

✓ It helps me relieve my stress.

'My stress.' is a fragment and not a complete sentence. It should be connected to a verb to express the idea clearly.

× After a hectic.

✓ After a hectic day.

The phrase is incomplete; 'day' is needed to complete the idea.

× Date in my school.

✓ day at my school.

'Date' is incorrect here; 'day' is the correct noun. Also, 'at' is the proper preposition for location.

× As for me?

✓ As for me,

'As for me?' is a question but should be a phrase introducing an opinion, so a comma is appropriate.

× I would love to sing. A Taylor Swift songs.

✓ I would love to sing a Taylor Swift song.

'Songs' is plural but preceded by 'a' which is singular. The noun and article must agree in number.

× I love it.

✓ I love it.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× I have been learn how to sing.

✓ I have been learning how to sing.

The present perfect continuous tense requires the verb 'learn' to be in the '-ing' form after 'have been'.

× It is because.

✓ It is because I want to focus more on my studies.

'It is because.' is incomplete; the reason must be stated to complete the sentence.

× An I want to ace my exams.

✓ And I want to ace my exams.

'An' is a typo; the correct conjunction is 'and'.

× I want to sing for my parents.

✓ I want to sing for my parents.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× As an appreciation.

✓ As an appreciation,

This phrase is incomplete and should be connected to the following sentence with a comma.

× For taking care of me.

✓ for taking care of me.

This phrase is a fragment and should be connected to the previous sentence.

× From the day I born until now.

✓ From the day I was born until now.

The past tense of 'bear' in passive form is 'was born'.

× I want to dedicate this song for them.

✓ I want to dedicate this song to them.

The verb 'dedicate' is followed by the preposition 'to', not 'for'.

× As much as I want to tell them how I love them the most.

✓ I also want to tell them how much I love them.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear; rephrasing improves clarity and grammar.

× Absolutely.

✓ Absolutely,

As a response, 'Absolutely' should be followed by a comma if continuing the sentence.

× I always think singing can bring happiness to people.

✓ I always think singing can bring happiness to people.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× As singing can.

✓ Singing can

'As singing can.' is a fragment; it should be connected to the following clause.

× Express our gratitude, our feelings.

✓ express our gratitude and our feelings.

This phrase is a fragment and should be connected to the previous clause with a verb and conjunction.