Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有很多语法和发音错误，导致表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，注意发音和语法，避免重复和无意义的词汇。可以尝试用简单明了的句子表达喜欢唱歌的原因，并补充具体细节。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me reduce stress and feel happy. Also, singing with others can help build good relationships since we share the same hobby.

提案: 回答中语法混乱，表达不连贯。建议先明确回答是否学过唱歌，然后简洁说明学习方式和未来计划。注意句子完整和逻辑连贯。

例: I have not taken formal singing lessons, but I learned by watching videos online. Singing is my hobby, but I don't plan to become a professional singer in the future.

提案: 回答不够清晰，句子断断续续。建议直接回答想为谁唱歌，并说明原因。使用连贯的句子表达观点，避免重复。

例: I want to sing for my friends because singing can make them happy and show my passion for music.

提案: 回答中有很多语法和词汇错误，表达不清晰。建议用完整句子说明唱歌如何带来快乐，举例说明其作用。注意词汇的准确使用和句子连贯。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because beautiful songs can reduce people's stress and make them feel joyful. The melody often stays in our minds and lifts our mood.

× I like seeing be 'cause I think saying can reduce my stress and bring.

✓ I like singing because I think singing can reduce my stress and bring.

这里'seeing'和'saying'应为动名词形式'singing'，表示喜欢唱歌。动词后接动名词表示喜欢的动作。

× Me Fantastic failing.

✓ It makes me feel fantastic.

原句结构混乱，缺少谓语动词，需补充完整句子表达感受。

× I always through seeing too.

✓ I always enjoy singing too.

原句语法错误，'through seeing'不合适，应使用动词表达喜欢唱歌。

× Country built a relationship with others because I think we have common hobby.

✓ Singing builds relationships with others because I think we have a common hobby.

'Country built'错误，应为'singing builds'，且'hobby'前需加冠词'a'。

× Is easier.

✓ It is easier.

缺少主语，应加上'It'使句子完整。

× I actually am not a face ovation to learn so I just found some video in the website and follow it.

✓ I actually am not a fan of learning, so I just found some videos on the website and followed them.

'face ovation'应为'fan of'，'follow'应为过去式'followed'，'video'复数形式。

× I just found some video in the website and follow it.

✓ I just found some videos on the website and followed them.

介词应为'on the website'，且视频应为复数，动词时态应一致。

× Add butter in the future I don't want.

✓ But in the future, I don't want to be a singer.

原句表达不完整，缺少情态动词和完整结构。

× Personally I won't sing for my friend because I think.

✓ Personally, I won't sing for my friends because I think...

'friend'应为复数形式'friends'，且句子应完整。

× Sing can bring. Happy and make make them feel fantastic an I also think think Ann.

✓ Singing can bring happiness and make them feel fantastic. I also think...

句子结构混乱，重复单词，需调整为完整正确句子。

× Show my hobby. And space.

✓ It shows my hobby and personality.

'space'用词不当，应为'personality'或其他合适名词。

× Yes, of course, becauses some saying. Swards.

✓ Yes, of course, because some songs and words...

拼写错误，'becauses'应为'because'，'saying'应为'songs'，'swards'应为'words'。

× Can bring lovely and fantastic.

✓ Can bring love and fantastic feelings.

'lovely'用词不当，应为名词'love'，使表达更准确。

× It can reduce people. Pressures.

✓ It can reduce people's pressure.

'people pressures'表达不自然，应为'people's pressure'。

× And the melody is very. Quickly.

✓ And the melody is very fast.

'quickly'是副词，修饰动词，形容词'fast'更适合修饰'melody'。