Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and coherence. Try to form complete sentences and explain your reasons more clearly. Avoid incomplete phrases and ensure your answer is natural and effective within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and relieve stress. I like to sing freely whatever songs I enjoy, which makes me feel relaxed and happy.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Provide a direct response with clear supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I have learnt how to sing. I was a member of an a cappella group and attended many masterclasses and private singing lessons to improve my skills.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some repetition. Try to respond directly, clarify your ideas, and use linking words to make your answer coherent and natural.

例: If I could sing for someone, I would choose my husband because singing allows me to express my feelings and emotions to him. Alternatively, I would like to sing for a celebrity as a special experience.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and better structured. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid redundancy for a more natural and effective response.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express themselves freely. Everyone has their favourite songs, and singing them, whether in a big performance or alone at home, helps people feel joyful and authentic.

× Yes, I do like singing because I can express what. My stress an. I can sing whatever I like an do it freely.

✓ Yes, I do like singing because I can express myself and relieve my stress. I can sing whatever I like and do it freely.

The original sentence has incomplete and fragmented clauses, making it unclear. 'Express what' is incomplete; it should be 'express myself'. 'My stress an' is unclear and likely intended as 'relieve my stress'. Also, 'an' is used incorrectly instead of 'and'. Correcting these improves clarity and sentence structure.

× Yes, I was. A member of in acquire an I also. Sing quite a lot in a cappella group, so I've talked so many Master class or private singing class.

✓ Yes, I was a member of a choir and I also sing quite a lot in an a cappella group, so I've attended many masterclasses or private singing classes.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains incorrect word choices and structure. 'A member of in acquire an' is nonsensical; it should be 'a member of a choir'. 'I've talked so many Master class' is incorrect; it should be 'I've attended many masterclasses'. Correcting these improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× I don't really get the question but if I can sing for someone I think I would like to sing for my husband an because I can express what I feel an all my emotions to him or if the other way then I would like to sing for a celebrity.

✓ I don't really understand the question, but if I could sing for someone, I think I would like to sing for my husband because I can express what I feel and all my emotions to him. Otherwise, I would like to sing for a celebrity.

The sentence is long and confusing with incorrect conjunctions and incomplete phrases. 'An' is used incorrectly instead of 'and'. 'If the other way then' is unclear and should be 'Otherwise'. Breaking the sentence into two and correcting conjunctions improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes I do because in singing you can sing whatever you like. Different people have different favorite song and if you are singing your favorite song then you can just be yourself and no matter in a big performance or you just sing solo in your house is also a good way to express.

✓ Yes, I do because when singing, you can sing whatever you like. Different people have different favourite songs, and if you are singing your favourite song, you can just be yourself. Whether in a big performance or singing solo in your house, it is also a good way to express yourself.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and grammatical errors such as 'in singing' instead of 'when singing', 'favorite song' instead of plural 'favourite songs', and missing subjects in clauses. Also, 'no matter in a big performance or you just sing solo' is unclear and should be 'whether in a big performance or singing solo'. Correcting these improves sentence flow and grammatical accuracy.