Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and lacks coherence. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific reasons with linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, say you like singing because it helps you feel better when sad or lonely, and mention the types of songs you enjoy.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel better when I am sad or lonely. For instance, I often listen to and sing Punjabi and Hindi songs, which cheer me up and relax me.

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains some unclear words and lacks linking words. Try to use correct vocabulary and connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid short fragmented sentences. For example, explain that you haven't learned singing but enjoy listening because it helps you relax and you wish to learn in the future.

例: No, I have never learned how to sing, but I would love to learn someday. Whenever I feel sad or lonely, I usually listen to songs because they help me relax and lift my mood. I think singing would be wonderful to express myself.

提案: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Try to answer directly by naming a person or group you want to sing for, and explain why. Use clear sentences and avoid unrelated or confusing phrases.

例: I want to sing for my family and friends because their support means a lot to me. Also, I admire my favorite singer, and I hope to inspire others like him through my singing.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting minor errors and using more precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, explain how singing relaxes the mind and body, and helps express emotions, leading to happiness.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps to relax both the mind and body. For example, when people sing their favorite songs, they often feel joyful and less stressed. Moreover, singing allows us to express our emotions, which makes us feel more positive and content.

× Yes I like singing whenever I feel sad or lonely less then I always zoom listen, sing and listen to songs and most of reference I giving to singing.

✓ Yes, I like singing whenever I feel sad or lonely. Then I always listen, sing, and listen to songs, and most of my preference is given to singing.

The original sentence has incorrect quantifiers and unclear phrasing such as 'less then' and 'most of reference I giving to singing'. The phrase 'less then' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'then'. Also, 'most of reference' is incorrect; it should be 'most of my preference'. Proper quantifiers and clearer sentence structure improve understanding.

× Punjabi and Hindi songs I singing.

✓ I sing Punjabi and Hindi songs.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'I singing' instead of the correct verb form 'I sing'. Also, the word order is awkward. The subject 'I' should be followed by the verb 'sing' and then the object 'Punjabi and Hindi songs'.

× No, I have never learned how to sync but I would love to learn someday.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing but I would love to learn someday.

The word 'sync' is a spelling error; the correct word is 'sing'. The tense 'have never learned' is correct here as it refers to past experience up to now.

× Whenever I feel sad or lonely, I usually listen to songs because they're mamela dois.

✓ Whenever I feel sad or lonely, I usually listen to songs because they're melodious.

The phrase 'mamela dois' is unclear and seems to be a mispronunciation or misspelling. The intended adjective is likely 'melodious', which describes songs that are pleasant to hear.

× Helps me relax and lift my mood.

✓ They help me relax and lift my mood.

The original sentence lacks a subject. Adding 'They' clarifies that 'songs' help to relax and lift mood, making the sentence complete.

× I always prefer digita searches.

✓ I always prefer digital searches.

The phrase 'digita searches' is incorrect; it should be 'digital searches'. However, the meaning is unclear in context; possibly the student meant 'digital sources' or 'digital music'. The pronoun use is not the main issue here but the word choice.

× He is my favorite singer. His boys very very nice.

✓ He is my favorite singer. His voice is very, very nice.

'His boys' is incorrect; likely the student meant 'his voice'. Correcting the noun clarifies the meaning.

× His songs are fabulous.

✓ His songs are fabulous.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× I want to become a singer. I want. From learner flown from dealt with such.

✓ I want to become a singer. I want to learn from experienced singers and improve my skills.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rewriting it with proper sentence structure and clear meaning improves comprehension.

× Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps helps to relax both the mind and body.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps to relax both the mind and body.

The word 'helps' is repeated twice. Removing the duplicate corrects the sentence.

× For example, when people sing their favorite songs, they often feel joyful and less red.

✓ For example, when people sing their favorite songs, they often feel joyful and less stressed.

The word 'red' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is likely 'stressed', which fits the meaning of feeling better emotionally.

× Singing also allows us to express our emotion, which can make us feel more positive and content.

✓ Singing also allows us to express our emotions, which can make us feel more positive and content.

The word 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' because it refers to various feelings people express.