Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit confusing and redundant. Try to give a clear and direct response first, then explain your reason with simple and correct sentences. Avoid double negatives and unclear phrases.

例: I don't really like singing because I think my voice is not suitable for it.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, use correct vocabulary like 'singing class' instead of 'singing glass'.

例: I have never seriously learnt how to sing because, although my parents wanted me to join a singing class, I was not interested, so I decided not to attend.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by making it more concise and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid informal phrases like 'So yeah' in formal speaking.

例: If I get the chance to sing in the future, I would definitely like to sing for my parents because they have invested a lot of time, effort, and money in raising me.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to give a clear opinion first, then explain with specific examples using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and awkward phrasing.

例: I think singing can bring happiness to many people because it reminds them of joyful moments. However, for some, it might bring back sad memories depending on their experiences.

× If I consider myself, I don't consider I don't like singing because I think my voice isn't suitable for singing candidate.

✓ If I consider myself, I don't think I like singing because I think my voice isn't suitable for a singing candidate.

The phrase 'I don't consider I don't like singing' is incorrect because 'consider' is not used with 'I don't' in this way. The correct verb to express opinion here is 'think'. Also, 'singing candidate' needs an article 'a' before it.

× I haven't really put much effort in singing from my childhood, although my parents didn't want it to have me enrolled in a singing glass, but my interest wasn't there so I had to back out.

✓ I haven't really put much effort into singing since my childhood, although my parents wanted me to be enrolled in a singing class, but my interest wasn't there so I had to back out.

The correct preposition after 'put much effort' is 'into', not 'in'. Also, 'from my childhood' should be 'since my childhood' to indicate the starting point of the action. 'Didn't want it to have me enrolled' is incorrect; it should be 'wanted me to be enrolled'. 'Singing glass' is a typo and should be 'singing class'.

× If somewhere in future I have the chance to sing, I would definitely like to sing for my parents, for all the efforts and time and money they have put into me. So yeah.

✓ If somewhere in the future I have the chance to sing, I would definitely like to sing for my parents, for all the effort, time, and money they have put into me. So yeah.

The phrase 'in future' should be 'in the future' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'efforts' is better as 'effort' in this context as a non-count noun. The rest is correct.

× Will it depends. For some people, singing can point out to some happy memories of their life, while for others it may bring out a memory that is not very. Happy for them all, reminds them of some sad memory.

✓ It depends. For some people, singing can bring out some happy memories of their life, while for others it may bring out a memory that is not very happy for them, and reminds them of some sad memory.

'Will it depends' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'It depends'. 'Can point out to' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'bring out'. The sentence was fragmented and needed restructuring for clarity and correctness.