Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Tu respuesta es clara y directa, pero podrías mejorar la naturalidad y la gramática. Por ejemplo, en lugar de "I love it since when I was a child", sería mejor decir "I have loved it since I was a child". Además, evita repetir ideas similares como "It makes me feel so relax" y "It makes me happy"; podrías combinarlas para ser más conciso y natural.

例: Yes, I have loved singing since I was a child because it helps me relax and express my emotions, which makes me very happy.

提案: Tu respuesta tiene buenas ideas, pero la estructura y la gramática necesitan mejorar para sonar más natural. Por ejemplo, "I really enjoy it that classes" debería ser "I really enjoyed those classes". Además, evita fragmentos como "Because it was very rewarding for me" que no están conectados correctamente; usa conectores para unir ideas.

例: Yes, I took singing classes when I was about 7 or 8 years old, and I really enjoyed them because they were very rewarding and helped me communicate my emotions.

提案: Tu respuesta es honesta, pero podrías mejorar la fluidez y la precisión. Por ejemplo, en lugar de "I suppose", podrías usar "I believe" para sonar más seguro. También, podrías expandir un poco con una razón más clara para cada grupo.

例: I would like to sing for my family because they are supportive and don't judge me, and also for my friends who enjoy music as much as I do.

提案: Hay varios errores gramaticales y de vocabulario que afectan la claridad. Por ejemplo, "couldn't brace people" no tiene sentido; probablemente quisiste decir "can help people". También, "to fill the freedom" no es correcto; mejor usar "to feel free". Trata de usar frases más simples y correctas para expresar tus ideas.

例: Yes, of course. I think singing can help people express their emotions and feel free. It is well known that singing brings a lot of happiness.

× I love it since when I was a child.

✓ I have loved it since I was a child.

The sentence uses 'love' in present tense with 'since' which requires present perfect tense to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. Use 'have loved' instead of 'love'.

× It makes me feel so relax.

✓ It makes me feel so relaxed.

The adjective 'relax' is incorrect here; the correct past participle adjective form is 'relaxed' to describe the feeling caused by singing.

× I took some singing classes and I really enjoy it that classes.

✓ I took some singing classes and I really enjoyed those classes.

The verb 'enjoy' should be in past tense 'enjoyed' to match the past action 'took'. Also, 'that classes' is incorrect; 'those classes' is the correct demonstrative pronoun for plural.

× Because it was very rewarding for me.

✓ It was very rewarding for me.

Starting a sentence with 'Because' without completing the thought creates a sentence fragment. It should be combined with the previous sentence or rephrased as a complete sentence.

× An I could communicate my emotions throw that classes.

✓ And I could communicate my emotions through those classes.

'An' is a typo for 'And'. 'Throw' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'through'. Also, 'that classes' should be 'those classes' for plural.

× Maybe for my family because they don't judge me, I suppose, or for my friends.

✓ Maybe for my family because they don't judge me, I suppose, or for my friends.

No correction needed; pronouns are used correctly here.

× I think that singing couldn't brace people to feel their own emotions, to feel free, to fill the freedom.

✓ I think that singing can help people to feel their own emotions, to feel free, to feel freedom.

'Couldn't brace' is incorrect; 'can help' or 'could help' is appropriate to express possibility. 'Fill the freedom' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'feel freedom'.