Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然且存在语法错误，表达不清晰。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复和语法错误。可以先直接回答喜欢或不喜欢，然后给出具体原因。

例: Honestly, I don't like singing because I think my voice is not very good. Also, I prefer playing musical instruments, so I focus more on that.

提案: 回答语法和表达混乱，信息不明确。建议用简单句清楚表达学习经历和老师的建议，避免不相关或错误的词汇。

例: Yes, I once took singing lessons, but my teacher said I was not very talented. He suggested I try other areas that suit me better.

提案: 回答中有多处语法和词汇错误，表达不清晰。建议直接回答想为谁唱歌，并说明原因，使用正确的词汇和句子结构。

例: I want to sing for my mom because she means a lot to me. I especially want to sing for her on her birthday to make her happy.

提案: 回答表达不够流畅，语法错误较多。建议用简单明了的句子表达观点，并用具体例子支持。

例: Absolutely yes. Singing can improve our mood and make us feel happier. For example, when I sing, I feel more relaxed and joyful.

× And to be frankly, I don't like singing 'cause I think my sound is very terribles.

✓ And to be frank, I don't like singing because I think my voice is very terrible.

这里“to be frankly”是错误的副词用法，正确用法是“to be frank”，表示“坦白地说”。另外，“sound”应改为“voice”更符合语境，“terribles”应为形容词单数形式“terrible”。

× In other reason is that I have no interest in seeing is because I can, because I want to start with the instruments and music instrument.

✓ Another reason is that I have no interest in singing because I want to start with instruments and musical instruments.

句中“in other reason”应为“another reason”，且“seeing”应为“singing”。“because I can”不合逻辑，应删除。重复使用“music instrument”应改为复数形式“musical instruments”。

× Yes, I once learned how to sing while but the results is too bad in the teachers they said that I was portent.

✓ Yes, I once learned how to sing, but the results were too bad and the teachers said that I was poor.

“results is”主谓不一致，应为“results were”。“portent”用词错误，应为“poor”表示“差”。句子结构混乱，需调整。

× It's in this field. He suggests me to find another fields as I am interesting an that Allen Tate.

✓ In this field, he suggested that I find another field because I am not interested in this one.

“He suggests me”应为“he suggested that I”。“interesting”应为“interested”。“another fields”应为单数“another field”。句子结构需调整使其通顺。

× I want to save, I want to sing for my mom because she is my best person in my life and she bored me.

✓ I want to sing for my mom because she is the most important person in my life and she supports me.

“save”应为“sing”。“bored me”用法错误，应为“supports me”或类似表达。

× And will he have birthday parties? I always want to say that's birthday sound to her.

✓ And when she has birthday parties, I always want to say happy birthday to her.

“will he have”应为“when she has”。“say that's birthday sound”应为“say happy birthday”。

× Absolutely yes, because when we are saying we can receive the happiness from each part of the body languages or our moods and even makes me more happier than the we are not saying.

✓ Absolutely yes, because when we are singing, we can receive happiness from body language and our moods, and it even makes me happier than when we are not singing.

“saying”应为“singing”。“each part of the body languages”表达不当，应为“body language”。“more happier”是比较级错误，应为“happier”。“the we are not saying”应为“when we are not singing”。